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Oh....yeah. That's true, I guess. Sorry..

[Reply #681 on:]

Well, the only place in New England i've ever been is Rhode Island so i'm not surprised that my guess on Munda's accent would be waaaay off base.

Oh, and the fic i'm writing is about what was going on while Leela was in her coma during The Sting. And it goes back and forth between Fry at Leela's bedside, and how the Turanga's were reacting. And then after Leela wakes up it goes to being about Leela's relationships with Fry and her parents while she stays with her parents during her medical leave. I'm only halfway through it. I always wanted them to do an ep that dealt with Leela learning how to relate to her family after years of being alone, so that's why i decided to include the recovery period rather than just ending it with her waking up.   

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Originally posted by Venus:
that's the problem with serial fics. That's why i think it's best to release a fic all in one go. You can't dissapoint anyone that way.

well unless its a dissapointing story...

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Originally posted by Venus:

Oh, and the fic i'm writing is about what was going on while Leela was in her coma during The Sting. And it goes back and forth between Fry at Leela's bedside, and how the Turanga's were reacting. And then after Leela wakes up it goes to being about Leela's relationships with Fry and her parents while she stays with her parents during her medical leave. I'm only halfway through it. I always wanted them to do an ep that dealt with Leela learning how to relate to her family after years of being alone, so that's why i decided to include the recovery period rather than just ending it with her waking up.   

I´am very looking forward to this!

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Originally posted by Venus:
 I always wanted them to do an ep that dealt with Leela learning how to relate to her family after years of being alone, so that's why i decided to include the recovery period rather than just ending it with her waking up.   

I had an idea like that a while back too, but I'd deal with it differently, I think. Your story sounds great, can't wait for it.

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Originally posted by Venus:
I always wanted them to do an ep that dealt with Leela learning how to relate to her family after years of being alone 

I am looking forward to your 'Sting' fic Venus. I also wanted to see more development of Leela's relationship with her parents, it will be interesting to see your take.. Your spoilers have been great BTW, your writing definately does NOT s*ck...   

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I really enjoyed the latest chapter in Kryten's Cat-astrophe fic.  Kryten's always been a good writer, but I love this one.  He's got the characters pretty much nailed down pat, and there's plenty of that Groening humor we all know and love.  Kudos, Kryten, for another job well done! 

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I've read Kryten's Catastrophe Part 4 and it was good,looking forward to the next chapter.

[Reply #688 on:]

Yes, much love for catastrophe 4!

[Reply #689 on:]

Do my eyes deceive me? An entire UOM chapter where Alesia isn't even mentioned once? Hurray!

Anyway, great chapter even though the insinuation of Daneilla and the hollowshed really creeped me out. How long till part 25? Is it gonna be really huge?

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My planned release date is somewhere around Easter. There's a lot written so far, but there's a lot to go, and that Easter break should ensure time for finishing it off 

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I can't even describe how much I loved this latest chapter of UoM. I finally got who Daniela was supposed to be and laughed in my special 'mad scientist' version. Anyway, everything was great, except that Baldur was unexpected. There was no clue he would lean that way at all. Normally, I don't mind unexpected, but it seemed unusal. The rest is great though.

[Reply #692 on:]

brilliant chapter, the only bad point being i have to wait some more till i get to read the end. however Im hoping that it comes out soon as then i can re-read it all, probably the best fan fiction series written so far.

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Anyone have any comments on "The Fry-Trix Rebooted"? Other than "it needs originality" (it's not a rip off I swear. It just follows the same story as "Revolutions" with a few notable diffrences). Anything would be appreciated.

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not trying to be mean or anything, but if it follows the same story, and has some of the same characters, then how is it not a rip?

[Reply #695 on:]

What did people think of the ending for From SCAM With Hate?

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I can't stress this enough Fryfan: You...need...an...editor...ba dly! I'll go back and suffer through it later. I'll let you know what I think then. I'm sorry, but the grammar mistakes and spelling errors make it hard for me to enjoy it. I know I slip up, but you do it constantly.

Edit: My review of the story: Meh. You still need an editor. I don't know. I can't really laugh at any of the jokes. I have this feeling you could do better and the makings are there. Fix the grammar, try subtle humor a little, etc.

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Let me correct my statement.

It has some of the same characters I'll admit that. The way the story flows is completly diffrent. There is no Zion, No machine city, No Deus Ex Machina, Fry cannot see into the Future I've of course made a few notable diffrences in the story.

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1. Unlike "Revolutions" where Trinity dies, Leela does not die.

2. The Twins Appear in part 3 to battle Fry and Neo.

3. No one is caught between the matrix and reality.

4. Since this is still in the spoilers, in the last part, Leela attempts to help Fry in his battle against Smith.

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I just read part two of "Love Hurts" by Demon of the sky.  It was great.  If you love Fry/Amy fanfics, this is one to read.  This and "The Oyster Syndrome" by Kryten.

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"Love Hurts" is shaping up to be quite a good read and I am looking forward to more! I had a lot of trouble getting onto FanFic.net earlier. Naturally my suspicions fell on the F-L shippers    They can be so.... *intense*     

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Originally posted by fryfanSpyOrama:
I just read part two of "Love Hurts" by Demon of the sky.  It was great.  If you love Fry/Amy fanfics, this is one to read.  This and "The Oyster Syndrome" by Kryten.

There's a part 2 now?

*seeks it out*

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Well I for one like BumbleBeeTheta's writing, I love her story "A Helping Hand". I honestly stared at my screen for 5 minutes in awe at the end of that story, and thanks to that story, I've decided to write one myself which I'll release in the near future (I'm still working on the story-line). I'll post a new topic when I finish it. If any other Web-site owners would like to host my story, feel free to send me your site name (E-mail in my profile) and you'll be the first to get it.

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Originally posted by Allen:
I can't stress this enough Fryfan: You...need...an...editor...ba dly! I'll go back and suffer through it later. I'll let you know what I think then. I'm sorry, but the grammar mistakes and spelling errors make it hard for me to enjoy it. I know I slip up, but you do it constantly.

Edit: My review of the story: Meh. You still need an editor. I don't know. I can't really laugh at any of the jokes. I have this feeling you could do better and the makings are there. Fix the grammar, try subtle humor a little, etc.

Can you be more specific as what you mean with the jokes?  I had written a lot in the story. I thought the satires were good and so did silvertide, who's a big GI Joe fan.

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Been way too long since G.I. Joe and I wasn't a fan, so if they were jokes about it, I wouldn't know. If you must have your list, I'll get back to you.

[Reply #704 on:]

Well, there was Scam Commander who a a parody of three people.  The Archduke from Star Wars, Cobra Commander and The Cat from the Red Dwarf Novels.  Barados Slim was a parody of Dooku, Jaws from James Bond and Destro from GI Joe. There was the doop commandos with Commander Doop.  And that where I had someone on fire and somebdoy told him to stop drop and roll, that was a parody of the old Public Servie Announcements, GI Joe used to do.  I had Mom say the line "This I Command.." parody of Serpento, leader of Cobra.

[Reply #705 on:]

i get all those now... damn, its been too long, im off to dig up happy memories by watching GI Joe (and action force) videos and playing with my toys, YO JOE!!

[Reply #706 on:]

I thought the idea of bringing the spirit of GI Joe back and parody it would attract readers.

[Reply #707 on:]

I´am very pleased by finally completed story "Leela´s bracelet"- now on both "The Leela zone" and fanfiction.net.

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Read final chapter of UOM. Am now traumatised and depressed.

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Oh great, I can now really look forward to the final chapter. Cheers Venus 

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Originally posted by Venus:
Read final chapter of UOM. Am now traumatised and depressed.

i agree,  i cried (macho man tears) at the end. i espiecially liked the way the story started and finished with a description of blackness. however do i hear the sound of a sequel?

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Well, not sure that was the best way to end UoM. The Universe seems darker than ever. I cried, but because I was at school, I had to be quiet. It was ok, some of the last parts made it a bit unbelievable. Not sure that an explanation would have done any better.

My final opinion is this. The story was excellent, but the the last chapter was too heartbreaking for me. 

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Originally posted by Allen:
The Universe seems darker than ever.

Exactly. There was no light at the end of that tunnel. It made everything seem so hopeless. I need my silver lining Damnit!

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Well, it brought a tear to the eye of this sentimental old fool. As for being too heartbreaking, I disagree: cruel as it is, real life is like that. And I thought Leela’s personality came across particularly well, she acted just as I would have expected her to. I can see the opening scene of the sequel now...

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Leela sitting in her apartment with a droud in her head and looking a total wreck. (Larry Niven fans will understand.)

In all, very well done.

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i also really resented the implication that Leela might not be 'The Other'. The shipper in me was not amused. What was amusing however was the character named after me (or more specifically my cat) she got an acceptable body count. I approve. Blood spray is a good thing.

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Originally posted by Venus:
Read final chapter of UOM. Am now traumatised and depressed.

Ahh Venus, when I read it I immediately thought that you would have that reaction.. I was more surprised myself - getting rid of Fry is burning the bridge after all. It was quite a dramatic scene though and quite moving.

I did think that the memorial was well done (although I would have preferred a shorter stint by Bender). The final scene with Leela was very well done imo. I like to read people's takes on the characters and Kif did a good job with Leela.

It is probably just as well we didn't find out who was pregnant, The F-L shippers  had a rough time with the whole epic and they needed a break... 

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Background Noise, part 8 is up to Dave's high quality standards. He weaves such interesting sub plots in his story that I can't tell from one moment to the next which I find more compelling. There are so many to choose from;

My ultimate fave is about Fry wanting and trying to grow-up finally. Dave has crafted such a believable back-story on how Fry became Fry that it makes perfect sense. When I read about Fry's reactions to his situation I found myself actually rooting for him... 

The thing with the SF Major and Rand is really getting interesting. I was kinda cool toward it at first but I am looking forward to more about them!

I also will impatiently wait to see what Dave has in store for Leela - what her feelings are and how she deals with them. Any bets?   

Finally the machinations of MOM (sign of cross) and the politico officers are choice stuff! They help show Mom as the cynical old dragon we know she is!    Besides, I wouldn't mind seeing Leo and Inez taken down a notch or several!   

To top it all off, there are so many familiar names woven into the story it is like a family renunion (the good kind!) I nearly fell out of my chair when the shuttle pilot made her appearance! Nice job Dave!

In closing it is more choice stuff from Dave. (And I am NOT saying that because he made me a captain!))

Capt. Coot 

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I'll field this all in spoiler space...

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Firstly, thanks to those that liked it, and apologies to those who thought it was too dark. But to that I say, "read the title of the fic." It's supposed to make you sad, and it's also actually supposed to be somewhat of a bittersweet ending, though admittedly more bitter than sweet. Most people survived, and life goes on, but the basic thing is though, life is cruel. I had a feeling this was going to be somewhat of a "Jurassic Bark" style love-it-or-hate-it ending, and I was prepared to deal with that.

Anyway, there's no plans for a sequel. In fact, there *won't* be a sequel. It's purposefully a little open ended to make the reader think a bit and to also let them make their own decisions. The issue regarding The Other and the pregnancy is the major case here, it's actually like that to add a bit of a twist to the whole thing as well as letting the reader make their own judgements, and yes even choices, as to what the possible outcome can be. I have my own theories, but it's there for reader speculation. Venus and most shippers I imagine will immediately dismiss the notion of Leela not being the other, and that's fine.

That about covers it I think. I'll be happy to address any more questions (or gripes) you may have though.

Thank you all for reading.

[Reply #718 on:]

Hey kif, was there anything in your story that you added/removed/changed based on things that came up in eps or by things that readers said?  And did you have the ending planned way back when you first started writing?

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Interesting query actually. A few things changed from what readers said or from the show. The most notable one was from Allen commenting how Baldur and Zapp didn't add much aside from comic relief. Until then I realised I had no real plans for them, but then I changed that and added the Chaos Renegades to give it some more variety. You yourself Venus kept reminding me to make full use of the emotions going on between the characters so that I used them fully.

The most major change to do with the show was that I was going to have the staff piece that landed on Earth cause the extinction of the dinosaurs, but then "The Why of Fry" had the Giant Brain doing it instead, so I changed it. I can't recall much else off the top of my head... other than small things like introducing the concept of The Other that was never brought up previously.

A few other things kind of evolved more as they went. Alesia, for example, wasn't going to feature quite as much originally. Nibbler was going to actually be killed early on in the story, hence those dreams Leela had, but I kept finding reasons to keep him alive.

Now, as for the ending...

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I had it pretty much worked out that the thing would be destroyed and that Fry would do it. For a long, long time he was just going to destroy it with the staff, undetected due to his lack of a delta-wave but it would have been far too cheesy and straightforward. Small bits seemed to evolve over time, quite a few bits not even worked out until during the writing of the second last or even last part. Baldur wasn't going to try and take the staff to the monster originally. His fight with Elod was planned waaay back, but it was originally going to be just over pride in who should do the deed. The idea that Fry not having the delta wave would screw up the mind-controlling process if it tried to tap into his mind came to me very late, and the idea that Leela would ultimately have to be the one to do the deed did as well. I felt it at least put a more original spin on the whole thing and add some emotion to what would have just been an otherwise cliched save-the-universe style end.

Well, I've rambled enough about that. Hope than answers your queries, Venus?