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AstroZombie

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« : 03-10-2002 09:14 »

Mwahahahahaha!

My plans are now in motion!

First FSAC has fallen  to the scurge that is AstroZombie!

The fool's have made me webmaster in charge of fan fiction.

So my first task it to announce the release of a new fic on FSAC

It's by myself and Paul and is called Mind's Apart.

Click the link below to go straight to it.

 http://www.scanartcentral.com/fanfics/az_pm_ma_1.shtml

Post here and let me know what you think.


  :)
KENNEDY

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« #1 : 03-10-2002 10:51 »

HHAHAHAHA!! you're crazy
TheVoices

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« #2 : 03-10-2002 11:46 »

argh!! the longness

before i read i have so say: seeing as you wrote it i'm expecting something brilliant, fail to reach my standards and i'll kill you

i'm gonna go read it now...
Allen

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« #3 : 03-10-2002 12:45 »

That was pretty good, finish it please.
I do have one complaint though, it seemed to get confusing at certain parts.
Venus

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« #4 : 03-10-2002 13:46 »

to be continued?? NO!!!! more now! :: throws a temper tantrum :: moremoremoremoremore!
DrThunder88

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« #5 : 03-10-2002 14:32 »
« : 03-10-2002 14:32 »

Heh heh, "...you thundering moron..."  I thought I was the only person who used 'thunder' to describe size, amplitude, or intensity.

You are now entering my Opinion-Nation.  Please note that the leader is not a professional literary critic.  A few questions/comments in the form of rhetorical questions:
  • What is the meaning of, "Fry’s eye’s where shut tight, a mask of pain in his face"?  If this means what I think it means, then you should probably run it by your proofreader again.
  • "...his nose felt lower down than it usually did."  Oh come on, how can you feel the structure of your face?
  • Zoidberg's written accent is hard to decipher.  It's a personal preference, but I tend to attach character voices to lines in my head.
  • Too many references to specific instances in previous episodes make it seem less like straight-up dramatic-drama more like soap opera-drama.
  • The story itself is good, but it reads like it should be a script instead of a narrative.


I had to quit reading (due to a cheese overdose) about the time...
...so I'd appreciate it if someone tells me if there's a strong finish.
AstroZombie

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« #6 : 03-10-2002 14:50 »
« : 03-10-2002 14:50 »

Allen - In reference to your statement that it was confusing at times. Yes I will admit that it can be, You should have tried writing the damn thing, my brain still hurts from keeping track of who was who   :p.

No on to DR Thunder

I'll take your comments on board, I'm not quite sure what they mean but I'll pass them along to someone with some literary talent for deciphering   :p (I mean come on I got D for english at school and my favorite word seems to be FUCK!, I'm lucky i can string a sentance together).

As far as the prom night thing goes its one of the few episodes from her past that have been mentioned in the show and hence know anything about, but since your complaining about the cheese factor I'll make up some non cheesy stuff.

Hmmmm a lesbian orgy at her college co-ed dorm sounds about right.

Kennedy - YES I AM MWAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!

And to the rest - Yes it will be finished though hope fully it wont take as long.   :p
]PaulFSAC[

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« #7 : 03-10-2002 15:04 »
« : 03-10-2002 15:04 »

 
Quote
Originally posted by DrThunder88:
Heh heh, "...you thundering moron..."  I thought I was the only person who used 'thunder' to describe size, amplitude, or intensity.

You are now entering my Opinion-Nation.  Please note that the leader is not a professional literary critic.  A few questions/comments in the form of rhetorical questions:
  • What is the meaning of, "Fry’s eye’s where shut tight, a mask of pain in his face"?  If this means what I think it means, then you should probably run it by your proofreader again.
  • "...his nose felt lower down than it usually did."  Oh come on, how can you feel the structure of your face?
  • Zoidberg's written accent is hard to decipher.  It's a personal preference, but I tend to attach character voices to lines in my head.
  • Too many references to specific instances in previous episodes make it seem less like straight-up dramatic-drama more like soap opera-drama.
  • The story itself is good, but it reads like it should be a script instead of a narrative.


I had to quit reading (due to a cheese overdose) about the time...
...so I'd appreciate it if someone tells me if there's a strong finish.

hmm, I guess someone doesn't appreciate the time and effort two people put into this fic, it was as confusing as hell writing it, let alone proof reading it.

I guess this is a typical DR. Blunder (oops Thunder) response to anyone's fic other than his own (has he written one?).

Yeah, Part 2 will be written (this may entice the good(?) doctor to read the entire thing then  :D), hopefully in a lot less time that part one took.


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Allen

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« #8 : 03-10-2002 21:34 »

 
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Originally posted by ]PaulFSAC[:
(has he written one?).

Yes, but I haven't read it yet. I do appreciate the time and effort. When I did the same concept in IM II I just said they had switched bodies and from that point on referred to them as who they are, not the body. Ex. Instead of Fry/Leela, try just Fry. It's understood they've switched, you don't need to remind us everytime they speak. That's how it gets confusing.

It's still good, I just thought I'd give some advice.
Just Chris

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« #9 : 03-10-2002 21:45 »

For a moment, I thought you hacked the place.  :D

Hey, you used the word 'shit', which you cannot use on broadcast TV. Minus 99 points for you!

Seriously, it was a good fic. Well long enough for one act. Although I am a bit confused about that prom night bit. Maybe I scrolled too much, but I don't recall reading about it!
DrThunder88

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« #10 : 03-11-2002 00:28 »

Originally posted by ]PaulFSAC[, rebuttals by DrThunder88:

hmm, I guess someone doesn't appreciate the time and effort two people put into this fic, it was as confusing as hell writing it, let alone proof reading it.

I imagine that many people don't, but I think I relate pretty well to your situation.  I worked for many weeks on my script.  Half of that time I was creating the background information for two brand new elements of the Futurama Universe.  I know how confusing it is to write the history of a fictional future.  I know the problems faced when developing new characters, trying to understand why they "are who they are" and trying to predict how the individual will react to different situations.  I appreciate your time and effort.  If I didn't, I wouldn't even bother posting a review.

I guess this is a typical DR. Blunder (oops Thunder) response to anyone's fic other than his own (has he written one?).

Yes, "Curse of the One-Eyed Jacks".  It was even longer than this and I added a few extra, multimedia tidbits.  By one of my thunderous blunders, I did not deliver it in installments.  It proved too wearisome for people to read in a single sitting.  Let's face facts, it was my script, and I couldn't read it the whole way through.

Yeah, Part 2 will be written (this may entice the good(?) doctor to read the entire thing then   :D), hopefully in a lot less time that part one took.

I'll finish your story.  I'll even do you one better, I won't tell you what I think of it (even if its ending is better than Heat).  No, I'll do you two better.  I'll post a rave review, regardless of my opinion.

If you feel like ripping into my fic you can probably dig it up by searching for "curse" in the fan art forum.

No hard feelings, right?

TheVoices

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« #11 : 03-11-2002 00:51 »
« : 03-11-2002 00:51 »

the story was great, but some of it was a bit confusing though, which really did my head in.
DrThunder88

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« #12 : 03-11-2002 01:47 »
« : 03-11-2002 01:47 »

Awesome!  Great story!  The dialogue is smooth and flawless.  The plot is continuous with no gaping holes, and the characters are spot on.  It's remarkably easy to read, but it still retains all the characteristics of a canonical think-piece.  The writing is certainly not hackneyed, contrived, or unoriginal.

I almost forgot:
  You guys are too clever!
AstroZombie

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« #13 : 03-11-2002 02:53 »

Are you taking the piss Dr Thunder??

 ;)

Yeah I got no hard feelings, everyone's entitled to their own opinions ( <-- did i spell that right ? opinion???)

And to The Voices yeah I aggreee it can do your head after a while, it was an absolute bugger to write.

 :p

AstroZombie

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« #14 : 03-11-2002 02:57 »

Tell you what Dr Thunder why dont you email me and tell me what you really thought of it!

 ;)

Ok  :D
Tor

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« #15 : 03-11-2002 06:28 »
« : 03-11-2002 06:28 »

 
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Originally posted by ]PaulFSAC[:hmm, I guess someone doesn't appreciate the time and effort two people put into this fic,
Psychological analysis by Tor: DrThunder88 does appreciate the fanfic, because he writes so much about it!
Erdrik

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« #16 : 03-18-2002 09:59 »

I liked it. Tho the 'Leela/Fry' thing to identify the two was a mistake. Didn't work out well..  :p

I thought it was written well tho. And the characters seemed to hold true to themselves(something you rarly see in a fanfic.).
Although Fry was a little too restraint about being in Leela's body.(I pretty sure Fry would have done... something ...)

Overall its good. actualy the best Futurama fanfic Ive read so far. Im big on the whole:
'characters seemed to hold true to themselves' thing  :p
VelourFog

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« #17 : 03-18-2002 10:59 »

 
Quote
Originally posted by ]PaulFSAC[:
  hmm, I guess someone doesn't appreciate the time and effort two people put into this fic, it was as confusing as hell writing it, let alone proof reading it.

I guess this is a typical DR. Blunder (oops Thunder) response to anyone's fic other than his own (has he written one?).

Why ask for feedback if all you want to hear is "good job!"?  You can tell yourself that on your own.  If you want to be judged on effort rather than actual quality then maybe you should also make that clear up front. I'll say now that I didn't read the fic and I probably won't, but here's a tip that can apply to most any writing; if it's confusing to write then it's probably going to be even more confusing to read.
]PaulFSAC[

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« #18 : 03-18-2002 11:22 »

 
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Originally posted by VelourFog:
 Why ask for feedback if all you want to hear is "good job!"?  You can tell yourself that on your own.  If you want to be judged on effort rather than actual quality then maybe you should also make that clear up front. I'll say now that I didn't read the fic and I probably won't, but here's a tip that can apply to most any writing; if it's confusing to write then it's probably going to be even more confusing to read.


I don't remember asking for feedback, personally, just defending the honour of a fic that took a fair old while to write, due to work and college commitments on both parties.

But your point is taken.
winna

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« #19 : 03-18-2002 11:42 »

It sounds interesting, maybe I'll read it some time.......
Tzlk
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« #20 : 03-18-2002 16:12 »

DAMN YOU!! Now i wanna read the rest of it!!! it was really cool! Great story, good dialog and original ideas! NOW WRITE THE REST OF IT!!!  :D
Venus

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« #21 : 03-18-2002 16:16 »

Yes! me agree with Tzlk, write more now or we shall gang up and kick you in the shins!
]PaulFSAC[

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« #22 : 03-23-2002 10:39 »

Re-opened as it was closed as well.

Venus and Tzlk, work is in progress.
Tzlk
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« #23 : 03-23-2002 13:27 »

Whoo Hoo Im looking forward to it.. Keep up the good work!
Erdrik

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« #24 : 03-23-2002 14:12 »

YAY!
Venus

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« #25 : 03-23-2002 17:09 »

:: roles around in a pile of Happy ::
Erdrik

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« #26 : 03-23-2002 17:22 »

Hey! Gimmie back my Happy!!
Venus

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« #27 : 03-23-2002 21:24 »

No! is mine!
Allen

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« #28 : 03-23-2002 23:50 »

Cool. Can't wait. Won't wait. Let me read now! :)
AstroZombie

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« #29 : 03-24-2002 15:04 »

Me too I cant wait to see what happens next...

Wait I'm writing the damn thing, I KNOW what happens next.

hehehehehe.

Just wait till Fry/Leela meets the large breasted lesbian girls of tottie 4

 :p
Erdrik

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« #30 : 03-25-2002 12:55 »

Awww... I miss my happy...
Venus

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« #31 : 03-25-2002 14:44 »

mine now......
Erdrik

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« #32 : 03-25-2002 15:05 »
« : 03-25-2002 15:05 »

Grumbling, grumbling, grumbling...
IiIi'll get you !!
And you little Happy toOoO!!
  :evillaugh:
Grumbling, grumbling   :hmpf:
   :p 
Venus

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« #33 : 03-25-2002 15:06 »

im sad now
 :cry::
Erdrik

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« #34 : 03-25-2002 15:13 »

awww...  :(

/me reaches into back pocket and pulls out some more happy, breaks it in half and hands one half to Venus.

I can share  :)
Tzlk
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« #35 : 03-25-2002 15:14 »

what are you two talking about?!?!?
Erdrik

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« #36 : 03-25-2002 15:26 »

you sound like you need some happy!

here have some HaAaApppYYYyyyy!!

/me starts whipping Happy at Tzlk.

  :laff:
Allen

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« #37 : 03-25-2002 19:03 »

Okay, settle down. This thread has gone off track :)
Kryten

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« #38 : 03-25-2002 22:13 »

Right, that's enough of that. This thread's getting too silly. If there's anything I won't abide, it's things getting silly.
]PaulFSAC[

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« #39 : 03-26-2002 03:28 »

Hmm, I quite agree, shame threads degenerate like this, ah well, such is life -- Re-closing.
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