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MissFuturama
Bending Unit
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Little help please? Looking for correct English again. Leela: It's weird. Alice is so quiet since you're both returned from Bender ... Fry: Yeah, quiet indeed... Uploaded with ImageShack.us
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Tachyon
DOOP Secretary
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I only see very small things to change:
"Leela: It's weird. Alice is so quiet since you're both you returned from visiting Bender ..." (The "both" is implied). There are many other sentence constructions you could use, but yours is fine. "Leela: It's weird. Alice is so quiet since you got back from Bender's ..." would also work. ("Bender's" implies Bender's house/apartment/etc.).
"Fry: Yeah, quiet indeed..." is fine, but if you are trying to show that Fry is concerned or worried, you might use "Fry: Yeah, too quiet...", instead.
BTW, I nearly failed English in high school, so perhaps someone with a better English education might like to comment.
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laurenSmiles1
Starship Captain
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« Reply #249 on: 10-10-2012 22:49 »
« Last Edit on: 10-10-2012 22:52 »
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Little help please?
Looking for correct English again.
Leela: It's weird. Alice is so quiet since you're both returned from Bender ... Fry: Yeah, quiet indeed...
You're = You've Is = Has been (I think) Bender = Bender's So the sentence will sound like this: Leela: It's weird. Alice has been so quiet since you've both returned from Bender's ... BTW, I nearly failed English in high school, so perhaps someone with a better English education might like to comment.
Same here.
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MissFuturama
Bending Unit
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Tachyon laurenSmiles1Thank you! Your help is priceles Now you can enjoy the rest of comic Alice is too quiet because ... Fry forgot her. You can also watch the process of creating the image. SAI Speedpainting - Bender and Alice
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MissFuturama
Bending Unit
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laurenSmiles1 UnrealLegendThanks :3 TachyonThank you! The program called PT SAI. Picture of friend's OC - Claudia Riviera.
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HIGHasFRY
Starship Captain
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Well at least Bender gave up drinking and smoking... Wait how can he eat ice-cream? Wouldn't it melt and then short fuse him?
He turns food into burn able chemical energy... BTW still doing great work. The Zapp and Alice comic made my stomach drop. But come to think of it if the show ever does include fry and leela having a kid I find this likely to happen. I think it would be too tempting for the writers to not have the turunga affairs to go full circle and create a Mrs. Robinson affair referance. Also one last note, have you ever thought of doing a full length story or comic, rather than these flash fiction pieces? Just wondering because I think you could really nail it if you try your hand at it. Keep up the fantastic work.
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MissFuturama
Bending Unit
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HIGHasFRYAlso one last note, have you ever thought of doing a full length story or comic, rather than these flash fiction pieces? I tried. And failed Comic impossible without words, and I cant write in English. SofHello Sof! And thank you =) winna tyraniakThanks =) Zim's New Robot SlaveFuturama and Invader Zim crossover Romantic Evening for TwoLeela wanted a bit of romance, and waited for Mr. Fry join her when he put Alice to bed, but it all went wrong Fry allowed his daughter to watch a late night shows with him .. Because he's a good daddy Poor Leela ...
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MissFuturama
Bending Unit
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Solid Gold BenderWords cannot even compensate for how I feel about your words! Thank you It means a lot to me. Zed 85Sorry! I did not want to make you feel like a durak. Light and shadow is really not right, all true. Anyone is free to express their opinions and to give criticism
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scififry
Bending Unit
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Absolutely have to agree. I just discovered your art thread and your artwork is really amazing. I love your colour and shading work and how well and smooth you fill them in, making your images look really brilliant and life-like! Your line work is great as well. The body movements of Alice Fry look just right at the point of action and absolutely not like stiff wood figures.
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MissFuturama
Bending Unit
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Tachyon scififryHee-hee thanks It does not look as good as I would like to. I wanted a large, detailed art with great light and great prospects. And since no one wants to draw it for me, I tried to do it myself. And I failed. Alice aiming somewhere above Bender lol I am not happy with this piece. Perspective, light and stuff except textures. textures look good
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Inquisitor Hein
Liquid Emperor
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« Reply #274 on: 10-22-2012 19:14 »
« Last Edit on: 10-22-2012 19:15 »
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I like it anyway, the textures on Bender looke great Perspective looks mostly all right for me. Just the pillar/tentacle/robot arm/whatever to Alice's left seems to be leaning the wrong direction. If you used several layers, you might just mirror that thing, or straighten it a little. That will probably do the trick. I wanted a large, detailed art with great light and great prospects. And since no one wants to draw it for me, I tried to do it myself.
Who says no one wants to draw something for you? Should you ever need a detailed background, I could draw it for you. Of course, I would expect you to colour it accordingly...every detail
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