Layla50

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« on: 09-30-2005 23:13 »
« Last Edit on: 09-30-2005 23:13 »
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Hmm... It's been so long since I've done this that I'm not sure I'm doing it right. Ah well, c'est la vie!
So, drabbles! For anyone who doesn't know, a drabble is a short story of a hundred words, no more no less. That is very short, so they promote really carefully writing and word choices. Some people have made quite an art form out of it, though I'm not one of them. I've never written one before in fact.
Drabbles are less about plot and more about ideas. They can be in any style or affect, meaning, comic, shippy, drama, drippy drama, etc.
There are also double and triple drabbles, of 200 and three hundred words. Drabbles are often written around challenges or themes. i.e. Someone says I want a drabble about... lobsters, and people can choose to tackle that subject in their own way. Lobsters for dinner, lobsters as poor miserable doctors, lobsters as evil invading aliens.
So, if you're interested, post a drabble or a challenge. I think it'll be very helpful too when the fanficcers get quiet. It's so much less intimidating to pop out a drabble than it is to write something with a plot.
I lied, here's one now.
Wink.
She has to keep her eye on him. Otherwise, she will feel him watching. Leela hates being watched, but that is the duty of the sane. Once she thought her mind would not survive that relentless watching, and still she endures.
However, if sanity fails it’s task, these guys may yet succeed. Most of them seem ready, frightened, yes, but ready. He is different. He hadn’t been ready, and she know it. His eyes are open. He is blindness, staring into the unknowable future. Somehow, she can't turn her back on him, because she needs to see him
Blink.
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NIC2001

Starship Captain
   
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 Wow, Layla posted that 3 days ago and no one but me as replied! I have no choice but to try it out! -------------------- -Sounds- Since my awakening in this world, I was surrounded by new sounds. The first one I heard was the sound of the cryogenic tube door opening. Then I heard the sound of some cool looking flying cars and old style blimps coming from outside the building window. Then I was standing in front of the source of the most beautiful sound I ever heard! It took a while to get around our problems but now I can’t spend a day without listening to this awesome sound! My heart keeps beating so I can hear the sound of her voice. ----------------------- I hope that was the right way to write a drabble.
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JBERGES

Urban Legend
  
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« Reply #5 on: 10-04-2005 23:28 »
« Last Edit on: 10-04-2005 23:28 »
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Here’s my challenge. Someone write an understandable drabble using an even more crippling literary restriction than I have.
-----Nerve------
Another busy calendar. Days, endless, fitfully gained heat into June.
Kiddingly, Leela mentioned needing off-time. Perceivably, quitting (rightfully) seemed the ultimate vacation. Wearily yanking zipper and brushing coat dully, even Fry guessed her interplanetary job kept Leela miserable. Needing only presumption, quashing rational second thoughts until victorious, ‘Wiggles’ youthfully zipped about, blithely collecting daisies, even finding geraniums hidden in Jamaican’s kiosk. (LaBarbara’s man: Negative one present) Quietly reaching safety, the underdog vigorously waited.
‘You!” Zealously announced Bender. “C’mon! Don’t escape, Fry! Get here immediately!”
Juxtapositioning knuckles, Leela metaphorically novaed on Philip, quickly reaching spiteful Turanga’s unpredictable vicinity.
“Where’ve you...”
...Zam?
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That took far too long to do...
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Shiny

Professor

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« Reply #8 on: 10-15-2005 04:33 »
« Last Edit on: 10-15-2005 04:33 »
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Drabbles, huh? A sort of chopped-down vignette...okay, I'll bite.
(cracks knuckles)
(writes short bit...checks word count)
207?! Dang! This IS hard!
(picks up katana...)
(...half an hour later...)
Um...titles don't count in the word count, do they?
(decides they don't, goes for broke)
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In Liu of Love
Fry looked so...broken. Leela longed to comfort him...but she didn’t dare. So she followed him, silently.
He carried the blank robot all the way from the theater to the Planet Express basement. He placed it on the slow conveyor belt that fed the Total-Conversion incinerator, gently crossed the thin metal hands over its chest, and kissed it on the forehead.
“I’m sorry, Liubot,” she heard him whisper. “But maybe it’s better. I only loved you...because I can’t love her.”
Leela swallowed a sob. She longed to comfort him...but she didn’t dare.
Silently, she crept away.
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Shiny

Professor

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Layls, I admire you drabble, the words flow nicely but I have to confess...I'm not "getting" it. I assume Leela is thinking about Fry (though you don't actually mention his name, I've tried some other characters and none that I've hit on seem to "work" either  and it seems in character for them but some of the references...the "duty of the sane" thing and "these guys may succeed" and others...are escaping me. My best guess is that it's Leela's impressions just after Fry comes out of Cryo, but there's a line that seems to reference The Sting perhaps. I'm confused. Help? NIC, I like yours a lot. Nice take on the impressions of a single sense, and the "Fry voice" seems just right. Cool-o-rooni. JBerges, you get points for making it coherent, but the restriction makes the story itself sound very stilted. I tried to think of a restriction tighter than that, but I couldn't...let alone imagine what story I would tell with it if I did! You get the award for technical achievement, for sure. Thanks everyone for your comments on mine. It's actually a distilled version of a vignette I've been trying to write for some time. I'm deliriously proud of the title, (thanks Layla!)...it took me quite a while to come up with it (and I can't ever quite get the concept of a story down until I at least get something close to a good title), but even after that the actual vignette kept stalling out; I kept miring myself in the details. Paring it down to 100 words was good in one way (forced me to concentrate only on the essentials) but bad in another (I left out some "cool stuff" I wish I didn't have to). So I really I wish I'd re-read your original post because I might have done better making it a double drabble...or even a triple. Ah, well, so it goes. I'm currently trying to think of a shocking secret. Though nothing is revealing itself yet. Check in with you guys later...
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Futurama Nerd

Professor

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Wow you guyz! I like! But I have to admit, I really liked Shiny's. Great job! I'll try this later on, I've got homework to do!
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NIC2001

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Well you'll have a few days soon to think about it no? Just kidding! But once you start on one of those, it's really easy to write under a few hours. The last one I made took me a few minutes at work. (Something like 40mins between calls and paper works) I'm sure that you'll think of something.
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DrThunder88

DOOP Secretary

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'Dypstic Pizza' a double-drabble.
“How did I learn it?” Fry asked.
He was stalling. Small talk at a party had led Leela to ask him about learning to make pizzas in the 20th Century. He was proud to be a child of the Stupid Ages. Who wouldn’t be? But the learning curve for pizza manufacturing was extremely steep, or at least it had been for Fry.
“Making pizzas is like making love, kid.” Mr. Pannucci had told him. “You got to take your time and build things up before you get to the good stuff.”
“Then what?”
“15 minutes at 450 degrees.”
Things had not gone well. The reason for Pannucci’s no-gum policy was pretty obvious, or at least it was for everyone except Fry.
In mid-knead gravity took its toll on Fry’s slack-jawed look of concentration and relieved his mouth of its award-winning wad of Big League Chew. Fry didn’t want to spoil his chewing pleasure with floury hands, so he bent low over the near-pizza and opened his mouth. Realizing you have to sneeze should be as easy as not running into a pizzeria’s front door, or at least it should have been for Fry.
“Ummm...My face was stuck in a pizza.”
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Officer 1BDI

Starship Captain
   
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*pokes head in* This is really hard.  I don't think my drabble's very concrete, or at least not as solid as the others here. Here's a scene from "Love and Rocket." It's a double-drabble because I completely forgot about the first few posts and went by DrThunder88's word count. SacrificeShe looked into those tired, thankful eyes of his and was overcome by a wave of aggravation.
“That was a stupid thing to do,” Leela frowned as she helped Fry into a kneeling position. He opened his mouth to retaliate, but the words failed to form before he wobbled uneasily and pitched sideways. Leela caught him and held his shaky form in place.
“I feel dizzy,” he murmured lamely, face drained of color.
“Keep your head down.” She gently pushed him forward, but her hand never left him. Slender fingers brushed his neck, the pulse that had nearly stopped for hers. “You didn’t have to do that.”
“Yes I did,” he argued hoarsely. In the silence that settled, she pulled him into her, head resting against head.
The curious expression returned to his face long before the flush, eyes focused on chalk candy. “Are you going to eat that, or can I?”
Leela fingered the damp heart, her sigh suppressed. “I think I should hold onto this for a while.” What she really wondered, as she pocketed the candy, was how she would arrange it in that homely shoebox beneath her bed to avoid crushing it between the other artifacts.
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Crash_7

Professor

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Venus and Officer 1BDI: Those are great!
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