Galactic Wars Part 1..

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Ok guys here is the First part of Galactic wars.I am Working on the 2nd part.Please tell me what you think oh and neo1999 please DON'T!!!!... http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=455551
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[-mArc-]:Good new's PEEL
Nurdbot:Uhoh i don't like the sound of that...
[-mArc-]:you will be delivery to Ebola 9..
Nurdbot:uhoh here it comes...
[-mArc-]:In the most Diseased ridden part of the Bio-Zone..
Nurdbot:Thank you and Goodnight *drinks beer*
          
Back off Sailor Jupiters MINE she is Mine.

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It's not exactly readable. You might get a decent rating if you actually correct the myriad spelling and grammatical errors.

Actually, if you agree to let me rewrite and correct these errors, I'll do it. There's probably potential for something spiffy here.

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I agree with Capper.  It really should be proofread before it's presented.

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Chapter 2 is now up..working on Chapter 3...

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You'll note I asked for editing authority as well as proofreading.

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I'm sure it'd be funny... IF IT WAS THE LEAST BIT INTELLIGIBLE!!!     

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Hmmmmmmm it's ok but is'nt exactly inspiring,  Could do with punctuation but it's ok, nothing special.

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Originally posted by Kryten:
I'm sure it'd be funny... IF IT WAS THE LEAST BIT INTELLIGIBLE!!!      

Hey Give me a break!! i have not written an Futu-Fic in years.

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Originally posted by Nurdbot:
 

Originally posted by Kryten:
I'm sure it'd be funny... IF IT WAS THE LEAST BIT INTELLIGIBLE!!!         

Hey Give me a break!! i have not written an Futu-Fic in years.

That's not the problem Nurdbot. The problem is most people will skim through what appears to be a long story crammed into two paragraphs. It also needs a spell-check done on it.

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Use word. It corrects your spelling and some grammar. Get your mummy to do the rest. There is not excuse for poor grammar and spelling in fanfics because you should edit them, or at least use a program that does it for you.

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Originally posted by Allen:
 That's not the problem Nurdbot. The problem is most people will skim through what appears to be a long story crammed into two paragraphs. It also needs a spell-check done on it.

My I am busy at the Moment.I have 20 other fics to complete.So excccuuuussseeee me if it is rushed!!,I am 14 you know i got school..if i had my time i would write it and correct it.You got an Problem write to the Board of Education.

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If I were you I would just write them during school, saves doing work.

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Hmmm.I always thought school was for learning those things.I am currently working on a fan fic and I'm not going to to down-grade with grammatical errors.

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Originally posted by Nurdbot:
 My I am busy at the Moment.I have 20 other fics to complete.So excccuuuussseeee me if it is rushed!!,I am 14 you know i got school..if i had my time i would write it and correct it.You got an Problem write to the Board of Education.

That doesn't make sense. I have school too and I find time to write and make corrections. Some one once said quality not quantity. Work on one at a time. It's not hard to do