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Kif White

Bending Unit
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« Reply #320 on: 10-26-2003 14:41 »

 
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Originally posted by Venus:

Answer. Sort of...:
Venus

Urban Legend
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« Reply #321 on: 10-26-2003 14:56 »

that kinda answers it. I still don't understand her thinking patterns though. I understand that she's been hurt and all but she just seemd so selfish for someone who came off in the begining as being sweet and empathetic. I keep waiting for Fry to realize how selfish she really is. She doesn't deserve him. I send many thoughts of ill-will in her general direction.

Oh, and i hope my rants don't offend you at all. I know she's your character so you probably have  alot invested in her and then i go railing on about her sucking and stuff.
Kif White

Bending Unit
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« Reply #322 on: 10-26-2003 15:03 »

Well, basically... she's become more selfish because of Fry. At the beginning she was just nice but kept her feelings bottled up inside. When amnesia struck, she was still kind but a little more opened up. When she regained her memories, she became brutally honest, realised she really cared for Fry, and became jealous, possessive and selfish of him.

Oh, and I haven't taken any offense. Though I do sometimes wonder if people are a little unfair and critical of her just because they're shippers who don't want her to get between Fry and Leela...  wink
Venus

Urban Legend
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« Reply #323 on: 10-26-2003 15:10 »
« Last Edit on: 10-26-2003 15:10 »

yeah my opinion is a little biased, guilty as charged, but she is really selfish and that thing i was talking about earlier about her dad has nothing to do with the shippy part of the story.

and if Fry brings out the worst in her then they really shouldn't be together
Mango

Starship Captain
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« Reply #324 on: 10-26-2003 20:28 »

Squee! Mango rants about teh New UoM Chapter:

Alesia's always feeling so sorry for herself.  I can't stand people like that.  *hisssssss.*  I've had bad experiences with angsty, self-absorbed people...:|  And there you go, it's my official reason for my overwhelming hatred of Alesia!

But aside from beating that extremely dead horse...

I luved Zoidberg in this chapter, of course.  love I also really enjoyed the flying bender thing.  big grin And the whole battle scene was pretty cool and all.  Only you don't feel much sympathy when some of the rebelling people are dying, since they were briefly introduced, and then immediately killed off.  But having backstory on all of them would have long and boring anyway...  sleep

But I'm no good with critiquing plots and stuff, so don't listen to me! 

....BUT!  I found a usage error, I did I did! *dances*  At one point, the word "distain" was used instead of "disdain."  "Distain" means to take the color out of something, but "disdain" is dislike and whatnot.  Wow I'm picky!  Go me!  Yay for Mango, Mango wins!  In your face, fanfic-writing-guy!
don't hurt me.
Futurama_Hil

Urban Legend
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« Reply #325 on: 10-26-2003 21:04 »
« Last Edit on: 10-27-2003 00:00 »

Just read it, thumbs up once again! I love this fiction, it should be published into a short story!   wink

I admit my hatred of Alesia is basicaly because I don't like her getting in the way of Fry and Leela, but in the end, I know Fry'll pick the right choice (Meaning Leela.)   tongue. Also she is such a whiner, I hate whiners.   tongue. But yes, it's great to see Leela get jealous, I love it when she does.
Venus

Urban Legend
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« Reply #326 on: 10-26-2003 21:15 »

 
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Originally posted by Kif White:
 Answer. Sort of...:

i don't know how i missed reading that the first time around but
Wonderbee31

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« Reply #327 on: 10-26-2003 21:18 »

Well, I just finished reading the new chapters of Universe of Malice , and Delicious Surprise, so here's my thoughts on them.

First off, I find myself nodding and agreeing with Venus, Mango, and Hil about Alesia.  If Fry does bring out the worst feelings in her, then they don't need to be together in my opinion.  If they did get together, then I could envision a point in time, maybe 5 years or so, when Fry really started to devbelop feelings of dislike for her, because I could not see her letting him stay around any of his friends, especially Leela, and Fry would grow to resent her for it.  I hope that this is going to end with Leela and Fry together.

As for Delicious Surprise, great stuff as always, there's a Thanksgiving story, some great Zoidberg stuff, and it just flows for me.  I love the way that it's coming together, and think that Missy's a great shipper writer, one who whips me with a...whipping stick?  Oh, whatever, anyway, read this fic folks, you'll like it.

p.s. Hey Hil, Giants won!  Whoo hoo!
Venus

Urban Legend
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« Reply #328 on: 10-26-2003 21:27 »

im always so dissapointed after reading a chapter of delicious surprise. Not because i dislike the story, cause i love it, but because i know it will be like a month or so before i get any more. Same with UoM and every other serial fic. It's like giving me peanut butter fudge and then yanking it back and saying i can have some more at a yet to be established time.
Wonderbee31

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« Reply #329 on: 10-26-2003 21:53 »

I'm agreeing with you again Venus *egad!*. I love reading the serial fics, but it's awful having to wait sometimes, especially if the story is really starting to draw me in.  That said, I'm glad that there are so many talented writers who are able to do so much with these characters.  Wouldn't trade any of 'em for the world.

(Well, maybe if they gave me a lot of money, tax free of course...dyah! I mean, never, never in a million years!)
Futurama_Hil

Urban Legend
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« Reply #330 on: 10-26-2003 22:36 »
« Last Edit on: 10-27-2003 00:00 »

Missy's a good writer for a fun fiction, but, frankly, she does't really touch me emotionally like other shippers' stories, but it's a good read and original story too.   smile

 
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Originally posted by Wonderbee31:
p.s. Hey Hil, Giants won! Whoo hoo!

Damn straight.
Allen

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« Reply #331 on: 10-27-2003 00:17 »

Well, I just finished reading the latest chapters of UoM. Unlike some of you, I don't hate Alesia. I find her to be a refreshing challenge. It explores Fry's character and to an extent Leela's as well. Well done. I await the next chapter with anticipation

Next is Delicious Surprise. While not a horrid fic, it strikes me as emotionally dull. Perhaps later chapters will fix this.

All this talk of serials reminds me of my own serial The Frylight Zone. I long to finish it, but school stands in my way. I will finish it, even if it takes years.:P
Asylum-Fry

Liquid Emperor
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« Reply #332 on: 10-27-2003 00:21 »

 
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Originally posted by Allen:
All this talk of serials reminds me of my own serial The Frylight Zone. I long to finish it, but school stands in my way. I will finish it, even if it takes years.:P

Say, when will you work on the next part of that? I liked it, so far, even if it's a tad confusing to me (I think there's something I'm not getting).
Venus

Urban Legend
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« Reply #333 on: 10-27-2003 00:23 »

i agree that Alesia is really well done character wise. She's the best original character i've ever read. I like how she makes the other characters act i just don't like her as a person.

Allen

Professor
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« Reply #334 on: 10-27-2003 12:22 »

 
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Originally posted by Asylum-Fry:
 Say, when will you work on the next part of that? I liked it, so far, even if it's a tad confusing to me (I think there's something I'm not getting).

It's definately pushing me to finish it. This week will be extra busy, but after if I can just stay one step ahead of the school game, we could see an update soon. Don't worry about it being confusing, the next part planned focuses on eliminating some of that confusion.

I have it all worked out in my head. Now I just have to write it. I also think considering the time it's taken me (or rather us) to finish, any other single fics I do will be one shot deals. I hate unfinished work and the serial is a breeding ground for it.

wu_konguk

Urban Legend
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« Reply #335 on: 10-27-2003 15:54 »

Well I just sat down and read "Universe of Malice" up to the latest chapter, which was no mean feat I can tell you.
Firstly I salute Mr White. I, love epicness and this story is Epic.
One of the things that struck me was the sheer amount of parodies in it, especailly Star Trek ones. I did like the bald prsioner being tortured about the nuber of lights he could see (only just recently I watched that episode of TNG). Also anyone who takes the piss out of Dragonball Z is alright in my books.
As for the story it is interesting some bits I felt were abit dull (mostly the DOOP bits) but this maybe due more to personal tastes in genre. I definitly enjoy the the bits with Baldur and Zapp inside ...oh hell..I'm going to call it Unicron. I found these parts to be very entertaining. I did not really like the PE sections until the later chapters, basically from the arena match. I think that the evolution of the characters is working very well and I am very interested to see how the writter will choose to continue their evolutions.
As for Alcia. She is an interesting character but I can't say that I like her. There are just many aspects of her I do not like but that said I do believe she helps the story along. She bring out interesting reactions from Leela and Fry. Also the great thing about fan made characters is that they can be killed off more easily  evil laugh as shown through the fic in genral.
As I have stated on this board and i my own works I am a Fry and Leela shipper so I hope this Alcia thing will help their relationship progress.

All in all I will reserve judgement on this fic until it is complete. That said so far I think it is progressing well and I am interested to see how it will continue.

I will finish by saying one thing.
There is an evil new force in the universe.
A monster planet that devours everything in it's path......
And its' heading for the small planet of cybertron.....
Venus

Urban Legend
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« Reply #336 on: 10-27-2003 16:44 »

hey Wu_konguk do you ever plan on finishing your fic?
wu_konguk

Urban Legend
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« Reply #337 on: 10-27-2003 17:47 »

Funny you should ask. After finishing universe of malice I relised if I have enough free tiem to read that then I should have enough time to finish my fic. Being at uni helps as well since I now have a little more free time on hands.
So far I've done to the first four pages. I don't know how long it will be but it will be the last chapter no matter how much longer it is compared to the other chapters.
With all that said I do get easily distracted, espically by cheap beer. It will get finished .....eventually. (I'll try to get the first draft done by the end of the week smile)
Kif White

Bending Unit
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« Reply #338 on: 10-28-2003 15:40 »

Seems like Alesia the character everybody loves to hate...  wink

I'd like to say something regarding her character though. She's not really a selfish person, at least not normally. The only time she was supposed to be purposefully and uncharacteristically selfish was when she thought about not telling the crew about Leela on Delphine.

The rest of the time is that she's just somebody who has kept her negative feelings festering inside her for ten long years, slowly poisoning her, only to have Fry actually be somebody who she can let it all out to.

So the reason she always talks about her troubles isn't because she is a selfish person... it's because all the hoorible things she has kept inside are suddenly gushing out together now that she has somebody to support her.

Yes, that probably still is fairly selfish... but that's the reasoning behind it. Take that how you want  smile
wu_konguk

Urban Legend
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« Reply #339 on: 10-28-2003 15:47 »

It seems I had less to do than I thought. I have completed the final chapter of my fic and have sent it ot TLZ. So it should be up in a few days.
I would like to hear some critique if you read it  smile
getak2003

Bending Unit
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« Reply #340 on: 10-28-2003 18:30 »

Fan fic good

probalbly....
Allen

Professor
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« Reply #341 on: 10-28-2003 18:36 »

 
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Originally posted by getak2003:
Fan fic good

probalbly....

Note: He said those that have read it.



The end of a story is only the beginning.
Zoop
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« Reply #342 on: 10-29-2003 13:24 »

@Kif : How did you choose the name "Delphine" ? it's a bit in contradiction with the style of creatures, their Planet and the meaning of "delphin"...

it's weird, cos I know someone whose name is Delphine (it's a french first name)

BTW, I love epic and this one is great !  big grin
concernig Alesia, I believe it's hard to understand her behavior. it seems she's not ready to change it, until she becomes conscious she's prisoner of her own past of suffering. or maybe she is conscious of it, but sometimes people prefer live in such pain, cos they aren't strong enough to change(it's a very hard way, indeed...)
Kif White

Bending Unit
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« Reply #343 on: 10-29-2003 14:48 »

Interesting question. The name Delphine was actually based on a games software company called Delphine Software. The enemies from their game 'Another World' were the main inspiration for the Delphinians, as was the planet.
Farnsworth38

Starship Captain
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« Reply #344 on: 10-29-2003 16:06 »

It’s not really relevant, but the name Delphinoid was used by Somtow Sucharitkul for a species similar in concept to Pilot in Farscape. If you know anyone who collects vintage sci-fi magazines, see if they’ve got Isaac Asimov’s Sci Fi Mag, August 1980. The story is titled ‘Light On The Sound’, and it’s worth a read. Both the text and the artwork are mildly erotic in places, but not offensive. Sorry for that bit of useless info.

To be on topic: everyone may hate Alesia, but a character has to be quite special to have such an effect on the readers. I join those that salute your work, Mr. White...
Venus

Urban Legend
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« Reply #345 on: 10-29-2003 16:40 »

Kif i asked you another question the other day, i don't think you saw it cause it's formatted a lot like the answer you gave me at the top of the page, it's right under Futurama_hil's first post of this page. I'm pretty curious to what your answer will be.  tongue
Kif White

Bending Unit
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« Reply #346 on: 10-29-2003 17:01 »

 
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Originally posted by Venus:
Kif i asked you another question the other day, i don't think you saw it cause it's formatted a lot like the answer you gave me at the top of the page, it's right under Futurama_hil's first post of this page. I'm pretty curious to what your answer will be.

Sorry about that... there's a lot of questions in there, but I'll try my best to answer them. I assume you mean this one...

 
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Her mind works in mysterious ways, and a lot of it is there for the reader to interpret their own way. However, I'll do my best to explain.


I hope that explains things a little... but, once again, feel free to ask more or challenge it  smile
Venus

Urban Legend
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« Reply #347 on: 10-29-2003 17:29 »

it makes more sense now. i still see it as being one in the same but i can kinda see where she's going with this. thanks for putting up with me  tongue
Kif White

Bending Unit
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« Reply #348 on: 10-29-2003 17:33 »
« Last Edit on: 10-29-2003 17:33 »

No problem. I enjoy answering questions in fact... it shows people are interested   smile

Though I feel a bit guilty, as it does tend to detract away from the topic of reviewing other's fanfiction. Though it probably doesn't warrant its own topic either...
Venus

Urban Legend
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« Reply #349 on: 10-29-2003 17:39 »

speaking of interesting, are we gonna get to see a little confrontation between Leela and Alesia? And before the guys start getting all excited, i meant a verbal confrontation.
Kif White

Bending Unit
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« Reply #350 on: 10-29-2003 17:50 »

 
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Originally posted by Venus:
speaking of interesting, are we gonna get to see a little confrontation between Leela and Alesia? And before the guys start getting all excited, i meant a verbal confrontation.

Funny you should mention that actually...

Futurama_Hil

Urban Legend
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« Reply #351 on: 10-29-2003 18:03 »

Oh no, now you've just caused me to wait right here until that is out!  wink

I love the shippy parts!  big grin
Venus

Urban Legend
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« Reply #352 on: 10-29-2003 18:33 »

three weeks, plus however long it takes you to actually write the chapter equals.....oh just kill me now.
Kif White

Bending Unit
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« Reply #353 on: 10-29-2003 18:56 »

Ah, but after those three weeks, I'll have two and a half months of free writing time, meaning faster releases overall  big grin
Ol´coot

Bending Unit
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« Reply #354 on: 10-29-2003 19:23 »

 
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Originally posted by Kif White:
Ah, but after those three weeks, I'll have two and a half months of free writing time, meaning faster releases overall   big grin

That's great news Kif! I have been enjoying UoM greatly and look forward to more! Especially the Alesia-Leela 'discussions', I'll be interested to read your take on just what she feels for Fry after all.  big grin
Venus

Urban Legend
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« Reply #355 on: 10-30-2003 00:10 »

The next chap of Delicious Surprise was posted tonight. Either Missy is really on a role or TLZ was lazy posting the chapter that came before, but in any case, awesome as always. It was more Bender centered then i had hoped, but hey, it can't all be Fry and Leela. And things are really starting to get interesting. Here's hoping the next chapter is this quick.
Asylum-Fry

Liquid Emperor
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« Reply #356 on: 10-30-2003 01:08 »
« Last Edit on: 10-30-2003 01:08 »

Just read Flowers in the Window for absolutely no reason at all. It was great, up to the end... then it turned Disney on me.

Giving Grades, I'd say A-, because a little bit was off. It was extremely well written and I must congratulate Nasteve on that excellent piece of writing.

Now for the irk:


EDIT: Sad endings = real life. The end was unreal, almost... a miracle (doy).
Venus

Urban Legend
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« Reply #357 on: 10-30-2003 01:16 »

i like Flowers in the Window just the way it is, although like AF says, sad endings are generally more powerful. And was i the only one that does not understand the names of the chapters?
Asylum-Fry

Liquid Emperor
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« Reply #358 on: 10-30-2003 01:25 »
« Last Edit on: 10-30-2003 01:25 »

The chapters had names?

*goes back to check*

Eh... look like references to lyrics or something.
Futurama_Hil

Urban Legend
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« Reply #359 on: 10-30-2003 06:48 »

Lyrics to Travis's songs. Flowers In The Window is a song, or album, I think.  I know the writer is a big Travis fan.  smile
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