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Guineapig Trick

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« on: 05-05-2004 17:26 »
« Last Edit on: 06-19-2004 00:00 »

i really suck at drawing and writing but i decided to make my own thread anyways, so heres my fic and if you would like to see it continued pease post and my art will come in the next few days well here you are (any comments are apreciated)


futurama: dead program's shoes (working title)

[Scary door taken out because I ripped off JBERGES]


Bender: Fry, why do you watch this crap, it always ends the same way

Fry: In mystery?

Bender: no with someone taking off a mask

Fry:   Oh

Bender: now this is real TV (he changes the channel) this is about a
guy that was cryogenically frozen while delivering chinese food and
he ends up in the year 4000

Fry: thats so unbelievable

Bender: yeah, but its a good show, that damned fox always taking away the best
shows forcing dumb 30 year olds to write horrible fan fiction

Farnsworth: Good news everyone, you will be testing my potentially dangerous
new invention

Zoidberg: Can I do it?

Prof: well i think its too important for you Zoidparg

Zoidberg: But thats not my

Bender: shut the hell up!

(zoidberg stars crying)

Prof: lets get on with it, this is an old compaq from the year 1997, about ten
years before microsoft's horrible downfall

Fry: but when i was frozen, bill gates was making 250$ a second

Prof: well after a show about a 25 year old buffalow wing delivery man that
travels into the past called pastorama was cancelled everthing went down
until the earths destruction in 2112 and recreation by the great zombie
jesus in 2114

Fry:   oh, alright

Prof: well getting on we are going to try to connect to the internet through this
windows 1995, well here are some internet guns a personal mortar cannon some swords
a nuke and a

Bender: what are we going to need all these weapons for?

Prof: oh, nothing

(they connect)

(they pass a site building: Zapp and leela)

Leela: dont even say it

Bender: what, you mean, about you sleeping with Zapp Brannigan

Leela: *sigh*, this doesnt look like a good part of town

(the see another building: AskmoreSexfully's unnoficial Zapp
Brannigan t-shirt shop)

(-mArc-): this is a bust (kicks door down)

AskmoreSexfully: run for it guys (all people working run)

(-mArc-): book 'em mods (mods run towards fleeing workers)

(they pass by)

Prof : (from offstage) go to the 'my documents' folder
Dr. Morberg

Professor
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« Reply #1 on: 05-05-2004 17:36 »

It's a okay start, but it could use some better grammar, punctuation and capitalization, and why are they going to a folder when they're on the internet? Maybe that'll make more sense as it continues, though.
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #2 on: 05-05-2004 17:51 »
« Last Edit on: 05-05-2004 17:51 »

yeah i dont know i was sorta wasted at the time and i never have been good with all the punctuation grammar and jizz

EDIT: the second part of my un -criticcted fanfic will be here on friday because no one is saying no dont make more so im gonna make more
Y_L_B

Professor
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« Reply #3 on: 05-05-2004 21:42 »

 
Quote
Originally posted by Guineapig Trick:
no one is saying no dont make more so im gonna make more

You should make more no matter what people say. You can't please everyone, and sometimes you can't please anyone, but writing is for you. Even if there's only one fan, that's better than none, and you should write for them as well as you.

Plus it's a cool start!  <IMG SRC="http://peel.gotfuturama.com/ubb/biggrin.gif">
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #4 on: 05-05-2004 22:06 »

thanks Y_L_B great advice i like fans, and i know i cant spell or anything but thanks for believing in me
Dr. Morberg

Professor
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« Reply #5 on: 05-05-2004 22:12 »

I have a question. Did you see Askmoresexfully's request to be in a fanfic in my thread?
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #6 on: 05-05-2004 22:37 »

yeah ive always been a fan of the messege boards here at peel and askmoresexfully happens to live down my street and he made me put it in there, so yes i read it but thats not the reason i put it there
tom123

Starship Captain
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« Reply #7 on: 05-06-2004 07:53 »

I liked the parts with the mods. That was funny.
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #8 on: 05-06-2004 19:40 »

yeah that was one of the funny ones but i hope the mods and [-mArc-] is ok with it though

REMINDER: The next chapter is up tomarrow
KurtPikachu2001

Urban Legend
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« Reply #9 on: 05-07-2004 13:28 »

I liked it so far.  Maybe you can post this to the webpage when you're done with it.  Keep up the good work!
Sal

Starship Captain
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« Reply #10 on: 05-07-2004 13:41 »

Yep its nice!
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #11 on: 05-07-2004 17:37 »
« Last Edit on: 05-09-2004 00:00 »

alright here #2 if it sounds diffrent thats cuz i got AskmoreSExfully to help


Futurama: dead programs shoes ch. 2


Fry: if we're on the internet how can we go to the 'my document' folder?

Amy: guh, click the start button

Leela: when did you get here?

Amy: I was at the Zapp Brannigan t-shirt store

Bender: here, better grab one of these (hands Amy an uzi)

Amy: what am i going to do wit

Prof: Now when you get to the 'my documents' folder click on cookies

Fry: can do

Prof: watch out there may be many viruses somewhere hidden

Bender: let's see them try to get past me, you know my great great
uncle bender was a battle droid in the second AI war

(they get to the folder, and go into cookies)

Prof: now delete them all

(they spot zoidberg)

Leela: why are you deleting the cookies

Zoidberg: I wasnt trying to delete them i was trying to eat them
(starts sobbing)

Fry: Its actually a common mistake, ah so many wasted computers

Bender: alright lets bust a cap in these cookies' ass

Leela: ugh, the person who owns this computer is sick

Prof: I dont have a problem, i mean uh, yeah that sick bastard

(a group of viruses, jumps out everbody starts firing at them)

Fry: this reminds me of an old computer game, ahh, my hand

Leela: really, die bastard, what game?

Fry: Resident evil

Leela: is that like pong or something?

Fry: uh, yeah somewhat like pong

(fades out and back in, virus guts are everywhere)

Leela: well that wasnt too bad

Fry: whadda you talking about, i died six times and wheres bender and zoidberg

Bender: die you stupid crab

Zoidberg: whoopwhoopwhoopwhoop

(zoidberg runs into fry)

Fry: dodge this (shoots)

(Zoidberg was Shot)

Leela: what did you do that for?

Fry: I hate that whoopwhoop thing

(Fry with a suprised look on his face sees Zoidberg get up after being shot)

Fry: How the hell are you still alive?

Bender: Duh you stupid meat bag, we're in a computer.

Fry: uhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

Bender: That means that he can't die because its not real

Fry: oh ok

Fry (mumbling): i still don't get it

leela: since we're done with the mission let's do some searching around

fry: ok, to google.com, but i dont wnna walk that far

Leela: then lets take the bus

(bus comes up ent. google.com)

Fry:looks just like it used to

Bender: ok, how do we type?

Leela: well mine is on my wrist thing

Fry: mines on my shirt

Bender: well wheres mine, oh your god, its on my ass

Fry: well whadda we search for

Amy: Guh lets go gamble

(Ext. google ent. Back of casino, fry, leela amy and zoidberg have just gotten kicked out)

Fry: what did we do

casino staff: shuddup ya poor bastards

Amy: hmph, i didnt want to gamble anyway

Leela: so bender, what have you been up to?

Bender: thats my own buisness

Leela: what did you steal?

Bender: nothing actually

Leela: he's telling the truth, his lie o meter isn't finding any traces of lies

Fry: well its about time to be getting home

Bender: no its not (he pushes ok on a seperate window)

(a firewall goes up)

Fry: oh my god, its a wall, of fire

Bender: thats right none of you can get out now

(all gasp)

EDIT:3 days later fine dont tell me what you think of it also new, and last one is out on tuesday
JBERGES

Urban Legend
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« Reply #12 on: 05-11-2004 00:49 »
« Last Edit on: 05-11-2004 00:49 »

I know how important fanfic feedback is, GT.  So Ill critique your work:


1) First, Id just like to note that the beginning of your fanfic is surprisingly similar to the beginning of my fanfic, which was posted just two days earlier than yours. 

 http://peel.gotfuturama.com/cgi-bin/Futurama/4-000788-1/

Not that Im angry or anything, but it is best to use original material in something thats supposed to be an original creation.  (Granted, my beginning is just a pseudo-rehash of a gimmick Futurama has already done, but at least it was mostly original)

2) The reading experience would be much more enjoyable if you took some extra time to use proper punctuation, grammar, and capitalization.

3)   Things I liked: 

Bender: shut the hell up!

Zoidberg: I wasnt trying to delete them i was trying to eat them

Fry: uh, yeah somewhat like pong

Funny lines, I laughed.


4) Things I didnt like:

How can Bender have a great, great, uncle?

Two self-referencing Futurama jokes in a row(Guy frozen until 4000, and pastorama)

Unneeded catchphrases:  Guh (twice) Oh your God 


All in all, this story isnt bad, but its an extremely dicey read due the overall choppiness of the dialogue.  You need to work on flow.  Best of luck in writing the next chapters.

Brevity is the soul of
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #13 on: 05-11-2004 17:57 »
« Last Edit on: 05-11-2004 17:57 »

well only one more chapter, and the grammar is just as bad because my enlgish teacher(s) was horrible at teaching, but the refrences to futurama were meant ot be insults towards FOX and a stern warning of things to come, and the likeliness of yours was i loved the Scary door thing but i didnt copy it it was alot different then yours, not stolen, but mereley, based off that idea also new chapter done today:


Futurama Dead Program's Shoes(working Title)Chapter3


Leela: What did u do that for?


(Bender pulls out a beard and puts it on himself)


Bender: Im not Bender im Flexo

(ALL gasp)

Fry: Gasp

Leela: Okay Flexo, if u really are Flexo, When was the last time you were on a delivery trip with us?

Flexo: uhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh hhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh oh yeah, i was with you when we were delivering that precious jeweled tiara thingy

Leela: Okay, so you really are Flexo

Flexo: See i told you, I trust you but you don't trust me, go rot for all I care, nah just kidding you're great, nah, im gonna kill you

Flexo: I believe that you have met my friends(Roberto and the Robot devil come out from behind Flexo)

Roberto: I think it's time for a healthy stabbing

Flexo: Not now Roberto

Bender: (comes out from off stage) what'd I miss

Flexo: Not much but we're going to go on with phase 2

Bender: So I missed phase one

Roberto: well pretty much, but enough talk, and not enough stabbin'

(Roberto pulls out an old fashion 2004 Stilleto and tries to stab Fry)

Fry: Ah, get away, Roberto, go and get drunk with oil

Roberto: We don't drink oil you dumbass, we drink Alchohol, and when we dont drink we get drunk

Roberto (mumbles): Idiot

Fry: Who cares!!! go drink or something, but get the hell away

Roberto: im gonna kill you for that

(Roberto starts to chase Fry, Fry runs into the bathroom and locks the door)

Fry: You'll never get me in here

(Roberto drills a hole in the door and yanks it out)

Roberto: I've got you now

Fry: Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh h

(Leela yanks out Roberto's hand with the knife in it

Leela: I'm not giving it back

Roberto: I'll stab you

Leela: You don't have a knife

Roberto: Thats what you think, the knife is still in my hand

(Roberto's hand starts to walk on the ground, goes up to Fry and stabbs him in the arm)

Fry: OW!!!!! what did you do that for?

Roberto: Its what I do

(Roberto takes his hand back and puts it back in his socket)

Roberto: Thats what you get

Fry: You stabbed me (sobbing)

Robot Devil: yes, bu to get on We finally found use of the control button

Roberto: We use ctrl+c and ctrl+v to make millions of copies of ourselves

Flexo: Now we rule the internet (puts PE crew in a jail cell)

Bender: And you'll never ever get out (while looking at a volume of Pentium House)

Leela: Bender, help us, theyre evil

Bender: evil, or good, fun, or boring, ill go with evil

(Zapp Brannigan walk onstage)

Zapp: youre looking mighty fine there Leela

Leela: you have to help us they have made copies of themselves

Zapp: Well you could ask a little more sexfully

Leela: well f*ck that

Fry: Ill do it

Zapp: hmm, ill accept your offer

Fry: C'mon Big Z itll make he all uhhh, sexy

Zapp :  Deal, what do I do

(Leela tells him)
 
Tweek: Shouldnt we help them

Nixorbo: Yeah, i think we should

[-mArc-]: Nah, but lets close threads

Moderators: Yeah that sounds fun (sry, just had to do it)

Zapp: so, then i delete the copies and disable the firewall, and then you, Leela give me a very volour expirience

Leela: no

Zapp: Ill take that as a yes

(Zapp runs for the files)

Bender: shouldnt we have stopped them while they were telling him the plan?

Roberto: eh

Zapp: hmm, disabled the firewall now I just have to find the copies folder, hmm eait Zapp and leela video?

(Zapp enters a movie theater type room)

Audience guy: hey get out of the way

Zapp: you know that me on the screen

Guy: Yeah, right

(Zapp leaves the theater)

Zapp: that was great

(goes over to a big building: RAM)

Zapp: that must stand for really access must do leela

guy: that doesnt even make sense

Zapp: maybe, maybe

Leela  :  (as zapps thought) and delete it

Zapp: alright but i will need weapons (he walks over to store: blackmarket.com)

(Zapp walks out)

hmm... very nice, but thats was kiff's credit card, oh well

(zapp bloxs up RAM, evrything goes black)

Leela: (taking off helmet) we're saves

Fry: yeah but that mean no por i uh mean internet

Leela :  only for a few days

Bender: we're boned (talkin to other robots)

Beezlebot: speak for yourself, back to robot hell (a flame evaporates them)

Leela: why didnt you save us

Prof: well i was going to, but i was already in my pajamas

(ext. ent. 10 random peoples houses shows them taking off helmets looking pissed)

buisnessman: i was so close to getting a deal with the yarn people

nerd: captain janeway nude, nooooo

georgewahington: the 65th admentment nooo

robot: all my cicuits episode 45

zoidberg: noooo, my virtual pet slinky (shows a animated file of it crashing and burning)

comic book guy from simpsons: worst fanfic ever that made no sense so many unanswered questions


NOTE: sorry mods and [-mArc-] but i its funny, right, right, wwell i guess its not that funny (dont maul me)
No Im Isnt

Crustacean
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« Reply #14 on: 05-11-2004 18:29 »

I Helped you with that
No Im Isnt

Crustacean
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« Reply #15 on: 05-11-2004 18:34 »

Well............... with the second and first one
No Im Isnt

Crustacean
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« Reply #16 on: 05-11-2004 18:35 »

You suck, you didn't even check the puncuation and spelling
NibblerJr

Liquid Emperor
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« Reply #17 on: 05-11-2004 18:53 »
« Last Edit on: 05-11-2004 18:53 »

NO TRIPLE POSTS. Edit button is there for a reason, pal.

Edit:
Also,how can you be wasted when you are like 13..?
No Im Isnt

Crustacean
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« Reply #18 on: 05-11-2004 19:27 »

im still confused how do you reply by not double posting
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #19 on: 05-11-2004 19:32 »

on your posts next to profile and mail is an edit button you can add more things to the post or just edit spelling, also @ NibblerJr its called white out and sharpie and alcohol but with sharpie and white out i dont mean to just using them and....
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #20 on: 06-01-2004 16:17 »

yeah, just got muy scanner up, i know how much you hated my fanfiction so im trying fan art critique it!!!

Sm@ Cpt. Libido

Bending Unit
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« Reply #21 on: 06-01-2004 16:35 »

It is ok but I think the third part seemed a little, well, rushed but more forced, it didn't flow that well! The first two parts were very good though!
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #22 on: 06-01-2004 22:33 »

im going to try more fanfics cuz i got a good idea this time with puncuation grammar and flow also more art to come in  the near future (tomarrow maybe)
EvilLunch

Professor
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« Reply #23 on: 06-02-2004 12:09 »

Your fanart is better than your fanfiction, I'll give you that. A rare serious moment for Zapp, eh..? If the lines were darker it'd look even better!  big grin
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #24 on: 06-03-2004 00:25 »
« Last Edit on: 06-03-2004 00:25 »

Yeah, new fanart by me, critique (I know Evillunch isnt the only person on the boards)

and Evillunch, I am loving that avatar

screw that it looks bad small here http://img5.imageshack.us/my.php?loc=img5&image=scan31.jpg 

there we go
post what you think
EvilLunch

Professor
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« Reply #25 on: 06-03-2004 02:14 »

It could be a bit neater, but I like the content and the pose. If you trim it up it'll look fine in a smaller size...
Birdbot

Bending Unit
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« Reply #26 on: 06-03-2004 09:53 »
« Last Edit on: 06-03-2004 09:53 »

I've edited the spelling of chapter 1. It's a good story, but spelling and grammar make it a whole lot better:

Futurama: Dead Program's Shoes (working title) Ch. 1
(Opens to the scary door)

Announcer: You're about to enter the realm of a 40 year old man that still lives with his mother's mind without warning you are thrown into a black van and gang-raped by which is the confines of your mind... you have entered, The Scary Door, don't let the it hit you on your way out.
Rod Serling: This is Jim Blake, an accountant at Big Apple Bank, he has
found himself drowsy in a cylindrical room
Jim: Where am I?
Girl: Why should I answer you, you're just a doll!
Jim: But I've deciphered To Serve Man, it's a cookbook!
Random person: Why should I believe you, you're obsolete!
Jim: But... But...
Doctor: I'm sorry, the operation was unsuccessful, you're hideous!
Jim: I'll keep coming back through these shoes!
Someone: But you're dead!
(He pulls of a mask revealing he is a gremlin trying to destroy a plane)
Jim: Ahhh!
Bender: Fry, why do you watch this crap, it always ends the same way.
Fry: In mystery?
Bender: No, with someone taking off a mask.
Fry: Oh.
Bender: Now this is real TV (he changes the channel). This is about a
guy that was cryogenically frozen while delivering Chinese food, and
he ends up in the year 4000.
Fry: That's so unbelievable!
Bender: Yeah, but its a good show. That damned Fox always taking away the best
shows forcing dumb 30 year olds to write horrible fan fiction!
Farnsworth: Good news everyone, you will be testing my potentially dangerous
new invention!
Zoidberg: Can I do it?
Prof: Well, I think it's too important for you, Zoidberg.
Zoidberg: But that's not my
Bender: Shut the hell up!
(Zoidberg stars crying)
Prof: Lets get on with it; this is an old Compaq from the year 1997, about ten
years before Microsoft's horrible downfall.
Fry: But when I was frozen, Bill Gates was making $250 a second!
Prof: Well, after a show about a 25-year-old buffalo wing deliveryman that
travels into the past, called Pastorama, was cancelled, everything went down,
until the earth's destruction in 2112 and then its recreation by the Great Zombie
Jesus in 2114.
Fry: Oh, all right.
Prof: Well getting on, we are going to try to connect to the Internet through this
Windows 1995. Here are some Internet guns a personal mortar cannon some swords
a nuke and a
Bender: What are we going to need all these weapons for?
Prof: Oh, nothing
(They connect)
(They pass a site building: Zapp and Leela)
Leela: Don't even say it.
Bender: What, you mean about you sleeping with Zapp Brannigan?
Leela: *sighs* This doesn't look like a good part of town.
(The see another building: AskmoreSexfully's unofficial Zapp
Brannigan t-shirt shop)
[-mArc-]: This is a bust! (Kicks door down)
AskmoreSexfully: run for it guys (all people working run)
[-mArc-]: Book 'em Mods! (Mods run towards fleeing workers)
(they pass by)
Prof: (from offstage) Go to the 'My Documents' folder.
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #27 on: 06-03-2004 10:03 »
« Last Edit on: 06-03-2004 10:03 »

Thank you Birdbot, you're a good man, I was going to do it myself eventuallly but now I dont have to!!! also more fanart
 http://img25.imageshack.us/my.php?loc=img25&image=scan0002.jpg

this one was colored totally by hand and outlines in sharpie.
and also when I spelled zoidberg's name wrong it was meaning that the professor said it wonrg thus, making zoidberg sad
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #28 on: 06-03-2004 12:17 »

Sorry for double posting but I just tried doing a Paint art thing so here it is, and it only took me 5 or 6 minutes to do:

Birdbot

Bending Unit
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« Reply #29 on: 06-04-2004 09:06 »

Chapter 2, now with more grammar!  tongue

Futurama: Dead Program's Shoes (working title) Ch. 2

Fry: If we're on the Internet, how can we go to the 'My Documents' folder?
Amy: Guh, click the start button.
Leela: When did you get here?
Amy: I was at the Zapp Brannigan t-shirt store.
Bender: Here, better grab one of these. (Hands Amy an Uzi)
Amy: What am I going to do wit
Prof: Now, when you get to the 'My Documents' folder, click on cookies.
Fry: Can do!
Prof: Watch out, there may be many viruses hidden somewhere.
Bender: Let's see them try to get past me! You know, my great, great-uncle Bender was a battle droid in the second AI war.
(They get to the folder, and go into cookies)
Prof: Now delete them all.
(They spot Zoidberg)
Leela: Why are you deleting the cookies?
Zoidberg: I wasn't trying to delete them, I was trying to eat them!
(Starts sobbing)
Fry: It's actually a common mistake; ah, so many wasted computers.
Bender: Alright, lets bust a cap in these cookies' ass.
Leela: Ugh, the person who owns this computer is sick!
Prof: I don't have a problem, I mean, uh, yeah, that sick bastard!
(A group of viruses jump out, everybody starts firing at them)
Fry: this reminds me of an old computer game, ahh, my hand
Leela: Really? - die bastard! - What game?
Fry: Resident evil.
Leela: Is that like pong or something?
Fry: Uh, yeah, somewhat like pong.
(Fades out and back in, virus guts are everywhere)
Leela: Well that wasn't too bad.
Fry: Whadda you talking about, I died six times! And where's Bender and Zoidberg?
Bender: Die you stupid crab!
Zoidberg: whoopwhoopwhoopwhoop
(Zoidberg runs into Fry)
Fry: Dodge this! (Shoots)
(Zoidberg gets shot)
Leela: What did you do that for?
Fry: I hate that whoopwhoop thing.
(Fry, with a surprised look on his face, sees Zoidberg get up after being shot)
Fry: How the hell are you still alive?
Bender: Duh, you stupid meat bag, we're in a computer.
Fry: Uhhhhhhh...
Bender: That means that he can't die because it's not real.
Fry: Oh, ok.
Fry (mumbling): I still don't get it.
Leela: Since we're done with the mission, let's do some searching around.
Fry: Ok, to google.com, but I don't wanna walk that far.
Leela: Then lets take the bus.
(Bus comes up ent. google.com)
Fry: Looks just like it used to.
Bender: Ok, how do we type?
Leela: Well, mine is on my wrist thing,
Fry: Mine's on my shirt.
Bender: Well, where's mine? Oh your God, it's on my ass!
Fry: Well, whadda we search for?
Amy: Guh, lets go gamble.
(Ext. google ent. Back of casino, Fry, Leela Amy and Zoidberg have just gotten kicked out)
Fry: What did we do?
Casino staff: Shuddup, ya poor bastards.
Amy: Hmph, I didn't want to gamble anyway.
Leela: So Bender, what have you been up to?
Bender: That's my own business!
Leela: What did you steal?
Bender: Nothing actually.
Leela: He's telling the truth; his lie-o-meter isn't finding any traces of lies.
Fry: Well, it's about time to be getting home.
Bender: No its not! (He pushes ok on a separate window)
(A firewall goes up)
Fry: Oh my God, it's a wall, of fire!
Bender: That's right, none of you can get out now!
(All gasp)
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #30 on: 06-06-2004 22:03 »

Thank you birdbot, you dont know how much I apriectiate this and somem paint art



from TLL and Shaucker's RP

Birdbot

Bending Unit
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« Reply #31 on: 06-06-2004 23:04 »

Chapter 3: Now with at least 10% more grammer than before.

Futurama: Dead Program's Shoes (working title) Ch. 3

Leela: What did you do that for?
(Bender pulls out a beard and puts it on himself)
Bender: I'm not Bender I'm Flexo!
(All gasp)
Fry: Gasp!
Leela: Okay Flexo, if you really are Flexo, when was the last time you were on a delivery trip with us?
Flexo: Uhhhhhhhhh oh yeah, I was with you when we were delivering that precious jewelled tiara thingy.
Leela: Okay, so you really are Flexo.
Flexo: See, I told you, I trust you but you don't trust me, go rot for all I care! Nah, just kidding you're great! Nah, I'm gonna kill you!
Flexo: I believe that you have met my friends (Roberto and the Robot devil come out from behind Flexo)
Roberto: I think it's time for a healthy stabbing.
Flexo: Not now Roberto.
Bender: (comes out from off stage) What'd I miss?
Flexo: Not much, but we're going to go on with phase two.
Bender: So I missed phase one
Roberto: Well, pretty much, but enough talk, and not enough stabbin'!
(Roberto pulls out an old fashion 2004 Stiletto and tries to stab Fry)
Fry: Ah, get away, Roberto, go and get drunk with oil.
Roberto: We don't drink oil you dumbass, we drink alcohol, and when we don't drink we act drunk.
Roberto (mumbles): Idiot.
Fry: Who cares?! Go drink or something, but get the hell away!
Roberto: I'm gonna kill you for that!
(Roberto starts to chase Fry; Fry runs into the bathroom and locks the door)
Fry: You'll never get me in here!
(Roberto drills a hole in the door and yanks it out)
Roberto: I've got you now!
Fry: Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!
(Leela yanks out Roberto's hand with the knife in it)
Leela: I'm not giving it back!
Roberto: I'll stab you!
Leela: You don't have a knife!
Roberto: That's what you think; the knife is still in my hand!
(Roberto's hand starts to walk on the ground, goes up to Fry and stabs him in the arm)
Fry: Ow! What did you do that for?
Roberto: Its what I do.
(Roberto takes his hand back and puts it back in his socket)
Roberto: That's what you get!
Fry: (Sobbing) You stabbed me.
Robot Devil: Yes, but to get on, we finally found use of the control button.
Roberto: We used ctrl+c and ctrl+v to make millions of copies of ourselves!
Flexo: Now we rule the Internet! (Puts PE crew in a jail cell)
Bender: (while looking at a volume of Pentium House) And you'll never ever get out!
Leela: Bender, help us, they're evil!
Bender: Evil or good, fun or boring, I'll go with evil.
(Zapp Brannigan walk onstage)
Zapp: You're looking mighty fine there Leela.
Leela: You have to help us; they have made copies of themselves!
Zapp: Well you could ask a little more sexfully.
Leela: Well f*ck that!
Fry: I'll do it.
Zapp: Hmm, I'll accept your offer.
Fry: C'mon, Big Z, it'll make her all, uhhh, sexy!
Zapp: Deal, what do I do?
(Leela tells him)

Tweek: Shouldn't we help them?
Nixorbo: Yeah, I think we should.
[-mArc-]: Nah, but lets close threads!
Moderators: Yeah that sounds fun! (Sorry, just had to do it)

Zapp: So, then I delete the copies and disable the firewall, and then you, Leela, give me a very velour experience!
Leela: No.
Zapp: I'll take that as a yes!
(Zapp runs for the files)
Bender: Shouldn't we have stopped them while they were telling him the plan?
Roberto: Eh.
Zapp: Hmm, disabled the firewall, now I just have to find the copies folder. Hmm, edit Zapp and Leela video?
(Zapp enters a movie theatre type room)
Audience guy: Hey, get out of the way!
Zapp: You know, that me on the screen!
Guy: Yeah, right.
(Zapp leaves the theatre)
Zapp: that was great
(Goes over to a big building: RAM)
Zapp: That must stand for Really Access Must do Leela.
Guy: That doesn't even make sense!
Zapp: Maybe, maybe.
Leela: (as Zapp's thought) And delete it.
Zapp: Alright, but I will need weapons. (He walks over to store: blackmarket.com)
(Zapp walks out)
Hmm... Very nice, but that's was Kiff's credit card. Oh, well.
(Zapp blows up RAM; everything goes black)
Leela: (taking off helmet) we're saved!
Fry: yeah but that mean no por..., I, uh, mean Internet.
Leela: Only for a few days.
Bender: (Talking to other robots) We're boned.
Beezlebot: speak for yourself, back to robot hell (a flame evaporates them)
Leela: (to Prof.) Why didn't you save us?
Prof: Well, I was going to, but I was already in my pyjamas.
(ext. ent. 10 random peoples houses shows them taking off helmets looking pissed)
Businessman: I was so close to getting a deal with the yarn people
Nerd: Captain Janeway nude, nooooo!
George Washington: The 65th amendment, nooo!
Robot: All My Circuits episode 45!
Zoidberg: Noooooo, my virtual pet slinky! (shows a animated file of it crashing and burning)
Comic Book Guy from The Simpsons: Worst fanfic ever, that made no sense! So many unanswered questions!
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #32 on: 06-07-2004 15:43 »

new art

Guineapig Trick

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« Reply #33 on: 06-08-2004 20:01 »
« Last Edit on: 06-08-2004 20:01 »

so i got a new fanfic started, with puncuation!, and grammar! and some art too

Seven Roads to Robot Hell

(Opens to tv show)
Announcer(monster truck rally voice) its time for everyone's favorite
show, super monster tranformer fighters Z!!!!!

fruitza: (Guy in cheap purple and white costume, talking fast) I will
deafeat you Gookon and take your super fighter Z ball, because
I am evil and evil is good and good is bad, hahaha!!!

Gookon: No, it is I Fruitza, who will defeat you, becase good always
overcomes evil, because good is good, and bad, is bad, and good might
be bad in bad's eyes, but then I would be evil, nooooo! (blows self up)

Fruitza: Haha, I have overcome you!!!!

(hot anime chick goes up to screen, flashes panties for no apperant
reason)

Fry: No, thats not it.

Bender: What about this one? (changes channel)

Black dude: I'm MC Hammer, bitch!

Fry: Yup, this is it, the show where black guys make fun of white
guys, because white guys are dumb, ahhh. (opens Slurm takes sip)

Opening credits
caption: You want fries with that?
opening cartoon: superfriends :the flash running with the Atom on his
shoulder

(opens to the tv room, fry reading book: Seven roads to hell, leela
walks in, bender's on the couch)

Leela: Fry, I'm suprised, you're reading a book, a historical one
at that, I'm proud of you.

Fry: Yeah, that's what I'm doing.(Trys to hide book)

Bender: (Sees porno mag under book) Yeah, that's what he's doing. (Fry
hands Bender a wad of cash, and Bender automatically unscrews his
eye and puts money there, screws eye back in)

Leela: Now, if you could just stop stealing and wearing  my panties,
or atleast wash them before you put them back.

Fry: But they feel so good on my

Prof: Good mews, everyone!, you will be picking up the ship from the
wash and then deliver this package weighing 12 tons to Robotos 12,
the Robot Hell planet.

Leela: I thought Robot Hell was in New Jersey.

Prof: Yes, but the extra bad robots go to Robotos 12.

Fry: I see.

Leela: Well now we have to decide who will carry the package down the
street. (Bender and Leela point at Fry, Camera moves down, revealing
he's pointing to himself)

Fry: Aw, crud.

(ext. PE building, ent. street, Fry is pushing Crate using all his
might)

Leela: C'mon Fry, only 2 more blocks.

Fry: Alright, I guess it isnt too far.

(Camera zooms to wash builing, which is ontop of a steep hill going
straight up)

Bender: Haha, riiiiiiiiight.

(They pass a building: Quality Unnoficial Futurama merchandise
a cop resmebling [-mArc-] and 2 other cops the [-mArc-] reseblance
kicks door the front door down)

[-mArc-] look-alike: Goddamn, I love this job.

URL: Aaaaaaaaaaawwwwww, yeah!

(ext. street ent.door of wash, Fry wipes sweat from brow)

Fry: Wooo!, was that a workout!

Bender: What are you talking about I'm not the slightest bit exausted

(Leela rings doorbell, old man answers)

Leela: We're here to pickup our ship

Oldie: You're here to pickup my spit?, right this way.

Leela: OUR SHIP!!

Oldie: What a foul mouth. (Slams door)

(rings doorbell again)

Oldie: Hello, you know, there was a pretty girl who looked just
like you here earlier.

Leela: Why, thank you, no one has ev-

Oldie: Not you, saggy tits, this one. (points to Fry)

Fry: Aw, shucks. (blushes)

Leela: Lets get ship and get the hell out of here, to hell.

Oldie: Come on in.

(ext house ent. ship control room)

Leela: I'd appriciate it if you guys would stop staring at my ass
for a minuate and take this mission seriously. (bender looks up,
fry keeps staring) FRY!!!

Fry :(looks up) oh sorry. (his gaze get gradually lower until is at ass
again)

Leela: Bender.

Bender :(grabs fry throws him in room: laundry-brig) there you go
(puts out hand, whistles) any day now.

Leela :(puts a crisp 300$ bill in his hand) Now we'll be arrivig
shortley, so bender, while fry is unconsuiouswe'll need you to
unload the ship.

Bender: so this is what I get for helping out the captain!


art:
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plz plz tell me what you think!
No Im Isnt

Crustacean
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« Reply #34 on: 06-09-2004 23:19 »
« Last Edit on: 06-09-2004 23:19 »

You Suck GP
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #35 on: 06-09-2004 23:32 »

look at your own work, mr. No. Yeah more fanart tommarrow (colored or not)
Tramp

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« Reply #36 on: 06-10-2004 12:57 »

Leave No alone, i think its back to the drawing board with this idea to be honest. Good luck!
No Im Isnt

Crustacean
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« Reply #37 on: 06-10-2004 13:36 »

what?
Dr. Morberg

Professor
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« Reply #38 on: 06-10-2004 13:49 »

I think that your jokes are a little too non-Futuramaish. And they don't use such language as "saggy tits" or "bitch". Also, it makes no sense to have a Futurama merchandise store.
Guineapig Trick

Professor
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« Reply #39 on: 06-10-2004 15:15 »
« Last Edit on: 06-10-2004 15:15 »

eh, I was watching chappelles show at the time so i didnt think the language was too bad.
new fanrt:



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