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Shaucker

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« Reply #680 on: 03-21-2004 00:12 »

Oh....yeah. That's true, I guess. Sorry..
Venus

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« Reply #681 on: 03-21-2004 06:41 »

Well, the only place in New England i've ever been is Rhode Island so i'm not surprised that my guess on Munda's accent would be waaaay off base.

Oh, and the fic i'm writing is about what was going on while Leela was in her coma during The Sting. And it goes back and forth between Fry at Leela's bedside, and how the Turanga's were reacting. And then after Leela wakes up it goes to being about Leela's relationships with Fry and her parents while she stays with her parents during her medical leave. I'm only halfway through it. I always wanted them to do an ep that dealt with Leela learning how to relate to her family after years of being alone, so that's why i decided to include the recovery period rather than just ending it with her waking up.   
bish

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« Reply #682 on: 03-21-2004 06:42 »

 
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Originally posted by Venus:
that's the problem with serial fics. That's why i think it's best to release a fic all in one go. You can't dissapoint anyone that way.

well unless its a dissapointing story...
Rhodan

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« Reply #683 on: 03-21-2004 09:54 »

 
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Originally posted by Venus:

Oh, and the fic i'm writing is about what was going on while Leela was in her coma during The Sting. And it goes back and forth between Fry at Leela's bedside, and how the Turanga's were reacting. And then after Leela wakes up it goes to being about Leela's relationships with Fry and her parents while she stays with her parents during her medical leave. I'm only halfway through it. I always wanted them to do an ep that dealt with Leela learning how to relate to her family after years of being alone, so that's why i decided to include the recovery period rather than just ending it with her waking up.   
I´am very looking forward to this!

Shaucker

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« Reply #684 on: 03-21-2004 18:16 »

 
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Originally posted by Venus:
 I always wanted them to do an ep that dealt with Leela learning how to relate to her family after years of being alone, so that's why i decided to include the recovery period rather than just ending it with her waking up.   

I had an idea like that a while back too, but I'd deal with it differently, I think. Your story sounds great, can't wait for it.

If you don't eat meat, you'll break out in vaginas.
Ol´coot

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« Reply #685 on: 03-22-2004 11:23 »
« Last Edit on: 03-22-2004 11:23 »

 
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Originally posted by Venus:
I always wanted them to do an ep that dealt with Leela learning how to relate to her family after years of being alone 

I am looking forward to your 'Sting' fic Venus. I also wanted to see more development of Leela's relationship with her parents, it will be interesting to see your take.. Your spoilers have been great BTW, your writing definately does NOT s*ck...   big grin
BumbleBeeTheta

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« Reply #686 on: 03-25-2004 00:57 »

I really enjoyed the latest chapter in Kryten's Cat-astrophe fic.  Kryten's always been a good writer, but I love this one.  He's got the characters pretty much nailed down pat, and there's plenty of that Groening humor we all know and love.  Kudos, Kryten, for another job well done!  smile
fryfanSpyOrama

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« Reply #687 on: 03-25-2004 11:35 »

I've read Kryten's Catastrophe Part 4 and it was good,looking forward to the next chapter.
Venus

Urban Legend
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« Reply #688 on: 03-25-2004 15:20 »

Yes, much love for catastrophe 4!
Venus

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« Reply #689 on: 03-26-2004 16:02 »

Do my eyes deceive me? An entire UOM chapter where Alesia isn't even mentioned once? Hurray!

Anyway, great chapter even though the insinuation of Daneilla and the hollowshed really creeped me out. How long till part 25? Is it gonna be really huge?
Kif White

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« Reply #690 on: 03-26-2004 16:38 »

My planned release date is somewhere around Easter. There's a lot written so far, but there's a lot to go, and that Easter break should ensure time for finishing it off  smile
Allen

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« Reply #691 on: 03-26-2004 19:59 »

I can't even describe how much I loved this latest chapter of UoM. I finally got who Daniela was supposed to be and laughed in my special 'mad scientist' version. Anyway, everything was great, except that Baldur was unexpected. There was no clue he would lean that way at all. Normally, I don't mind unexpected, but it seemed unusal. The rest is great though.
bish

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« Reply #692 on: 03-28-2004 12:06 »

brilliant chapter, the only bad point being i have to wait some more till i get to read the end. however Im hoping that it comes out soon as then i can re-read it all, probably the best fan fiction series written so far.
spacepilot3000

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« Reply #693 on: 03-30-2004 00:19 »

Anyone have any comments on "The Fry-Trix Rebooted"? Other than "it needs originality" (it's not a rip off I swear. It just follows the same story as "Revolutions" with a few notable diffrences). Anything would be appreciated.
Venus

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« Reply #694 on: 03-30-2004 00:27 »

not trying to be mean or anything, but if it follows the same story, and has some of the same characters, then how is it not a rip?
fryfanSpyOrama

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« Reply #695 on: 03-30-2004 00:30 »

What did people think of the ending for From SCAM With Hate?
Allen

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« Reply #696 on: 03-30-2004 04:18 »
« Last Edit on: 03-30-2004 04:18 »

I can't stress this enough Fryfan: You...need...an...editor...ba dly! I'll go back and suffer through it later. I'll let you know what I think then. I'm sorry, but the grammar mistakes and spelling errors make it hard for me to enjoy it. I know I slip up, but you do it constantly.

Edit: My review of the story: Meh. You still need an editor. I don't know. I can't really laugh at any of the jokes. I have this feeling you could do better and the makings are there. Fix the grammar, try subtle humor a little, etc.
spacepilot3000

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« Reply #697 on: 03-30-2004 11:14 »

Let me correct my statement.

It has some of the same characters I'll admit that. The way the story flows is completly diffrent. There is no Zion, No machine city, No Deus Ex Machina, Fry cannot see into the Future I've of course made a few notable diffrences in the story.

fryfanSpyOrama

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« Reply #698 on: 04-03-2004 00:33 »

I just read part two of "Love Hurts" by Demon of the sky.  It was great.  If you love Fry/Amy fanfics, this is one to read.  This and "The Oyster Syndrome" by Kryten.
Ol´coot

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« Reply #699 on: 04-03-2004 18:53 »
« Last Edit on: 04-03-2004 18:53 »

"Love Hurts" is shaping up to be quite a good read and I am looking forward to more! I had a lot of trouble getting onto FanFic.net earlier. Naturally my suspicions fell on the F-L shippers    big grin They can be so.... *intense*     wink
Kryten

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« Reply #700 on: 04-04-2004 03:03 »

 
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Originally posted by fryfanSpyOrama:
I just read part two of "Love Hurts" by Demon of the sky.  It was great.  If you love Fry/Amy fanfics, this is one to read.  This and "The Oyster Syndrome" by Kryten.

There's a part 2 now?

*seeks it out*
DrJohnZ

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« Reply #701 on: 04-05-2004 21:02 »
« Last Edit on: 04-05-2004 21:02 »

Well I for one like BumbleBeeTheta's writing, I love her story "A Helping Hand". I honestly stared at my screen for 5 minutes in awe at the end of that story, and thanks to that story, I've decided to write one myself which I'll release in the near future (I'm still working on the story-line). I'll post a new topic when I finish it. If any other Web-site owners would like to host my story, feel free to send me your site name (E-mail in my profile) and you'll be the first to get it.
fryfanSpyOrama

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« Reply #702 on: 04-14-2004 23:52 »

 
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Originally posted by Allen:
I can't stress this enough Fryfan: You...need...an...editor...ba dly! I'll go back and suffer through it later. I'll let you know what I think then. I'm sorry, but the grammar mistakes and spelling errors make it hard for me to enjoy it. I know I slip up, but you do it constantly.

Edit: My review of the story: Meh. You still need an editor. I don't know. I can't really laugh at any of the jokes. I have this feeling you could do better and the makings are there. Fix the grammar, try subtle humor a little, etc.

Can you be more specific as what you mean with the jokes?  I had written a lot in the story. I thought the satires were good and so did silvertide, who's a big GI Joe fan.

Allen

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« Reply #703 on: 04-15-2004 00:13 »

Been way too long since G.I. Joe and I wasn't a fan, so if they were jokes about it, I wouldn't know. If you must have your list, I'll get back to you.
fryfanSpyOrama

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« Reply #704 on: 04-15-2004 11:35 »
« Last Edit on: 04-15-2004 11:35 »

Well, there was Scam Commander who a a parody of three people.  The Archduke from Star Wars, Cobra Commander and The Cat from the Red Dwarf Novels.  Barados Slim was a parody of Dooku, Jaws from James Bond and Destro from GI Joe. There was the doop commandos with Commander Doop.  And that where I had someone on fire and somebdoy told him to stop drop and roll, that was a parody of the old Public Servie Announcements, GI Joe used to do.  I had Mom say the line "This I Command.." parody of Serpento, leader of Cobra.
bish

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« Reply #705 on: 04-15-2004 11:47 »

i get all those now... damn, its been too long, im off to dig up happy memories by watching GI Joe (and action force) videos and playing with my toys, YO JOE!!
fryfanSpyOrama

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« Reply #706 on: 04-15-2004 15:12 »

I thought the idea of bringing the spirit of GI Joe back and parody it would attract readers.
Rhodan

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« Reply #707 on: 04-17-2004 11:31 »
« Last Edit on: 04-17-2004 11:31 »

I´am very pleased by finally completed story "Leela´s bracelet"- now on both "The Leela zone" and fanfiction.net.
Venus

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« Reply #708 on: 04-29-2004 00:02 »

Read final chapter of UOM. Am now traumatised and depressed.
Zed 85

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« Reply #709 on: 04-29-2004 03:58 »

Oh great, I can now really look forward to the final chapter. Cheers Venus  tongue
bish

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« Reply #710 on: 04-29-2004 11:00 »

 
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Originally posted by Venus:
Read final chapter of UOM. Am now traumatised and depressed.

i agree,  i cried (macho man tears) at the end. i espiecially liked the way the story started and finished with a description of blackness. however do i hear the sound of a sequel?
Allen

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« Reply #711 on: 04-29-2004 12:18 »

Well, not sure that was the best way to end UoM. The Universe seems darker than ever. I cried, but because I was at school, I had to be quiet. It was ok, some of the last parts made it a bit unbelievable. Not sure that an explanation would have done any better.

My final opinion is this. The story was excellent, but the the last chapter was too heartbreaking for me. 
Venus

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« Reply #712 on: 04-29-2004 17:21 »

 
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Originally posted by Allen:
The Universe seems darker than ever.


Exactly. There was no light at the end of that tunnel. It made everything seem so hopeless. I need my silver lining Damnit!
Farnsworth38

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« Reply #713 on: 04-29-2004 17:56 »

Well, it brought a tear to the eye of this sentimental old fool. As for being too heartbreaking, I disagree: cruel as it is, real life is like that. And I thought Leela’s personality came across particularly well, she acted just as I would have expected her to. I can see the opening scene of the sequel now...
In all, very well done.
Venus

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« Reply #714 on: 04-29-2004 18:17 »

Ol´coot

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« Reply #715 on: 04-29-2004 19:13 »

 
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Originally posted by Venus:
Read final chapter of UOM. Am now traumatised and depressed.

Ahh Venus, when I read it I immediately thought that you would have that reaction.. I was more surprised myself - getting rid of Fry is burning the bridge after all. It was quite a dramatic scene though and quite moving.

I did think that the memorial was well done (although I would have preferred a shorter stint by Bender). The final scene with Leela was very well done imo. I like to read people's takes on the characters and Kif did a good job with Leela.

It is probably just as well we didn't find out who was pregnant, The F-L shippers  had a rough time with the whole epic and they needed a break...  hmpf
Ol´coot

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« Reply #716 on: 04-29-2004 19:33 »

Background Noise, part 8 is up to Dave's high quality standards. He weaves such interesting sub plots in his story that I can't tell from one moment to the next which I find more compelling. There are so many to choose from;

My ultimate fave is about Fry wanting and trying to grow-up finally. Dave has crafted such a believable back-story on how Fry became Fry that it makes perfect sense. When I read about Fry's reactions to his situation I found myself actually rooting for him...  eek

The thing with the SF Major and Rand is really getting interesting. I was kinda cool toward it at first but I am looking forward to more about them!

I also will impatiently wait to see what Dave has in store for Leela - what her feelings are and how she deals with them. Any bets?   wink

Finally the machinations of MOM (sign of cross) and the politico officers are choice stuff! They help show Mom as the cynical old dragon we know she is!  big grin  Besides, I wouldn't mind seeing Leo and Inez taken down a notch or several!   evil laugh

To top it all off, there are so many familiar names woven into the story it is like a family renunion (the good kind!) I nearly fell out of my chair when the shuttle pilot made her appearance! Nice job Dave!

In closing it is more choice stuff from Dave. (And I am NOT saying that because he made me a captain!))

Capt. Coot  tongue
Kif White

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« Reply #717 on: 04-30-2004 00:03 »

I'll field this all in spoiler space...


- Kenneth White

"Television is filled with wacky people, and wacky was invented by people who aren't funny ." -- Billy West




Thanks to Daniela (TheLesbianLeela) for the neat signature.
Venus

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« Reply #718 on: 04-30-2004 00:39 »

Hey kif, was there anything in your story that you added/removed/changed based on things that came up in eps or by things that readers said?  And did you have the ending planned way back when you first started writing?
Kif White

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« Reply #719 on: 04-30-2004 04:26 »

Interesting query actually. A few things changed from what readers said or from the show. The most notable one was from Allen commenting how Baldur and Zapp didn't add much aside from comic relief. Until then I realised I had no real plans for them, but then I changed that and added the Chaos Renegades to give it some more variety. You yourself Venus kept reminding me to make full use of the emotions going on between the characters so that I used them fully.

The most major change to do with the show was that I was going to have the staff piece that landed on Earth cause the extinction of the dinosaurs, but then "The Why of Fry" had the Giant Brain doing it instead, so I changed it. I can't recall much else off the top of my head... other than small things like introducing the concept of The Other that was never brought up previously.

A few other things kind of evolved more as they went. Alesia, for example, wasn't going to feature quite as much originally. Nibbler was going to actually be killed early on in the story, hence those dreams Leela had, but I kept finding reasons to keep him alive.

Now, as for the ending...


Well, I've rambled enough about that. Hope than answers your queries, Venus?  smile
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