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PEE Poll: At Long Last .. My First Fic Is Finished
I Like It .. I Really Like It   -8 (61.5%)
Noooo ,, Take It Away   -2 (15.4%)
Could Have Been Better   -3 (23.1%)
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]PaulFSAC[

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« : 09-27-2001 10:04 »

After mentioning this over the last few weeks, I've finally completed my first fan fic, called Destiny's Child (Nothing To Do With The Band).  Click Here to read it.
 http://www.scanartcentral.net/fanfics/met_dc_1.shtml

I'm not going to stop there, got a concept for a mirror dimension fic next, so keep your eyes PEELed for it.

PEEL has got the first site of this one, it'll be available on FSAC later on.  ;)
nasteve

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« #1 : 09-27-2001 13:12 »

terrific first fic, paul
KENNEDY

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« #2 : 09-27-2001 13:36 »

I liked the references to PEEL members in the story,except where was I?I dont believe there was a KENNEDY there.I dont have to be a good guy just somewhere,someone put me in your stories!
Juliet

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« #3 : 09-27-2001 13:57 »
« : 09-27-2001 13:57 »

Love it Paul, you have worked very hard on it, Well done   :)

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DRH

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« #4 : 09-27-2001 14:05 »

I will tell you my meaning when I`m done reading it....but it looks good...  :)
Mark

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« #5 : 09-27-2001 14:51 »

That was good.
I enjoyed to read it, I hope i can read more fanfic from you in the future
 :)
BumbleBeeTheta

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« #6 : 09-27-2001 17:43 »

I L-O-V-E it!!!!!!!!!!!  Paul, you should've started writing a long time ago!  Nevertheless, keep up the great work!
Kryten

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« #7 : 09-27-2001 19:46 »

Best play ever
VelourFog

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« #8 : 09-27-2001 20:45 »

the quote is "best play ever made" -- have you even seen rushmore Kryten?  :D

yea i'm reading that fic now, so i'll vote later
sHad0w

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« #9 : 09-28-2001 12:53 »

It was good, but I didn't like the ending..
AstroZombie

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« #10 : 09-28-2001 13:29 »

Yeah it was good Paul.

Hope you next one is just as good too  :)
Mark

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« #11 : 09-28-2001 14:00 »

Shadow >> Yeah, the ending ended the whole Romance on the show.
]PaulFSAC[

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« #12 : 09-28-2001 14:06 »

 
Quote
Originally posted by Mark:
Shadow >> Yeah, the ending ended the whole Romance on the show.

Explain how, personally it keeps it going, but on a different level.
AstroZombie

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« #13 : 09-28-2001 14:51 »

Yeah just cos your married don't mean the romance you had is dead.

I know.  :)
AstroZombie

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« #14 : 09-28-2001 14:53 »

It just gets better  :) :)
Holly J. Fry

PISS-Leader
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« #15 : 09-28-2001 15:14 »

Nice one, Paul! I really liked it, keep it up!
Lucas

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« #16 : 09-28-2001 18:39 »

Paul it's just GREAT.
DRH

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« #17 : 09-29-2001 09:06 »

I`ve just done reading it, and came to the conclusion that is was a exiting and thrilling fan fic, great job you have done Paul!
 :)  :)  :)
Allen

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« #18 : 11-12-2001 22:33 »

Great Job Paul on the fic
DrThunder88

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« #19 : 11-12-2001 23:30 »
« : 11-12-2001 23:30 »

--WARNING--WARNING--
No-holds-barred Critique

I'm not usually impressed by romantic plotlines and supernatural forces acting to influence them...this fic is no exception.  I suppose that's mostly my fault.  I can handle macabre, technical, action-packed, or even moron-funny plots, but I just can't stomach the excessively lovey-dovey, happy-ending, look-at-us-being-happy-ever-after stories.  Like I said, that's my fault.  Overall, I'd say it's very well written with no major flaws.  The humor, however, seems a bit awkward and forced, as if you were trying to justify it as a Futurama story by adding recycled moments of levity.  Very good attempt, though.  Comedy is one of the hardest things to write and write well.

Take this with a grain of salt, Paul.  I'm no literary critic or creative writing professor, so I'm in no position to claim this is an "expert" analysis.  This is just what I thought as I was reading your story.

Also, nice use 3PO.  Script format is much more difficult to write, as the character has to convey their thoughts in the dialog.  The omniscient perspective gives a lot more depth to the minds of the characters, and it works very well in a story like yours.

Keep up the fine work.

P.S.  Was the sauna scene completely gratuitous, or was there a reason beyond having Amy and Leela naked in a hot room?
Nurdbot

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« #20 : 11-13-2001 00:28 »

Cool fic Paul better than mine.
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