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Venus

Urban Legend
  
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« #7 : 11-13-2001 21:14 »
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nasteve

Bending Unit
  
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« #31 : 12-10-2001 14:16 »
« : 12-10-2001 14:16 »
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Originally posted by Kryten: I think it was good, but I had one problem: The ending. Way too deus ex machina. The parasite just dies for no reason? And what was the deal with the planet? I thought you intended it to be her homeworld, but in the end, that whole thread went nowhere.
So, in conclusion, I give it a B. I won't destroy your planet, but I won't give you the secret of immortality either.
dues ex machina? dunno what that is. As for the planet, did i tell you that it was her homeworld or something? i'm pretty sure i said it was uninhabited. i think i told someone privately that it was meant to remind her of her place of birth but thats it. And finally, as for the parasite just dieing, i anticipated a lot of people wouldn't like that, but i liked it that way. Of course it didn't die for no reason, I tried to drop a lot of stuff in the fic that would give the reader a lot of choices for them to make up their own personal reason for what killed the parasite (i think i counted four possibles) but if you didn't like/get that well then that's my fault and that's a critisism of the fic and i can use that to improve next time. thanks for reading it and letting me know
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