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I've got an idea for an episode, but first: does anyone know anything about the Hyperchicken (dodgy lawyer in Brannigan, Begin Again)?

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Yeah he was a hick lawyer from a backwoods asteroid, so go on...

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How did he get to be a lawyer, anyway?

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He went to Yale.
....I'm terrible at Groeningesque jabs..

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Backwoods Asteroid?

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Anyway, my idea:

After Bender and Fry do a botched job repairing the airlock, the Planet Express crew goes down with a disease contratced from the Paramecium Planet.  With Bender, Fry, the Professor and Zoidberg as the only healthy crew members, Fry and Bender have to take deliveries.  When they are accidentally shot down by Zapp Brannigan; however; they crash-land on the planet of the Hyperchickens...

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maybe they could be attacked, the chickens thinking there corn

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No, Fry offends their goddess and has to prove his innocence by ordeal of egg and spoon race.

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good good, you can never ignore the sacred tradition of the egg and spoon race.

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Originally posted by Passing user:
Anyway, my idea:

After Bender and Fry do a botched job repairing the airlock, the Planet Express crew goes down with a disease contratced from the Paramecium Planet.  With Bender, Fry, the Professor and Zoidberg as the only healthy crew members, Fry and Bender have to take deliveries.  When they are accidentally shot down by Zapp Brannigan; however; they crash-land on the planet of the Hyperchickens...

I like it, sounds like a good idea,
but does Zapp have anything to do with the story besides shooting the ship down? If not Zapp shooting them down just seems kinda random IMO. Perhaps the chickens themselves could shoot down the PE ship, because it offends their goddess if anyone so much as enters Hyper Chicken space who isn't one of their own kind? It could play well with the sterotypical southerner image portrayed by the Chicken Lawyer.

Once again it's just a sugestion, don't listen to me if you don't want. I still really like the general idea behind the story. 

 

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Hmmm...definitely the more Zapp the better.

There are a couple of brief scenes with Zapp: you see, Fry and Bender's first delivery is delivering Kibbles & Snouts to Nixon (who is on the Nimbus).

There's a brief scene where Zapp spies the PE ship.  He thinks Leela is on board, and decides to throw a fireworks display for her, so he arms the "Killer Deathmissiles (TM)".  Kif warns him, but he fires them anyway, hitting the ship.  Finishes with him saying "Ooopsy."

Or the chickens could shoot him down (Get orrff moy land!, but I want Zapp in the story somehow.  Ideas?

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Well the bit you explained just then does actually go together quite well. It establishes a reason for the PE Ship to go near the Nimbus, and a reason for them to be shot down by Zapp. The way you explained it the first time, I thought that the Nimbus was going to be in the same region of space as the PE Ship for no apperant reason, and Zapp was going to shoot them down just for the hell of it. Sounds good, good luck with it.   

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I love the "ooopsy" idea. It sounds like something Zapp would do. If a man can blow up DOOP HQ with the Hyperdeath laser, why not a friendly delivery ship?

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haha 

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If anything like The Sting, you could have someone die (or pretend to) and have a cool surrounding thing like that.

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Haven't seen the Sting.  I assume that's a pic from it as your avatar?

Edit: Perhaps I'll post scene by scene here.  Title?  Kentucky Fryed Chicken...seeing as they are US southerners...nah, that's rubbish.  Oh well.

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Yeah my avatar is from the Sting. The only one I liked. But I love that episode! Thanx for noticing.

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Disclaimer: I claim no ownership of Futurama, its concepts and characters.

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SCENE: Planet Express Meeting Gallery thing.
The group are all seated around the table for the 10am meeting - Farnsworth and Leela are missing. Strangely, Bender is talking and htere is no chart.
BENDER: And that was how I was promoted from goon to henchman...
The group applauds and laughs
HERMES: Sweet Lincoln of Kingston, I enjoyed that almost as much as a "Death at Work" form.  [glances down] Well look at the time!  I'll have to save my report for tomorrow.View of report - "Graphic Evaluation of the Deuteronomic Theology".  Coconut to anyone who knows what this means
Leela walks in
LEELA: Glad to see you're enjoying yoursleves, but we've got work to do.  Hermes, I need all the lawsuits against Planet Express collected, filed and shredded.  Amy, that Slurm machine in the corridor is playing up again.

CUT TO: Picture of corridor
Fry places a coin into the machine and is sucked up into it!

CUT TO: PE meeting room
LEELA: (gesturing to Fry and Bender)...and you two, the inner airlock's broken.  Fix it.
FRY: (does a mock salute) No problamo!

Well, what do you think so far?

Show spoiler

A few seconds pass, before Bender comes along, tries to get a can of Slurm and Fry flies out.
FRY: Thanks, Bender.
Bender walks off. A few seconds later, Fry deposits another coin and is sucked in again.  Some people never learn.

- Dleted scene

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I'd cut Fry getting sucked into the machine a 2nd time... It's more of a Family Guy-style joke then a Futurama one.  Otherwise, it's looking good.

As for a title, may I suggest... "Chicken-Fried Fry"? (Like Chicken-Fried Steak, you see... heh... heh?)

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SCENE: Planet Express Ship
Establishing shot of the isde of the ship.  Fry and Bender are seen entering, and the shot changes to inside the airlock.  It's a small, boring, grey room with two doors
FRY: (testing outer door) This one looks OK.
Bender is peering at the other door
BENDER: Here's your problem, chump.  Not airtight.
Close-up of door - couple of centimetres gap as Bender swings it
BENDER: Nuthin' a little bending won't fix.
He pulls a pipe from the wall, which begins leaking some important-looking brown stuff.  He bends a section of the pipe and wedges it under the door.
BENDER: Job done.  Now let's go grab some beer and watch All My Circuits.
FRY: (nodding) We've earned it, Bender.  We've earned it.

SCENE: PE Lounge
Bender and Fry walk in, sit on the sofa and put their feet up.  Fry picks up the remote and turns the TV on.
VOICE: [VO] You may think that you're watching something warm, something cosy.  But you're not.  This show will freeze your blood, and turn your eyes to ferrets, or something scarier.  You're watching...The Scary Door.
Scene changes to show TV set.  A mad scientist is holding a weird instrument, looking a bit like a gramaphone.
MAD SCIENTIST: Now, I have invented the quantum telporterajig!  People can move from galaxy to galaxy in no time at all! [narrows eyes] Now to find an unsuspecting, seemingly unimportant gineau pig...
Mad scientist walks over to a computer screen.
MAD SCIENTIST: I'll watch their progress with a webcam.
Passer-by...erm, passes by.
MAD SCIENTIST: Hey, buddy! [slips webcam onto man]
PASSER-BY: Huh?
A purple ray flies from the quantum teleporterajig and the man disappears.  The computer screen changes.
MAD SCIENTIST: Yes, it worked! But wait...he was my oesophagus donor.  I'm..agh!
He collapses.  Dramatic low note of music.  Cuts back to Fry and Bender.
FRY: It's true, these plotlines really are getting better.
BENDER: Gottit in one.  I learned about science without morality, and the potential misuse of technology, that can paradoxically reverse its role from good to evil.
FRY: [imitating] I learned neh neh neh neh nah...parabolically reserve...
BENDER: That's what I said, jerk. [violently shakes head] Sorry, Fry, I must've a corrupted file.  I'll need to rinse my head with warm water.
Sound of a door opening.  Zoom out to show Leela standing by the sofa.
LEELA: Hey, I thought I told you jerkwads to fix that airlock door.
BENDER: We did it.
LEELA: [surprised] You did?
BENDER: You have Honest Bender's word.
Professor walks in.
PROFESSOR: Good news, everyone!
LEELA: Somehow I doubt that.
PROFESSOR: You'll be making a delivery to Vega 4 today, a hostile planet plotting the genocide of the human race and the destruction of Evolution Theory.  Rather like the Texas Planet, actually.
FRY: Is this going to get us killed?
PROFESSOR: Oh, my, I should think so.
LEELA: Then perhaps we should -
PROFESSOR: [ushering them out the door] Off you go!

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Ooohh...

YLB likes.

But like Boingo said, cut the second time Fry gets sucked into the machine unless it contributes to something signifigant (sp?) that happens later, or something to that extent.

Anyway, I look forward to reading the rest!   

Edited for grammar and bad wording

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(OK, will do)
SCENE: Establishing shot of the PE ship in space.  It flies past the Millennium Dome (rotating with lights, like a flying saucer) and heads towards a blue-ish planet.

SCENE: PE Ship Bridge
Leela is addressing Fry and Bender
LEELA: OK, listen up you two: our next delivery is to the Paramecium Homeworld.  They're not too keen on strangers, so be on your best behaviour.
FRY: Cool.  What are we delivering?
LEELA: Single-celled organism porno.
BENDER: [sniffs, and wipes a tear away] Such a noble cause...
LEELA: One last thing: we don't know what's down there, so use space suits and the decontamination airlock.
FRY: Leela, relax. We'll be fine - you know me and Bender.
Leela looks more worried

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One word for the chicken war:

Bender or Fry or both: THE CHICKENS ARE COMING! THE CHICKENS ARE COMING!

I find it amusing. 

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Originally posted by Spacedal11:
If anything like The Sting, you could have someone die (or pretend to) and have a cool surrounding thing like that.

You baffle me.

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Why?

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Sorry I've been away...Oh, all my scenes look a little short at the mo.  Need to bulk them up.  Never mind, couple of longer scenes approaching.

SCENE: Vega 4 surface. Fry and Bender (in spacesuits) are dragging two large crates. The sky is a strange blue haze, and the gound is greeny-marine colour. Fry and Bender stop.
Bender turns his arm into a crowbar to open the crates.  Behold such titles as "Cilia & Cytoplasm", "Playcell" and "Mitosis, Mitosis, Mitosis".  Lots of Paramecia swarm around them and make off with magazines.
BENDER: Well, job done.
FRY: [OS] Er, yeah, whatever.
He has his nose in a magazine: Bender catapults it out of Fry's hand and they head towards the ship.

SCENE: Airlock
It's boring, like before. As Fry and Bender step in, the door closes behind them. At the same time, the lights turn red, a humming noise starts and they both start rotating on a small circular base.  After a few rotations, the lights change back, they stop moving and the humming stops.  The inner airlock door flies open with a microwave *ping*.  Leela walks in and inspects the door.
LEELA: [sighs] I thought I told you to fix the door.
FRY: You did.  Don't feel too bad about it, Leela - you did your best.
Leela buries her face in her hands
LEELA: And did you fix it?
BENDER: Hell no.  Look at the evidence we didn't: it's right before your eye.
She's furious
LEELA: You disobeyed a direct order?  To fix the airlock?
BENDER: Hey, don't go upside your head!
LEELA: We could have contracted something.
FRY: What do you think that thing's for, that...oh, you know...
LEELA: Dr. Zoidberg?
FRY: Yeah.  Look, trust me, Leela, we'll be fine.

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Originally posted by Spacedal11:
Why?

You know what'd be a great idea? If you like, omg, completely changed your well thought out and well, already penned story and swap it for an episode they already made that I liked. And then that'd be like so cool.

Moron.

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Cool Idea, can't wait till it's finished.     

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CUT TO: Zoidberg's office
Leela's POV shot looking at Zoidberg with a stephoscope and in doctor's coat.
ZOIDBERG: [alarmed] Swimming badgers of Atlanta!
HERMES: [OS] Don't be stealing me sayings, mon.
The shot changes to show Hermes sitting on Zoidberg's desk.  His face is covered with large, purple boils.
ZOIDBERG: Sorry.
HERMES: [brightens] Swimming badgers of Atlanta!...Oh, I enjpyed saying that.
Zoidberg puts his hands behind his back and strolls around his office. Everybody in Planet Express is there, all covered in these weird boils.  Only the Professor, Bender, Zoidberg and Fry aren't affected.
ZOIDBERG: It would appear that you have all contracted a space disease.
AMY: Like, guh.
ZOIDBERG: [He continues] But where from?
HERMES: Probably from you, you stinking crab!
LEELA: [elbowing Fry in the stomach] Or from these two! [indicating Fry and Bender] They didn't fix the airlock door.
All narrow their eyes.  Some move to get up towards Fry and Bender, who back into a corner.
ZOIDBERG: My friends, relax.  Zoidberg has come to the rescue, and he'll do whatever he can to save the crew.  But now for diagnosis!
He walks over to his bookcase and pulls out a book - "Illustrated Encyclopaedia of Alien Diseases".  He reads intentively, occasionally mumbling.
ZOIDBERG: Mmmm...it's repulsively appetising.
LEELA: Erm, Dr. Zoidberg...?
ZOIDBERG: Hmm?  Oh, yes.  Just as I thought: a new disease.  I shall call it...Zoidberg's Acute Isometricitis Diseaseconditiondeficiencysyn drome!
FRY: [glancing through the medical book] Actually, Zoidberg, it looks more like Space Measles.
ZOIDBERG: What?! Who is the doctor? It is my disease!  Only something so disgusting can be named after yours truly.
He snaps his claws threateningly.
FRY: Err, yeah, whatever you say!

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SCENE: Planet Express landing bay
Large shot of ship, followed by normal shot of the Professor and everyone filing through the doorway behind him.
PROFESSOR: I'll need a new crew.  Who's healthy?  You know, donatable organs, fresh supply of blood, that sort of thing.
ZOIDBERG: I am.  Crustaceans don't get human diseases.
BENDER: I'm bendering-healthy too. [Turns to face the rest] Ha ha ha!  I laugh at you weak meatbags. [His door falls off]
PROFESSOR: My lifetime of exposure to radiation has made me immune to just about every disease in my biological warfare lab.  Sadly, though, my THS is playing up.
PROFESSOR'S HUMP: No it isn't!
FRY: Yo!  I'm fine.
AMY: But how?
Fishy Joe walks on from nowhere
FISHY JOE: I can explain that.  You see, the additives in new DIET Walrus Juice can cause immunity to certain diseases [then under breath] and cancer [normal again] in humans.
Screen changes to animated advert for NEW! Extreme Walrus Juice - DIET! (Ride the Walrus)
FISHY JOE: [VO] Drink new diet walrus juice.  Ride the walrus - healthily!
He disappears as quickly as he came. Awkward silence.
HERMES: Erm...well that made complete sense.
PROFESSOR: Yes, I understood every word of it.  Well, Zoidberg and I will have to stay here and treat the crew.
ZOIDBERG: Yay!  Patients!  I'll take care of your, with my Offal Federation-endorsed new medicine.
He holds out a bottle:
GRANDMA ZOIDY'S SPACE SLUG EXTRACT
*NOW WITH 50% MORE BROKEN GLASS*
Everyone cringes.
PROFESSOR: So, Fry and Bender that makes you my new crew.
BENDER: Wow, our very own pimpmobile!
PROFESSOR: Yes.
He goes to hand over the keys when a voice is heard
CUBERT: [OS] Not so fast.
We see Cubert coming down the stairs.
CUBERT: As a clone, I inherited some of my father's immunity, and now it is my job to command this troop of ignorami as we - ah!
He falls down the stairs and lands with a bone-crunching noise in a mangled heap at the foot of the stairs.  Bender can be seen at the top with leg extended.
BENDER: Got 'im!

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SCENE: Landing Bay.
Shot of the whole ship, then normal zoom.  Farnsworth is seeing Bender and Fry off.
PROFESSOR: Here are the keys.  Take care!
FRY: Will do.
They climb into the ship as Farnsworth waves.  The engines burst into flame, the ship hovers...and flies through the back wall in reverse.  Still, it flies off.
FRY: [OS] We're flying!
BENDER: [OS] And semi-legally this time.
CUT TO: Spaceship interior
Fry is at the controls, Bender is sitting down behind him.  Bender is reading a Fembot magazine.
FRY: So, Bender, what have we got to deliver?
BENDER: Huh? [puts down the magazine] Oh, three metric tons of Kibbles 'n' Snouts, for some reason.  We've gotta drop them off at the Nimbus.  Wanna just dump them here and get a day off?
FRY: Well...nah.  Anyway, why would the DOOP need thousands of cans of offal?

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CUT TO: Nimbus hall (where the cadets eat in War is the H-Word
Nixon, Zapp and Kif take the places of honour.  Kif, wearing an apron, is emptying a can of "Kibbles 'n' Snouts" into Nixon's head jar.  Nixon swims around and eats the pieces.
NIXON: Mmm, mmm.  Some damn good snout you got there, Brannigan.  Mmm.  Shame it's the last can, though.  When will that delivery ship get here?
KIF: Don't worry, sir, the Planet Express ship has just been permitted to land.
ZAPP: [suddenly paying attention] Planet Express?  Leela will be making the delivery?
He looks towards the window viewing space, and the PE ship can be seen flying in wild loops.
ZAPP: This might be my one chance to make her mine once and for all!
He flips open a control panel marked
KILLER
(FIRE)
DEATHMISSILES
-the (FIRE) is a large red button.
ZAPP: She couldn't resist a fireworks display!
KIF: Er, no, sir, I don't think that's a wise course of action.  In my experience,you can't woo women by firing missiles at them.
ZAPP: Kif, you have no experience: you've never wooed a single lady.  So sit back and watch the Master of Wooment at work!
He presses the button.

CUT TO: 3D image of Nimbus guns aiming and firing at the PE ship.  Dozens of guided missiles stream towards the engines.
CUT TO: Flight deck of PE Ship
Fry is still flying, while Bender is gazing out the window watching the explosions around them.
BENDER: Hey, Fry, take a look at these missiles.  Somebody's getting boned!
FRY: Wow...pretty.  Bender, take a picture!
Bender's eyes extend and a camera shutter noise is heard.
Suddenly the ship rocks with explosions, Star Trek style.
FRY: We're taking heavy fire!
BENDER: [starts panicking] Aggh, we're boned for sure!
FRY: Shields at 60...deflector ray knocked offline...structural integrity weakened but holding.
BENDER: What the hell are you talking about, Fry? We don't have any of these things!
FRY: We don't?  Aggh!  We're gonna die!
3D shot of the ship hurtling out of control towards a clouded, yellow planet.  Bender and Fry are both screaming.

CUT TO: Nimbus hall
Zapp is cringing at the sight of the ship going down.  He turns away.
Zapp: Ooopsy.

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SCENE: Alien planet surface
All is quiet, we just watch the clouds move and the dust blow for a moment.  The noise of the PE ship engines starts to become audible, and increases in volume, becoming pretty loud when the ship comes into view.  It crashes noise-first into the ground, having fallen vertically.  It balances for a moment, then falls backwards and lands upside-down with a crunch.  Fry and Bender emerge.
FRY: Thank God we crashed.  I thought I was going to have to do an emergency landing.
Bender starts scanning the horizon.  Switch to Bender's POV, as his head moves back and forth.  Suddenly, a bush moves, and the centre of sight snaps back to it.
Normal shot:
BENDER: Er, Fry...[he points]
Fry ooks: the bush moves again.
FRY:  Aghh!  Something's...moving...
He grabs Bender, who looks annoyed.  Slowly, a large chicken (similar to the Hyperchicken) emerges, and a line of chickens get up from behind a row of rocks behind him.
CHICKEN LEADER: Howdy, folks!


OK, it would really help me if you told me what you think of this so far - is everyone in character, is it funny in the right places, have I completely lost it, and so on.  Also, I'm not American, so I don't know mucha bout how to make the chickens look like Southerners, so please, help there would be appreciated.

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i like it`

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Cool, it's very good so far and it is funny, but it could be slightly funny. It will probably get alot funnier naturaly though as the chickens come into play, gr8 job! 

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Thanks, guys.  Well, looking again, girls.  Got any ideas about what could happen on the planet? 

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SCENE: Chicken Planet
Chicken Leader is talking, giving Fry and Bender the tour of the planet.
CHICKEN LEADER: [continuing]'Scuse me just while I cross this road here [crosses road with Fry and Bender]...so, welcome, y'all, to Planet Chicken,  bwuk!, where we good folks live an' pray.
FRY: Who to?
CHICKEN LEADER: Her.
The shot pans up to show a 200m tall statue of a hen.  The plaque reads:
Grand Old Chicken
"Bwuk!"
FRY: I can't believe I missed that enormous statue.
CHICKEN LEADER: She's our holy chicken, who nestled the egg of the world.  You'll learn more about her at the country club, where we decent folks -
BENDER: [interrupting] Yeah, whatever.  Got any booze?
CHICKEN LEADER: Try the whiskey distillery.  Other side o' town.
BENDER: I will.
He grabs Fry and pulls him off towards the distillery.  Fry manages to relax Bender's grip.
FRY: Bender, we're three hours late for the delivery.  Shouldn't we phone the rest?
BENDER: What, that group of losers I hate and never want to see again except in coffins?
FRY: Yeah, those lot.  When d'you think they'll be well again?

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This is all good stuff Passing user, very nice indeed 

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Just read your last post Passing User, you had me on the floor laughing! Your very good at writing, keeping everyone in character and you've got some gr8 jokes! If the show every starts up again (Come God you owe us BIG!!!) you should become a writer on it, serioulsy this is professionly stuff! 

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Ah, thanks, I'm embarassed now.
CUT TO: Planet Express HQ Exterior.
Night.
ZOIDBERG: [OS] Medication time!
ALL: "omni" - all offstage Oh, man/Enough already!/Bleauch!/Sweet bear de la mer!/etc.
ZOIDBERG: [OS] But first, Cubert, your physiotherapy.
CUBERT: [OS] Look, you incompetant lobster, for the last time, I don't have a dorsal fin-agghhh!
Hideous sounds.