Writer unit32
Professor
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Originally posted by PazuzuJr: wow - that sounds soooo not sarcatic!
Are you being sarcastic?Coz I wasn't being sarcastic.There is no need to be sarcastic about me being sarcastic coz I wasn't being sarcastic and now you confused me.
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RobotDevilRox
Starship Captain
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What happens next? Read on to find out!
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Sparrow ran down the corridor, swerving around corners and desperately trying to avoid crashing into the screaming people running in the opposite direction. Lizard had it easy; he was on the ceiling. But down on the ground the continuation of the fire bell had created a mass panic – it normally stopped after a few seconds, what if this time it was a real fire? Sparrow’s breathing was fast, sweat dripped from his head. He wiped his forehead on his sleeve, hurrying down the corridor. He tripped, falling flat on his face, but he scrambled back onto his feet and strived to catch up with Lizard, who hadn’t stopped or even slowed. With all the people around him he couldn’t tell where he was. He just followed Lizard through the endless corridors, round hundreds of turnings, not knowing where he was going or even which way was back. How did Lizard know where to go? What if he lost lizard? Sparrow grimaced and tried not to think what would happen. But it was always a lingering possibility… Sparrow looked up, concentrating on Lizard so he didn’t make a wrong turning. People were running, screaming all around him. He was looking up, instead of concentrating on where his feet were going. His feet didn’t have eyes; they didn’t know what was about to happen. He suddenly tripped n something on the floor and lurched forward, smashing his head against a low beam. Everything went black as Sparrow lost consciousness…
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Sparrow awoke. There was a blurry figure leaning over him, which eventually swam into focus. It was a young woman. “Oh, good, you’re awake.” Came her voice. She spoke softly, and yet Sparrow could still hear her above the shouting, screaming, panicking people about them. “What―” Sparrow started to say. “Don’t,” said the woman, gently putting her index finger to his lips, “just stay still. You’ve hit your head pretty badly.” Sparrow reached his hand up to his head. It hurt, so he withdrew it. He could see a sticky red liquid coating his fingers; blood.
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Yup. A new character.
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NJ_Bella
Crustacean
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i like the originality of the whole story. the names, diaglogue, everything. it's interesting and well written. thanks for helping me kill some time at work reading this!!
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RobotDevilRox
Starship Captain
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Thanks, NJ_Bella, and no problem! Here's some more! Semi-colons are always a good idea, but they can be a little addictive! See if you can spot all of them in this next part of the story… -*-*- Lizard hurried forward, all his senses concentrating on where the noise had originated. He was sure he could locate it – he had the general area of the ship, he just couldn’t pinpoint it yet. He paused to sniff the air; yes, he could definitely smell smoke. He raced ahead, not thinking about anything except finding the source of the smoke. He could hear people below him shouting and screaming, but he could spare no sympathy for them; he had to discover what was causing this mass panic. He had forgotten all about Sparrow by now, more concerned with what was going on around him. He kept going, determined, turning corners and dashing down corridors. He had obstacles to avoid of course, such as openings to air vents, but he dodged them without even having to slow his pace. He wasn’t, however, sure how he was going to get back to his quarters once he’d dealt with the problem. Everything looked different from the ceiling, and he wasn’t even sure he’d ever been to this part of the ship before, anyway. He hoped everything would sort itself out. He started to think about his home planet, back in the Galaxy of Terror. It was a long time ago since he’d last seen it… But he didn’t need them, or their stupid traditions! He’d got along fine without them. He was going to make his way up in the balance of power! He had the bottom… And was, admittedly, still there. Zapp Brannigan’s crew! He would have laughed at the very idea before. But this was just the beginning. He would get better jobs, and eventually he would be respected by all! He sighed and shook his head; that was a long way away, and right now he had to sort out the problem at hand. He started to concentrate on finding the smoke again. Corridors, corners, more corridors. He stopped and sniffed the air. He was definitely getting closer. Just a few more turnings! He hurried forward, going the opposite direction to everyone else, until he eventually reached… A door. -*-*- And that’s all you’re getting for now!
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RobotDevilRox
Starship Captain
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Time to meet the new character!
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Gabriella was a human woman. She had got up early, taken a shower, eaten her breakfast and had got ready to do her job in a really half-arsed way, just like every other day. Then the fire bell had gone off. She had ignored it at first; it often went off (rumour had it there was an Exterminon on the ship), but it always stopped after a few seconds. But this time it just carried on. She had started to worry then. She had stopped what she was doing and stuck her head out the door to see hundreds of people charging down the corridor. She had quickly snatched up her valuables and joined the stream of people outside. Eventually she had seen a man, fighting his way through the immense crowd, bang his head on a low ceiling bar and fall to the floor, unconscious. She had immediately realised he would get trampled by this stampede, and started shoving aside other people in order to help him. Everyone else was just skirting around him or even stepping over him. She had knelt down next to him and tried to wake him up. He had hurt his head, and now there was blood on his fingers. Suddenly he sat bold upright, and she jumped back. “Lizard!” he cried. “What?” she asked, “What are you on about? My name’s Gabriella, by the way.” “I’m Sparrow. Lizard’s my friend, I was following him. You haven’t seen him, have you?” “Uh… What does he look like?” Gabriella inquired, confused. “He’s purple and he has a tail and no mouth, and he was on the ceiling.” “In these uniforms?” “Long story― Wait a minute! You’re a girl!” “Last time I checked…” said Gabriella, confused by this strange man. “Then that means… I’m in the female section of the ship! I’m not allowed here!” Lizard seemed very upset. “Who cares? Most men on this ship would love to come here.” Gabriella told him. “Ohh, what if Zapp Brannigan finds out?” he asked, worried. “That idiot?! What’s he gonna do?” she scoffed. Sparrow’s eyes suddenly narrowed. “Did you just insult Zapp Brannigan?” he asked coldly.
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There you go. Enjoy.
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Writer unit32
Professor
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I didn't use them,my evil twin brother #17 did!.
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Writer unit32
Professor
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Hmm,I need to update my own fic... Originally posted by RobotDevilRox: Suuuuuuuuuure! Hey,I do have evil twin brothers!
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RobotDevilRox
Starship Captain
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« Reply #69 on: 02-07-2007 16:11 »
« Last Edit on: 02-07-2007 16:11 »
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Sorry for double posting.
Another new character! Yay for new characters and yes I will put up some pics soon!
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Kayte cowered in the corner of her room, surrounded by fire on all sides. It was hard to breathe because of all the smoke, so she coughed and spluttered. She heard a sound come from the opposite end of the room and turned her head to see the door open. She stared; nobody had come in, and nobody was standing outside – unless… She looked up to the ceiling, and there was an Exterminon. But that’s impossible! she thought, All Exterminons hate fire! Except that one that was exiled. The Exterminon on the ceiling looked up – er, down – and she could see it’s face. It was male, and she thought she recognised him from somewhere, but she didn’t have time to think about that now. Help! She screamed in her head, not being able to speak herself because of the way the smoke was affecting her lungs, knowing that Exterminons could read thoughts. Help me! I’m trapped! The other’s gaze fixed upon her, and then he glanced around the room and spotted the fire extinguisher. She hadn’t been able to reach it but he could. She watched while he hesitated, then finally went and got it. I NEVER THOUGHT I’D HAVE TO DO THIS, came what must have been his voice in her head. What? she thought, confused. He closed his eyes and turned his head away, before using the fire extinguisher to put out the fire. She jumped as he suddenly came towards her, grabbed her hand and dragged her out of the room. He went back in afterwards, and she saw him get out a lighter and hold it to the smoke detector until the noise stopped. He came out of the room and stood next to her. WHAT IS AN EXTERMINON DOING IN A ROOM FULL OF FIRE? he asked her. I MIGHT ASK YOU THE SAME QUESTION, replied Kayte. I AM IN MY ELEMENT NEAR FIRE, BUT I DIDN’T KNOW THERE WAS ANOTHER OF MY KIND ON THIS GODDAMNED SHIP. He told her. Suddenly something clicked within her, and everything seemed to make sense to Kayte now. YOU’RE THE GUY THAT GOT EXILED! she realised. YES, BUT WHO ARE YOU AND WHAT ARE YOU DOING HERE? he replied. MY NAME IS KAYTE. WE ARE THE ONLY TO EXTERMINONS NOT ON EXTERMINO RIGHT NOW. I AM HERE TO SPY ON HUMANS AND BRING BACK INFORMATION ON THE KIND OF WEAPONS THEY HAVE, she said. WELL YOU’RE CERTAINLY ON THE WRONG SHIP. THIS CAPTAIN IS COMPLETELY INCOMPETANT, said the other. AS I’VE DISCOVERED, agreed Kayte dryly. Suddenly the other Exterminon stopped, and his eyes widened. WHERE’S SPARROW?! he exclaimed.
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I’ve put stuff like ‘he said to her’ because, although he isn’t actually saying anything, it sounds much better than ‘he thought to her’. XD
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Writer unit32
Professor
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Hehe,Exterminons.I like the name but planet 'Extermino' sound a little weird.
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