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totalnerd undercanada

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« #80 : 04-04-2002 16:55 »

Shame.  :(
I'd rather you were drippi........

Better not finish that.
Venus

Urban Legend
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« #81 : 04-04-2002 16:57 »

too late, my brain already did
:: slaps self in head ::
evil thoughts begone!!
BumbleBeeTheta

Starship Captain
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« #82 : 04-04-2002 18:04 »

 
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Originally posted by Venus:
I'm willing to wait for a while, but they had better not be spending all day in front of the tv watching oprah rather then writing though!
Don't worry, Venus.  I make an effort to work at least a little on my fics each day, but that's only cuz I have nothing else to do.  A lot of people can't devote as much time to writing as they would like to because they actually have lives, whereas the biggest things I have to worry about are making sure I win the role of Juliet in "R&J" and the affections of that cute, smart guy who sits in back of my English, World History and Science classes...  :love:
Erdrik

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« #83 : 04-04-2002 20:20 »

Welp, I was being held back becuase I couldn't think of a way to start 'The Juicy Details' but I figured it Out so I'll start writing now.... err make that after I post some stuff in my Fan Art thread! *hint hint*  :laff:
Tzlk
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« #84 : 04-04-2002 21:12 »

Haha ! sweet im looking forward to reading it Erdrik!
DrThunder88

DOOP Secretary
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« #85 : 04-05-2002 00:29 »

Good work!  You're like Mel Brooks, M. Night Shyamalan, Christopher McQuarrie, and Erich Segal wrapped into a handy, pocket-sized Futurama fan.
Erdrik

Professor
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« #86 : 04-05-2002 06:58 »
« : 04-05-2002 06:58 »

actualy, I'm Erik.

oh what do you think of this for the next caption?

Caption: Co-Produced by Death, The life of the Party!

and whats the correct spelling for Leela's KungFu training? and the name of the uniform while we're at it?...
Erdrik

Professor
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« #87 : 04-05-2002 10:53 »

bump. (I wanted this above my Fan Art Post  :p )
AstroZombie

Bending Unit
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« #88 : 04-05-2002 12:52 »

BumbleBee,

On the subject of fanfics, I'm the web master in charge of fanfics at FSAC (See Below).

I emailed you about a week ago asking you if I could publish your stuff at FSAC, but i got no reply, so either you never got it or u think I'm some kind of nut and have reported me to the proper authorities  ;)

So I'm asking you on this  :D .

<Ass-kissing>Can I please post your amazing and uplifting fan fictions at FSAC?</Ass-kissing>.

 :D
 
Erdrik

Professor
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« #89 : 04-05-2002 13:06 »

Here is a taste of my next fic:

(Note: This episode takes place after "Where the Buggalo Roam", and my
Fan-Fic "Secrets Revealed"
All characters created by Matt Groening and David X. Cohen.)

(Special Thanks to: , and the Happy Little Elf's. May they stay in my head forever.)


(Futurama opening credits. Caption: Co-Produced by Death, The life of the Party!)

The Dojo is small, but it serves its purpose. Not traditional in any sense,
its walls are a hard composite steel, and a nylon mat lay on the floor.
A hefty looking person walks onto the mat, and holds his hands together
in front of him. He wear's a jet black kimono, and stands perfectly still.

Leela steps onto the mat wearing a white kimono, and immediately
stands in a defensive posture. Her opponent moves into an offensive
posture and slowly edges forward. Leela slowly circles left and moves her
right hand up preparing for the attack. Her opponent rushes forward suddenly
bringing his arm up and around towards her head. She ducks down gracefully and
swings her leg forward, inches above the mat. Her leg strikes her opponent's and
he quickly falls onto his back.
Leela Stands and places her hands on her hip.

LEELA: This is too easy.

She turns and heads toward the near wall. At the wall she waves her hand in font of
it and a small opening appears revealing a console. She taps a few buttons and waves
her hand again. As the opening vanishes her hefty opponent fades away and a new one appears.
A nine foot tall Neptunian with a large nasty scar running from the top of his forehead
along his left cheek and down to his chin.

LEELA: Much better.

She steps onto the mat and the Large Neptunian immediately charges attacking with a
high round-house. Leela Ducks down and again sweeps her leg forward, but the Neptunian
hops backward deftly evading the counter. Without hesitating Leela jumps up kicks her
leg straight up, connecting with the Neptunian's face, back flips in mid-air, and lands.
(Think Guile from 'Street Fighter') The Neptunian grabs his face with his upper arms and
steps back. Leela charges forward and jumps, stretching her leg forward. But the Neptunian
recovers, and grabs her outstretched leg. He pulls her in and brings his other arm forward
hitting Leela square in the face. She falls to the ground and rolls back to the edge of the mat.
She quickly stands and raises her defense. The Neptunian charges again punching quickly.
She blocks the punches and retaliates, hitting him hard in the gut. Before He can recover she spins and
plants a kick on the side of his head. The Neptunian falls to the side rolling off the mat.

ROBOTIC VOICE: Point to Player 1.

Leela stands upright, hands on hips, a large grin on her face.

LEELA: (Thinking) That&#8217;s right. I'm the best!

She steps away and moves back into her starting position to signal that she is ready for another bout.
But before the match can begin, another person fades into view.

AMY: What'cha doing Leela?

Oblivious Amy steps onto the mat, and another Neptunian appears in front of her. The Neptunian
immediately turns on Amy and charges her.

AMY: G'AAAAAH!!

Amy runs away towards Leela screaming curses in another language, the Neptunian close behind.
Leela turns and jumps off the mat, running to the console. She quickly waves her hand
and taps a few buttons when it appears. She turns back to see Amy laying on the mat face up, with
the Neptunian laying next to her. The Neptunian has his head rested on his hand and is watching Amy.

NEPTUNIAN: So you free Saturday night?

AMY: (Enjoying Herself) Well, normally I would be, but I'm kinda taken.

Suddenly the Neptunian vanishes, and the dojo disappears. Leela and Amy are now in a small room,
everything is glowing with a faint green light, including the two. Amy stands up and walks over to Leela.

AMY: That was a pretty aggressive Dating Service.

LEELA: It was a KungFu Training Program Amy. I was practicing, what do you want?

AMY: Oh no, you don&#8217;t! I cut my vacation short to talk to you and its been over three months! You're spillin' the beans!

LEELA: (Sighs) Amy I told you before I'm not gonna talk about it! Now stop bothering me!

Leela returns to the wall and taps a few buttons in the now visible console. The dojo returns.

LEELA: You might want to step off the mat.

Amy quickly gets off the mat, obviously pissed that she is being ignored. Leela taps a few more keys
and the Neptunian re-appears. The Neptunian turns to Amy.

NEPTUNIAN: Hey, Baby!

Leela angrily taps another button, and waves the console away.
The Neptunian immediately straightens and looks forward.

NEPTUNIAN: Emotion Simulator deactivated.

The match begins, and Amy watches for a few minutes, but soon gets bored. She turns and looks over to
wall where the console is and gets an idea. Smiling mischievously she sneaks over to the console.
She waves her hand and the console appears. Quickly she removes the covering and starts pulling and switching wires. She then puts the covering back and arrogantly taps a few buttons.

Leela had just finished upper-cutting the Neptunian when he suddenly vanishes. Only to be replaced by Zapp Brannigan! Zapp advances on Leela.

ZAPP: Hey, my one-eyed Lovely, you want some Champaggen?

LEELA: (Horrified) AAAAAAGH!

Leela, screaming, closes her eye and attacks blindly. She kicks him in the gut, then quickly jabs him in the jaw.

ZAPP: Hey could you do that again, only more sex-fully?

LEELA: Amy! Shut it off!

AMY: Do you promise?

Zapp is now holding her by the arm, Leela pushing his face away from hers.

LEELA: Yes! Fine! Anything just, shut it off!

Amy pulls the cover off and pulls out a wire, and Zapp vanishes. Leela opens her eye and looks over to
where Zapp was standing then darts her eye back and forth to make sure he is really gone. Then she turns and storms over to Amy.

LEELA: Amy, that was just mean.

AMY: I&#8217;m sorry, Leela. But I can&#8217;t help it! I wanna know!

LEELA: Ugh. Fine. My place after work, ok?

AMY: Yes!

LEELA: Yer lucky Fry made plans with Bender for tonight.. ..
Tzlk
Professor
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« #90 : 04-05-2002 13:14 »

WHY MUST YOU TEMPT US YOU BASTARD!!! sounds good and now im interested! wanna read more wanna read more wanna read more
Erdrik

Professor
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« #91 : 04-05-2002 13:38 »

 
Quote
Originally posted by AstroZombie:
BumbleBee,

On the subject of fanfics, I'm the web master in charge of fanfics at FSAC (See Below).

I emailed you about a week ago asking you if I could publish your stuff at FSAC, but i got no reply, so either you never got it or u think I'm some kind of nut and have reported me to the proper authorities   ;)

So I'm asking you on this   :D .

<Ass-kissing>Can I please post your amazing and uplifting fan fictions at FSAC?</Ass-kissing>.

  :D
 


Did you put mine up yet? I know I sent it to you, you said you'd have it up by the end of this week.. just checking  :p lol
Venus

Urban Legend
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« #92 : 04-05-2002 14:04 »

I didn't know Planet Express had a holodeck. fun!
Erdrik

Professor
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« #93 : 04-05-2002 14:17 »

err actualy thats suppose to be the virtual internet  :p I haven't seen an episode with the Vnet so I can't really describ it too well  :p
meisterPOOP

Professor
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« #94 : 04-05-2002 14:36 »

The virtual internet...Guess it is now called the library reading room...DUH!!!
TheVoices

Starship Captain
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« #95 : 04-05-2002 14:43 »
« : 04-05-2002 22:00 »

okay because everyone else id doing it, and i wanna be popular here's a sneaky preview of my first ever fan fic!      :D


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sorry, you've missed it, wait you would have but i'm in a good mood so i've posted it further down this already long page
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this is just an extremely rough version, when it's finished it could be completely different or not include this scene at all

right now i'm gonna go and watch the last part of 'Black Books'

oh yeah this will only be up till tommorow, cos i'm taking it off. i can't give away everything you know   ;)
Erdrik

Professor
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« #96 : 04-05-2002 15:07 »

seems a bit sudden... and misplaced... I'd suggest moving the kissing scene. Of course I dunno what happens before your scene so the moment could be building throught the fic and then BOOM! kissy kissy  :love:

Its nice tho.
AstroZombie

Bending Unit
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« #97 : 04-05-2002 15:23 »

Erdrik yours is in the works and I should have it up by tomorrow evening (GMT)

 ;)
Erdrik

Professor
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« #98 : 04-05-2002 15:27 »

shweeeeet  :D
Tzlk
Professor
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« #99 : 04-05-2002 16:32 »

I agreewith Erdrik, seems kinda sudden, but i dont know where in the fic this takes place, but i like where its goin!  ;)
BumbleBeeTheta

Starship Captain
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« #100 : 04-05-2002 22:15 »

Astro-Zombie, I'd be honored to have my fics posted at FSAC.  I'll be sure to send them along.  But what addy did you use?  I no longer use gypsysol3000.  Now it's ima1grrlrevolution@hotmail.com after my theme song by the greatest garage band ever, Superchic[k]!  :)
TheVoices

Starship Captain
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« #101 : 04-06-2002 00:34 »

 
Quote
Originally posted by Erdrik:
seems a bit sudden... and misplaced... I'd suggest moving the kissing scene. Of course I dunno what happens before your scene so the moment could be building throught the fic and then BOOM! kissy kissy   :love:

Its nice tho.

it's not really sudden as this scene is nearer the end of the fic, and it's suppose to be really descriptive
DrThunder88

DOOP Secretary
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« #102 : 04-06-2002 00:35 »

 
Quote
Originally posted by Erdrik:
actualy, I'm Erik.


Yeah, and my "review" may or may not have been a load of sunshine I blew up your ass.  I don't know if you missed the conversation about me delivering rave reviews regardless of what I thought of the story.
Erdrik

Professor
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« #103 : 04-06-2002 00:53 »

 
Quote
Originally posted by DrThunder88:
 Yeah, and my "review" may or may not have been a load of sunshine I blew up your ass.  I don't know if you missed the conversation about me delivering rave reviews regardless of what I thought of the story.

No I saw that post. I was basicly being a sarcastic pompus ass. lol  :laff:
You mess aroun', I mess aroun'. Simple, no?
TheVoices

Starship Captain
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« #104 : 04-06-2002 01:32 »
« : 04-14-2003 22:00 »

*gone*

Yeah, i know that it seems sudden but it's not, it's just that this is near the end of the fic, and the rest of it builds up to it, of course there's other stuff going on as well     ;)
 
as i said in the other post, this is just an extremely rough version, when it's finished it could be completely different or not include this scene at all

oh yeah this scene has been made deliberately descriptive, although the rest of the fan fic will be almost normal, kinda      :D  i just wanted to see how long i could make one short scene
Tzlk
Professor
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« #105 : 04-06-2002 04:03 »
« : 04-06-2002 04:03 »

*really wasted* ill give a real evaluation later.
AstroZombie

Bending Unit
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« #106 : 04-06-2002 07:09 »

Make the scenes as long as you damn well like, The Voices, I know I do,  :D

Screw what anyone else thinks (Especially Dr Thunder88, Nah I'm Kidding, Dr Thunder88 should not get any more screwed than the rest of us, if he does he's a lucky bastard)
TheVoices

Starship Captain
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« #107 : 04-06-2002 11:36 »

damn right, ha ha ha screw you all!
Tzlk
Professor
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« #108 : 04-06-2002 12:48 »

Nice! Now that i can actually see the letters its a very descriptive scene! That would be an appropriate climax to a longer fan fic.  Good Job man!
TheVoices

Starship Captain
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« #109 : 04-06-2002 12:57 »

 
Quote
Originally posted by Tzlk:
*really wasted* ill give a real evaluation later.

oh so thats what you said! man you must have been really out of your head   :laff:
Tzlk
Professor
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« #110 : 04-06-2002 13:00 »
« : 04-06-2002 13:00 »

yes and ill say it again- im sorry for my incohernt posts! Ill try and just go to sleep next time... also im trying to find all my blasted wasted postes and edit them so that either they make sense or I just take them down. 

edit- Anyone if you find a post by me that doesnt make sense please tell me and Ill edit it or take it down thnx
TheVoices

Starship Captain
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« #111 : 04-06-2002 14:32 »

 
Quote
Originally posted by Tzlk:
That would be an appropriate climax to a longer fan fic. 

thats one good idea, infact that's what i'll have as an ending i'll just edit it a bit first
Tzlk
Professor
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« #112 : 04-06-2002 16:37 »
« : 04-06-2002 16:37 »

Another way you could use it would be as the opening scene, and then you could work backwards from there, explaining how Fry/leela got to that point!  There are tons of possibilites there Voices, go with it!
Erdrik

Professor
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« #113 : 04-06-2002 22:33 »

 
Quote
Originally posted by Tzlk:
Another way you could use it would be as the opening scene, and then you could work backwards from there, explaining how Fry/leela got to that point!  There are tons of possibilites there Voices, go with it!


Hey Thats what I'm Doing!  :p lol

Tzlk
Professor
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« #114 : 04-07-2002 00:34 »

Did I completly miss somthing?  Did you say that earlier? If you did im sorry, I wasnt intentonally giving away your secret to success!
Erdrik

Professor
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« #115 : 04-07-2002 02:04 »

 
Quote
Originally posted by Erdrik:
Thnx   :)
How well did the characters hold true to them selves?
Oh! And I plan to have a part two in which Amy forces Leela to gossip about the relationship.
Im going to set it up like a clip show, only show the different things Leela and Fry did together In secrecy  :flirt:
Im thinking Ill call it 'The Juicy Details' hee hee   :laff:


But I wasn't mad. just restating it, becuase it seemed like Alot of people missed it.. the post got a bit off topic after I posted that  :p
TheVoices

Starship Captain
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« #116 : 04-07-2002 13:15 »

 
Quote
Originally posted by Erdrik:
 Hey Thats what I'm Doing!   :p lol


  :laff: don't worry i'm not going to do that anyway
Erdrik

Professor
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« #117 : 04-07-2002 22:39 »
« : 04-07-2002 22:39 »

What if FanFic:
Question1:
Leela: What if my parents never sent me to the orphinarium?
Fry isn't present and after the Whatif machine is done asks what he missed.
Leela grows up in the sewers, and dreams of walking on the surface. Fry wakes up and ends up being the Pizza Delivery guy, Nibbler becomes Fry's pet. Fry sees Leela in a sewer drain during a delivery, and (curious as to who she is) leans down to ask about her. But Leela, having grown up in a mutant sociaty that shy's from 'normals' (added to the fact that she beleives she is a hidious mutant like the rest) she runs away. Fry gives chase and eventually catches up... more ideas later...

Question2: ??
Question3: ??
BumbleBeeTheta

Starship Captain
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« #118 : 04-07-2002 23:37 »

You're doing a What if fic?  So am I!
And what's freakier, the first question's kinda like that.  Weird huh?  'Cept in mine, she meets her parents when she's in high school and there's a LOT of confusion. You can read the preview at my website...
Okay, shameless, promotion there.  :)
Erdrik

Professor
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« #119 : 04-08-2002 08:36 »

read it.
A few crits.

1) Why would her parents give chase? The whole point was that Leela never find out about her origins.
2) Leela seems too compliant... at that age one would think she'd be more inclined to get away from her parents even if she had just recently found her parents... Then again it might be the whole western motife... I'm not a big western fan  :p
its ok so far I a guess.  :) Tho the Romeo & Juliet bit makes Fry look a little too intelligent.. Lol
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