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Sarge
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Cute. But I don't know Futurama well enough to make any major changes to it. I've rewritten some fanscript sections for other people doing Simpson fanfics, much to the authors' dismay, but to their readers' delights. It's a tricky subject (fanfic), and it's brutal. It's also fantastic. There's a lot of creativity involved. I'm quite surprised you got the correct format & margins pretty much down. I love the virtual reality Monopoly section. Could be beefed up, but that's not the point. That's the 'jumping off' section. One main reason the scripts are so fresh & funny is that they've got one writer writing a rough draft of a script, then all the other writers look at it & suggest changes as they're imagination dictates. All notes are written down & explored. They have a brainstorm fest over the script to throw their wildest ideas into the rough first script. You are just one person. They are many, & all supporting each other. That's why their scripts are so 'killer'. So don't be discouraged. Keep refining your imagination. Good job!
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Nixorbo
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Found a typo:
"Oh my, yes! Even forgetting the fact that he’s wasting valuable company time...earlier today I put the finishing touches on my new invention, Prison 3002 Deluxe!"
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Nurdbot
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That was preety good.When the Outlet gets the fanfics back read my 3RD time lucky fics
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Ninaka
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Hey this ain't half bad. You got the Futurama humour cuts and angles down pat. Some beefing needed, but most of it is there!
BEST FANFIC EVER!!!!.... well maybe, but i've never read anybody elses.. so you're ahead right now.
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DrThunder88
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Good call, FJ. I was indeed making my rounds.
I thought it was great. There were a few rough spots, but it's still high quality comedic material. Several spots made me laugh out loud, which isn't the norm for fanfics. I especially appreciated the lack of drama and romantic subplots (I'm one of those cold-hearted S.O.B.s everyone hates because I hate heart-warming, feel-good stories).
...and that's Dr. 88. I recently finished my dissertation in Brontology.
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DrThunder88
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"Bronte" is Greek for thunder.
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Teral
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Yeah, actually quite funny. I like it, especially the part with Zoidberg. Good job, FishyJoe.
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iliketowankalot
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I only just read it, funny stuff Fishy, I liked the way you slip subtle porn into it "Leela shuts off the program and yanks Fry’s helmet off" got anymore fanfics?
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Tokash
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Erm, where is the story, BNB? The link leads no where. And after seeing all the reviews, it's a tease to not be able to read it.
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