Zomit's fanifc (probably not very good)

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Hi, since everyone else was posting good fanfics, I decided I might give it a try. I'll post the first scene of it, and if i get good feedback, I'll post the rest of the story. Here it is:
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I haven't thought of a name for it yet.
Opening scene: (caption at the bottom of screen): If You Can Read This You Are Watching Futurama
Animation on TV screen: Fry falling back into the cryogenics tube

Scene 1: Bender and Fry are sitting on the couch at Planet Express watching All My Circuits.
Monique: “Calculon, we’ve been married for over a year now, so I guess now would be as good of a time as any to tell you that I’m having an affair with your evil half-brother.”
Bender: “Cheating on your lover, how low can you get?”
The phone rings and Bender answers it.
Bender: “Crushinator? I told you, I’m having an affair with one of your sisters!”
Bender hangs up the phone.
The phone rings again and Bender picks it up and immediately shouts: “Crushinator, stop calling me!”
Voice on phone: “But I’m not Crushinat—!“
Bender hangs up the phone, unplugs it and throws it out the window.
Fry: “You tell her, Bender!”
Calculon (on TV): There is one thing, and only one thing that I must do, and that thing is—.”
An explosion can be heard from the Professor’s laboratory, followed by the Professor walking into the room.
Professor: “Good news everyone, report to the meeting room for some good news.”
Cut to Meeting Room.
Professor: “Good news everyone, you’re on a delivery to Digitrex 7, the planet with the best technology in the known universe.”
Fry: “Ok, but what was that explosion coming from your lab?”
Professor: “What explosion? There wasn’t any explosion. Incidentally, when I was testing the teleportation device that you are delivering, it accidentally teleported itself onto the top of my bombs, causing an explosion in the lab.”
Leela: “Wouldn’t it just be easier to use the teleportation device to get to the planet?”
Professor: “Oh my, no. It’s only able to teleport to places that you’ve been to before.”
Bender (thinking to self): “Hmmm, this gives me an idea.”
Hermes: “I’ve been expecting a phone call about a promotion from the central bureaucracy after someone, probably Zoidberg, stuffed the mail tube with beer cans causing any mail that gets sent to me to get stuck halfway up the tube. Fry, Bender, have any of you heard any phone calls about it recently?”
Bender (thinking to self): “Hmm, come to think of it, that voice on the phone did sound kind of like that bureaucrat 1.0.”
Bender: “Umm, nope, haven’t heard a thing. Now let’s get going on that delivery, wouldn’t want to be late!”
Fry: “Wow, I haven’t seen Bender that eager to go on a delivery since Zoidberg stuffed Hermes’ mail tube with beer cans.”
Zoidberg: “But I keep telling you, it wasn’t me! It was Bender, I saw him do it!”
Hermes: “Shut up, ya filthy crustacean! No one ever listened to you before, why should we start now?”
Fry: “Yeah, nobody likes a snitch Zoidberg!”
Zoidberg starts crying, then walks into his office. An explosion can be heard and Zoidberg is seen running out of his office on fire.
Bender: “I guess he found that bomb that I placed under his chair. Heheheheh...”
Professor (angrily): “As much as I enjoyed that display of Zoidberg running out of his office on fire, that’s still no excuse for stealing one of my bombs!”
Bender: “Oh, did I say that I did it? I meant Zoidberg did it…Yes, Zoidberg.”
Zoidberg: “Friends, please help me! I’m on fire! It burns!”
Bender: “Don’t worry Zoidberg, you’ll be fine…”
Bender (whispering to the others): “We’ll eat him when we get back, that should leave enough time for him to roast on the inside as well.”
Fry, Bender and Leela walk towards the ship, only to be followed by Zoidberg.
Hermes: “Now they’ll know what it’s like to be stuck with him. Heheheheh…”
Zoidberg walks back, sadly (remember, he’s still on fire).
Zoidberg: “Bender said either stay here, or go into the Engine. Then Leela said something about me roasting too much if I go in there, so they made me stay. Sometimes I get the feeling that I’m not wanted here, but I know that’s not true. You guys are the best friends I’ve ever had!”
Hermes starts running towards the Planet Express Ship before it leaves shouting “No, don’t leave without me!” But then he is just about out of the room when Zoidberg runs up to him and hugs him tightly.
Zoidberg: “Hermes, out of everyone here, you’re my favourite.”
The Planet Express Ship leaves and then Hermes mutters to himself: “I thought this time he wouldn’t notice me,” and starts crying.
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Well, that was Scene 1. Please post your thoughts on it.

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That's pretty good.I think you should call it "Fried Shrimp with a side of trouble".

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I really enjoyed that. I like when Zoidberg caught on fire but was still walking around. 

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it was great. the very start with all my circuits was funny, and so was the part when zoidberg caught on fire.

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Thanks everyone. Part 2 would be here by now but my computer lost all of it's data (including any typing programs) so I won't be able to post any more of it until I get Microsoft Word or something.