a ickle shippy story about futurama

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Leela was making her way to room 100...she wanted to give Fry the lastest Kerrang magazine...she thought he would like it as it was from around his time. She had found it in the 20th century museum. She knocked on the door, she had no reply. She knew he was in there because he was so totally retarded he had nothing else to do but sit around and get drunk while watching t.v with a drunken criminal mastermind who went by the name bender. She pushed at the door, hoping it would open. It did, she walked into where Fry would probably be sittin. In-front of the t.v...he was there but he wasnt watching t.v. he was making out with a Marylin Monro bot. She dropped the magazine, watching....jealousy running through her. She ran out, feeling the tears forming in the corner of her eyes. Why was she feeling so upset, her stomach churned, he heart felt like it was shattering into a thosand pieces. She got to the apartment, it was empty like usual. She went to her room. It was time to have a rest. "whats wrong with me" leela thought to herself. It echoed through her mind until there was a loud knock at the door...

[#1 :]

okay... I won't be harsh... but its vair short and you might need more punctuation, I didn't get the middle bit too well, but it could be good when you get round to doing more of it. If it turns out like you said it will at school, I may have to kill you... 

[#2 :]

ok, I admit that Fry is dumb but he is not that un-intelligent that you have to classify him as being "totally retarted" give the guy a break he has demonstrated some intelligence at times.

[#3 :]

 

Originally posted by ZoidZoid:
ok, I admit that Fry is dumb but he is not that un-intelligent that you have to classify him as being "totally retarted" give the guy a break he has demonstrated some intelligence at times.

Some?SOME?!  Ye your right, some.

[#4 :]

im working on it i only had a short time to do it so im gna edit it now...but come on im a bit rubbish at writing i only want to give me a go so please dont be mean its my first try

[#5 :]

ooh you've edited it! And its still quite good!

[#6 :]

thank you im jus doing some homework and i will do some more.

[#7 :]

Ok... but you've been like, 12 hours

[#8 :]

what for 12 hours god that is soooo long i think im going to have some food now yey fooood

[#9 :]

Superfairyfan and emo_cowgurl in one thread?Then the thread is dead.Oh and did The Troll post here yet?Then the collection will be complete!

[#10 :]

I must admit, the grammer and punctuation are a bit harsh...but an interesting enough start. Perhaps, with some editing, this will be a good story. 

[#11 :]

thanks i will edit it soon..

Originally posted by Writer unit32:
Superfairyfan and emo_cowgurl in one thread?Then the thread is dead.Oh and did The Troll post here yet?Then the collection will be complete!

..and to this i may add that me and emo_cowgurl are best friends and we will go on the same threads forever mwahahahaha x-x [[sorry bout the cheesy laugh]]

[#12 :]

I take back my words about bendersucksfry t5hat I called the Troll.And SFF you really should talk to emo_cowgurl.She has a typo even in her user name!

[#13 :]

i'm sorry i've now got to go i'll be on here tommorrow at dinner time to talk more about this.

[#14 :]

im sorry i havn't updated for a while ive bin really busy...well heres my next update...

Leela struggled out of bed, her heart was pounding. Finnally her mind had discovered what her heart was thinking alll along, but was it too late!?
At the door, it wasnt her secret lover, but one of her best friends. It was Amy, someone she could talk to about this. They could have a girly talk. Weel this is what Leela hoped, "Hi..erm..Leela I have to tell you something..." Amy said...a small smile creeping onto her face.
"yes..ok tell me" Leela sounded strangley needey, but Amy didn't notice.
"Well i went to vistit the place..you know..where people come from the past...and this realy cute boy came out...His name was Jacob hickman, Well we got talking and well hes my new boyfriend." Amy turned around and out came a handsome looking boy...'BOY'!. He looked only 13 years of age and this was Amy's new boyfriend. Leela's jaw dropped, she slammed the door shut and ran to her bedroom. It was too late for her to be with her one true love...one of her best friends was going out with a 13 year old...everything was going wrong...

[#15 :]

Two lines, eh?

[#16 :]

no sorry im going to do more i had to log off for form

[#17 :]

i  h8 u u put my night in shining armor in there!gggrrr!(wuv u weally!)

[#18 :]

If I was updating with such small updates I would be updating every day!And the place Amy was talking about is Applied Cryogenics.

[#19 :]

thanks...and i am going to do bigger updates its because i have to do it in form so i'll start doing bigger ones thanks x-x

[#20 :]

 

Originally posted by superfairy fan:
Leela was making her way to room 100...she wanted to give Fry the lastest Kerrang magazine...she thought he would like it as it was from around his time. She had found it in the 20th century museum. She knocked on the door, she had no reply. She knew he was in there because he was so totally retarded he had nothing else to do but sit around and get drunk while watching t.v with a drunken criminal mastermind who went by the name bender. She pushed at the door, hoping it would open. It did, she walked into where Fry would probably be sittin. In-front of the t.v...he was there but he wasnt watching t.v. he was making out with a Marylin Monro bot. She dropped the magazine, watching....jealousy running through her. She ran out, feeling the tears forming in the corner of her eyes. Why was she feeling so upset, her stomach churned, he heart felt like it was shattering into a thosand pieces. She got to the apartment, it was empty like usual. She went to her room. It was time to have a rest. "whats wrong with me" leela thought to herself. It echoed through her mind until there was a loud knock at the door...

Correct yourself lady,or I'll get 24th century on ye!

[#21 :]

im sorry I will I was just busy a few minuets ago so i'll update and check for mistakes thank you Arockalypse

[#22 :]

the story is ok but just put all together it doesnt matter how long it takes to make a page just take your time and put together 

[#23 :]

well here's my new update sorry for the delay...

...Leela cried into her bed spread. She didn't notice the dark shadow casting over her body. She looked up to find Fry standing there. She couldn't understand the way he was looking at her. His eyes sparkling, looking into her eye as if they could see into her soul. "Fry..erm..what are you doing here" Leela said, her voice like a whisper. " I've come to see you, i knew you came into my apartment when...when i was with that robot" Fry said, lowering his head " she was, she is nothing to me. Compared to you, i will always love you. I..er.. just wanted to tell you that" and with saying that he turned away and left. Leaving Leela there, she had a feeling of hope. She would never show how much Fry really meant to her until they were together. If they ever would be. She had a mixture of feeling inside her, she resorted to alcohol. One after another, hour by hour she drank and drank. Her head spinning she wanted some air. Walking to the door was a stuggle, she found she could not walk in a straight line. She sat outside the building she called home, not moving. Still alive but she felt alone, lost and confused. She didn't know what to do, so she just sat there. About half and hour later a figure came walking around the cornor. Leela could just make him out as it was starting to get dark. He had a masculin body, broad sholders and a dimonde shaped face. Blonde hair combed back and shining eyes that seemed to be looking at Leela. He stood a few inches away from her, kneeled down and whispered " what is a beautiful young lady like you doing in the dirt? " he reached out his hand and caressed her cheek. "come back to my place and i'll sort you out some coffe ok?"
Lella looked into his warming eyes. Even though she didn't know him, she thought she could trust him. " ok, i never cought your name?" she said, a small smile coming into her face. " James, my name is James" He smiles at Leela his warm eyes looking into her's. He reached out his hand and Leela grabbed into it and slowly brought herself onto her feet. She felt dizzy and nearly feel back, but James reched out his arms and caught her. He hooked his arm though hers and pulled her up into a straight position and started walking, pulling Leela along with him.

[#24 :]

nice i like alot

[#25 :]

me licky a lot

[#26 :]

 

Originally posted by Justice_Man:
me licky a lot

I would joke about your spelling of "likey", but I can barely type