Fan Fiction Raviews

[Reply #120 on:]

little late to change that now is it not?

also, it is because they are newlyweds, but there is still another driving reason. you will find out soon enough.

[Reply #121 on:]

 

Originally posted by Margarita:
<getak> bal bla bla what do you think about my stories?
<people> it stinks
<getak> FUCK OFF YOU SHOULDNT POST IF YOU DONT LIKE MY FANFIC

 

[Reply #122 on:]

so, a few new fan fics out there. guess they should be reviewed.

rebooted part one, good story, but it has a few flaws. i mainly thought leela was a bit out of character toward the end of this one. i mean, going for bender's cure over fry, then just turning back? i would have thought that she would go for fry over the drunken stupid robot, but it's their story, im just reviewing it.

also, as for time runs short, that story seems to run a little short. the parts are very small really, and i hope it ends, unlike how i have seen it on other websites. could really use an ending. hope the writter of that one can answer my question....

[Reply #123 on:]

well, time runs short four is out, and well, as if it wasn't totally unexpected it was unbearably short. it is just so good, so full of life, interesting, shippy...why must it be cut off right when it just starts getting good? that is my question to the author. frankly the entire four part series is about the size of one adequetly sized fan fic.

IMHO the author should have held onto their ideas and kept them growing ever adding to them and adjusting them to their needs before putting out even the first part. of course, the author may just be making the story a little ironic of how it is called time runs short and it is alwas in really really short parts, or they just want to torture people like me. who can say? well, them, but nobody else i bet.....

[Reply #124 on:]

I love "Time Runs Short". Excellent writing there - it really got to me. The parts are a bit short, but they are very tastefully written, and good things come in small doses.

[Reply #125 on:]

I'm planning on writing a fanfic which I'll release one painstaking sentence at a time.  Here's a preview of Part 247 for you:

"Fry walked into the suicide booth"

[Reply #126 on:]

that's just so evil, and yet so cool all at the same time...

[Reply #127 on:]

 

Originally posted by getak2003:
that's just so evil, and yet so cool all at the same time...

Speaking of being evil, you planning to finish up and post up part 9 of your series sometime this month or what?

[Reply #128 on:]

just sent it off to Grahm. should be up soon, i hope. anyway, thanks for proofreading it. i know it is really large, and you must have spent a good amount of time fixing errors. it was spot free actually, you even changed some of the names i got wrong in there too. thanks alot!

[Reply #129 on:]

Over the past week or so I have been reading &#8220;Futurama: Universe of Malice&#8221; by Kenneth White at TLZ, and at this moment I&#8217;m hanging off the edge of my chair after reading the ninth installment and eagerly awaiting the tenth. If anyone has not read this detailed and deep fan fiction I highly recommend it and I&#8217;m simply writing this post to gush over it. This fic is truly elegant; the tale flows through the chapters, shifting to individual groups of characters and their part and struggles, which all eventually lead up to the main plot line. There is never a dull moment, and constant surprises. It introduces new, original three-dimensional characters with mysterious and interesting pasts and takes the characters we know and love to a new level and learn more about what they are thinking and how they are feeling. I find that the typical fan fiction generally stays on one predictable level, usually mimicking an incident that happened in the show or ends with Leela and Fry calling each other by their first names and madly in love (even though these can be great stories and fun to read when you need a little predictable &#8220;hit&#8221;, but this story is far from the average fan fiction and seems to take what the creators of Futurama have given us and twisted it to the authors imagination.) I love the story because if feels realistic and fantastic all the same time and I want to give kudos to the author for their detailed, creative work&#8230;.and keep kickin&#8217; out those chapters I cant wait to read the next one!

(ps I hope I didn&#8217;t insult any shipper writers lol I still read and love your fics I just wanted to illustrate how different this fic is from the average.  I&#8217;m even working on a shipper diddy myself and its pretty stereotypical, but I guess we need that senseless romance sometimes and the writiers of Futurama couldn&#8217;t hand it to us so I guess we just have to do it ourselves&#8230;lol)

[Reply #130 on:]

Welcome to PEEL, gwen! 

[Reply #131 on:]

why thank you

[Reply #132 on:]

You're welcome. 

[Reply #133 on:]

i would like to say that universe of malice is most likely the best fan fic for futurama on the web to date, aside from my own, but that is just author's bias speaking....

the characters all seem to be in character in the fic, but the introduction of Alisia (spelling?) is a nice development. she keeps me guessing, why is she helping fry? what is her troubled past? do fry and her have some chemestry? especially now that they know their names and not much more? well, i can't say, but the author can.

as for new three dimensional characters, i am planning to introduce a blast from the past one into my fan fic come part ten. if nine ever gets up that is. i should check on it's progress... anyhow, he will be a really cool guy, who hides some secrets from everyone, hates nibbler for some reason, dislikes the insolent AI of the future, and helps the crew in their crusade against Ra. his introduction will mark the end of the middle non-action filled part of my fic (you know after the shippy love parts) and the begginging of the action filled last third of the tale.

mail me for an advanced issue, oath of secrecy required. getak2003@hotmail.com

[Reply #134 on:]

I've had time to review Universe of Malice. It's very good. Nice development of characters. Some are a little off, but no one's perfect and it's not a long stretch either.

Getak, please get over yourself. Your story is by no means the next wonder of the world you claim it is. It's just a bit less crappy than some of the others I've seen. In the Outlet's time I saw a lot believe me.

I've tried really hard to go in and like each part, but your writing and so far bad plot ideas make this impossible. The story's only hope is if those last parts do a really nice cleanup.

I realize this is just opinion, but so is that "my story is the best" thing you got going. At least you admit that it's bias. So I'll be waiting to see how the story turns out. If it's good, I'll say so. If it's bad, I'll say so.

P.S. I would make specific examples, but can't be bothered right now. Maybe later.

[Reply #135 on:]

in my opinion the best Futur-fic i've ever read is 'The Fugitive' by Officer 1BDI it's the second book in her trilogy and it's absolutely amazing. It completely flies in the face of 'Leela's Homeworld' but it was written long before that ep came out, so it's completely forgivable. It's really long but worth every word. It can be found at fanfiction.net. You don't have to read the first book in her series 'Blast to the Past' in order to understand this one, but i do recommend  it. 'Blast' is Fry centered and 'Fugitive' is Leela centered. She's started her third one 'Revival of project ALBIA' but she's only done like 3-5 chapters and the last time she updated was over a year ago so i don't know if she's gonna finish that one. i hope she does.

[Reply #136 on:]

sounds like Silverwolf and the Last Part of Fry's Return(?) (the one involving Fry going to the past with Leela to get Coca-Cola)

Leela's Return by the same author is my all time favourite fanfic.

I've waited for aeons for that one to be completed.

[Reply #137 on:]

i have not been around all that long, but hearing of how those great fics may never end, well, that just really puts a downer on my hopes. they are really good, and i would love to read the rest of them. then again, when you run out of ideas, you run out of ideas, and there is no point in going on. if you do the rest will all be sub standard. so it comes down to the age old question:

end in glory, or finish and risk disgrace....indeed, a very hard question, if you are ever in that predicament. well, if the authors of those fics are out there reading this, please respond, we really would like to know.

to allen: i would like to say that i know it is not "the best" and finding the best will be really hard to do, if ever done. so, bad plot ideas you say? what would you change? im all ears, specific examples would be nice, but if you are too busy, that's understandable.

by the way, i have a game of freelancer to get back to, see ya!

[Reply #138 on:]

Thanks for the kind words, gwen. It means a lot to me 

[Reply #139 on:]

no problem....they are well deserved...by the way if u dont mind me asking (trying not to be pushy) but when is the next installment expected to be out?

[Reply #140 on:]

No problem. It should be out some time in June hopefully. Though with exams about a month away, there could be delays. Still, it should make an appearance next month 

[Reply #141 on:]

I read Universe of Malice after seeing the glowing reviews here, and I like it.

First of all, I have to say I haven't read all of it, just up to part 3, but its very entertaining and grips you which is one of the most important things any writer can do. Don't think that I don't love this story for a second...

On the negative side, so far in the story, I've felt that the narrative is very padded and in some parts unnecessary. You often use elaborate descriptions for very simple things, or repeat descritive words like they're going out of fashion! One nit pick is that so far the reader seems to be treated like someone who's pretty stupid. You explain things that don't need explaining e.g. "and she pressed and pulled the right series of buttons and levers in order to get the ship into the air" -of couse she did! if the ship took off. "Inside, everybody sat around the large table they frequently used for such occasions" -you mean the conference table? for a conference of course? Maybe you're being satirical, i don't know!

I just feel that you sometimes put too much emphasis on description where it is completely un-needed. You can just say a stocked supply closet instead of it was a small room and inside it had this and that for the purpose of this and that and so on. Or if you're going to describe something that's beautiful and elaborate then knock yourself out with poetic metaphors but if its something simple and straightforward, then use simple language. Of course that's just my opinion and I've only read a small amount of the story but thats what I've felt so far.

I'm looking forward to the rest of it cos i am really enjoying it, i hope this helps!

[Reply #142 on:]

Hey, I welcome constructive critisism with open arms. It helps me be a better writer. And, I agree. I got a similar comment from somebody after Chapter 2 was done, so after that I tried to limit it a bit. Hopefully you'll find the later chapters show that. Certain descriptions of new places are still fairly in-depth, due to the fact that they're new and not known about by the readers. I do admit that I was probably a little too descriptive regarding familiar locations and actions. It was partly intentional, to really introduce the crew after two chapters without them, but I probably went a little overboard there. Once again, thanks for your comments. Constructive criticism probably helps me more than glowing praise anyway 

[Reply #143 on:]

As some of you may know, from fan fiction relase dates, I'm planning fics.  A pratice one and a really big one.  I'd like to hear suggestios, and when I start, I'd like to hear revieew requests. 

If anyone would like me to review their fics, and I'm a good editor, I'd love to.  Send 'em at hilanimal@yahoo.com.

[Reply #144 on:]

hmm... suggestions...oh! how about what really happened during The Sting? What was going on in the real world while we were watching the dream one? and what happened after the ep? Obviously leela wasn't released right away, and she and Fry probably had a few heart-to-hearts before she was released. And what about her parents? How did they react to hearing the news that their only child was as good as dead but they couldn't visit her?

[Reply #145 on:]

they can't whole mutants live in sewers thing remember? also, this is futuranma, nothing ever happens between episodes that is not shown to the viewer. also, they will never do those little heart to hearts before the last episode.

[Reply #146 on:]

 

Originally posted by getak2003:
they can't whole mutants live in sewers thing remember?

umm....that's exactly what i said. They can't visit her. But i'm sure one of the crew members contacted them at some point and told them their daughter was in a coma.

also, this is futuranma, nothing ever happens between episodes that is not shown to the viewer.

Fanfics never happen either. What's your point? He was asking for a fic idea and that's the first thing i thought of.

also, they will never do those little heart to hearts before the last episode.

again, it's a fic. They can talk about whatever the writer wants them to. i think you missed the point of my post...

 

[Reply #147 on:]

Nice suggestion... maybe I'll do it.

[Reply #148 on:]

Well, just read a bunch of new stuff over at TLZ. Part 10 of Universe of Malice was quite good. It really leaves you wondering about what's going to happen next.

"The Longest Journey Home" was unique to say the least. While the central plot is nice, giving Fry a major boner is not really what I want to read about. This is basically because I deal with that kind of frustration day in and day out.

"No More Fun and Games" reminds me of "Fry's Departure" in that Fry decides to leave PE. That's where the similiarities end. This is a bit too shippy for my tastes, but still an enjoyable story.

[Reply #149 on:]

i don't know about "no more fun and games" leela seemed really out of character in that one, especially toward the end, talking about going to the robot preacher in what seemed to me to be about every other sentance. don't forget there are those two nasty little parts before marriage of i dunno, DATING, and maybe a little thing called ENGAGEMENT

"the longest Journey home" is great. i like how the author made the characters have qualities of HUMANS instead of the cartoony fry=aways idiot, Leela=strong person with no "tensions" whatsoever that would never go out with fry. i like how it showed that leela has her faults as a humanoid and fry is not THAT DAMN stupid. at least he can recongnize a good chance to finally get laid...

"Universe of malace 10" is good. little shorter than i expected, but really nice. i like how fry and alesia are getting togather after the whole no memories thing. i really like it. but there is just one complaint about it. more specifically the last part of nine. i felt the "i hope we don't come across any bad animals" line was said a bit too much. im my mind i had the visualization of fry around a camp fire yelling into the darkness "GEEE I HOPE SOMETING DOESN"T ATTACK US RIGHT ABOUT NOW!!!!" (best not read while using some whacky tabacky)and then as if it was a total suprise they are attacked by a hideos monster that seems taken strait from aliens, not that it is a bad thing as i and author of "the juicy details" have not used that one. face it, the alien from aliens kicks all other's asses, unless they have already evoled far beyond the need for one of those....

all in all i can't wait for the next issues of all of these to come out. they are both good and some rather original.

[Reply #150 on:]

Getak, even thou your point about "No More Fun and Games" by my good friend Wonderbee is most likely true, Leela probably still knows Fry well enough.  It's a bit farfetched, but it's a very good story all the same.

[Reply #151 on:]

i agree the story is good, but that little oversight should be adressed. just because i say that one thing with the automatic marriage is a bad thing doth not meanest that the entire story is bad.

[Reply #152 on:]

Thanks for the kind words getak2003.  I'm always looking for help on adjusting and working up my stories.  You may be right about the marriage thing being too forced.
 I just wanted it to come across as Leela and Fry have been frustrated in their dealings with one another over the years, and this was a kind of explosion of passion, if you will.  If they make it through this year apart, then I probably will have them date for awhile, though they will be dating as well in the story, thanks to VR, and then they'll get an idea of what it's like for them to be around one another on a more intimate level. 

However, I do feel that Leela's character would talk about marriage like that sometimes, because she's always came across as a hard working, logical person most of the time, then she'll do something really spontaneous.  I always thought Love and Rockets had that, when she says, "I've got a lazier idea"., and dumps the hearts into the sun, or when she ejected the popcorn in Bicyclops.  I've always thought, there's a wild woman who just wants to burst out, and if the right timing came along, then she would.  That's what I tried to put across in my fanfic, because after all the rejection she'd heaped on Fry, then her feelings came boiling up to the surface, with a vengance.

I'm right now introducing some conflict in the story, with a new character, though who it's with, I cant't say yet. 

Dah Dah DAH! 

[Reply #153 on:]

yeah, it was kinda that...but not. you know what i mean? those were one second dare i say impulsive actions spured on by the phycho killer inside that want leela to be more impulsive. at least we know fry will make it with her either way, although everyone else may not make it through the night.

[Reply #154 on:]

Well, now that TLZ's fully restored, so has the grading system. So all of you who've read the fanfics that have been put up there in the last month or so can actually rank them at the site again. Thought that may interest some of you 

[Reply #155 on:]

Good thing they saved all those files. would have sucked for such great work to simply dissapear due to a fox c&d.

also, part nine going insane is back, so read and raview.

[Reply #156 on:]

I just read BumbleBeeTheta's latest fic at TLZ.  Interesting, interesting.

[Reply #157 on:]

Oyi!  Well, on plagurism, or rather plagurism applied in the sense of plot and plot ideas, the first person that comes to mind is George Lucas....  If you don't know what I'm talking about, research it on the net. 

As to your writing Getak...

 

Originally posted by getak2003:

...I also have a few ideas I will keep under wraps, like why Leela and Fry [CENSORED] so much, and....

Edited for content and capitalization

 

That statment alone means I'll be avoiding your works.   

[Reply #158 on:]

what? did that line forever scar you virgin little mind?

also, as for plagurism, are you refering to me???

and one more thing, it is not graphic in any way, here is the bulk of how the [CENSORED]ing occurs:

they kissed passionatly, and got it on,
[some ammount of time later]
{some even happens}

there, now i have scared the minds of millions with this post of graphic nastyness.

also, seeing as how you more or less have never read my works, i will tell you that i thought it best if i put them into a loving caring relationship. that means both an emotional and physical one. it is not like i put that sort of scene in just whenever i run out of ideas......

i would now ususally put a word or phrase to dis you, but find that too be more childish than your attitude toward less than controversial works. so i shall give you a smiley.
        

[Reply #159 on:]

well you do tend to be kinda graphic and give us info we really don't need to hear. like that paragraph where you actually discuss the stains on the bedsheets. We really didn't need that. And not wanting to read about why Fry and Leela get it on so much doesn't mean he has a bad attitude about less then conventional works. It just means he doesn't want to read porn. I don't either. And i'm a shipper. All i wanna hear is that they had a 'nice night' i don't need details on why, how often, what they did, how they did it, how often Leela has to change her sheets, and what's on them. it's not romantic, it's kinda gross.