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Erdrik
Professor
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Welp, I was being held back becuase I couldn't think of a way to start 'The Juicy Details' but I figured it Out so I'll start writing now.... err make that after I post some stuff in my Fan Art thread! *hint hint*
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Tzlk
Professor
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Haha ! sweet im looking forward to reading it Erdrik!
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DrThunder88
DOOP Secretary
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Good work! You're like Mel Brooks, M. Night Shyamalan, Christopher McQuarrie, and Erich Segal wrapped into a handy, pocket-sized Futurama fan.
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Erdrik
Professor
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bump. (I wanted this above my Fan Art Post )
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AstroZombie
Bending Unit
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BumbleBee, On the subject of fanfics, I'm the web master in charge of fanfics at FSAC (See Below). I emailed you about a week ago asking you if I could publish your stuff at FSAC, but i got no reply, so either you never got it or u think I'm some kind of nut and have reported me to the proper authorities So I'm asking you on this . <Ass-kissing>Can I please post your amazing and uplifting fan fictions at FSAC?</Ass-kissing>.
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Erdrik
Professor
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Here is a taste of my next fic:
(Note: This episode takes place after "Where the Buggalo Roam", and my Fan-Fic "Secrets Revealed" All characters created by Matt Groening and David X. Cohen.)
(Special Thanks to: , and the Happy Little Elf's. May they stay in my head forever.)
(Futurama opening credits. Caption: Co-Produced by Death, The life of the Party!)
The Dojo is small, but it serves its purpose. Not traditional in any sense, its walls are a hard composite steel, and a nylon mat lay on the floor. A hefty looking person walks onto the mat, and holds his hands together in front of him. He wear's a jet black kimono, and stands perfectly still.
Leela steps onto the mat wearing a white kimono, and immediately stands in a defensive posture. Her opponent moves into an offensive posture and slowly edges forward. Leela slowly circles left and moves her right hand up preparing for the attack. Her opponent rushes forward suddenly bringing his arm up and around towards her head. She ducks down gracefully and swings her leg forward, inches above the mat. Her leg strikes her opponent's and he quickly falls onto his back. Leela Stands and places her hands on her hip.
LEELA: This is too easy.
She turns and heads toward the near wall. At the wall she waves her hand in font of it and a small opening appears revealing a console. She taps a few buttons and waves her hand again. As the opening vanishes her hefty opponent fades away and a new one appears. A nine foot tall Neptunian with a large nasty scar running from the top of his forehead along his left cheek and down to his chin.
LEELA: Much better.
She steps onto the mat and the Large Neptunian immediately charges attacking with a high round-house. Leela Ducks down and again sweeps her leg forward, but the Neptunian hops backward deftly evading the counter. Without hesitating Leela jumps up kicks her leg straight up, connecting with the Neptunian's face, back flips in mid-air, and lands. (Think Guile from 'Street Fighter') The Neptunian grabs his face with his upper arms and steps back. Leela charges forward and jumps, stretching her leg forward. But the Neptunian recovers, and grabs her outstretched leg. He pulls her in and brings his other arm forward hitting Leela square in the face. She falls to the ground and rolls back to the edge of the mat. She quickly stands and raises her defense. The Neptunian charges again punching quickly. She blocks the punches and retaliates, hitting him hard in the gut. Before He can recover she spins and plants a kick on the side of his head. The Neptunian falls to the side rolling off the mat.
ROBOTIC VOICE: Point to Player 1.
Leela stands upright, hands on hips, a large grin on her face.
LEELA: (Thinking) That’s right. I'm the best!
She steps away and moves back into her starting position to signal that she is ready for another bout. But before the match can begin, another person fades into view.
AMY: What'cha doing Leela?
Oblivious Amy steps onto the mat, and another Neptunian appears in front of her. The Neptunian immediately turns on Amy and charges her.
AMY: G'AAAAAH!!
Amy runs away towards Leela screaming curses in another language, the Neptunian close behind. Leela turns and jumps off the mat, running to the console. She quickly waves her hand and taps a few buttons when it appears. She turns back to see Amy laying on the mat face up, with the Neptunian laying next to her. The Neptunian has his head rested on his hand and is watching Amy.
NEPTUNIAN: So you free Saturday night?
AMY: (Enjoying Herself) Well, normally I would be, but I'm kinda taken.
Suddenly the Neptunian vanishes, and the dojo disappears. Leela and Amy are now in a small room, everything is glowing with a faint green light, including the two. Amy stands up and walks over to Leela.
AMY: That was a pretty aggressive Dating Service.
LEELA: It was a KungFu Training Program Amy. I was practicing, what do you want?
AMY: Oh no, you don’t! I cut my vacation short to talk to you and its been over three months! You're spillin' the beans!
LEELA: (Sighs) Amy I told you before I'm not gonna talk about it! Now stop bothering me!
Leela returns to the wall and taps a few buttons in the now visible console. The dojo returns.
LEELA: You might want to step off the mat.
Amy quickly gets off the mat, obviously pissed that she is being ignored. Leela taps a few more keys and the Neptunian re-appears. The Neptunian turns to Amy.
NEPTUNIAN: Hey, Baby!
Leela angrily taps another button, and waves the console away. The Neptunian immediately straightens and looks forward.
NEPTUNIAN: Emotion Simulator deactivated.
The match begins, and Amy watches for a few minutes, but soon gets bored. She turns and looks over to wall where the console is and gets an idea. Smiling mischievously she sneaks over to the console. She waves her hand and the console appears. Quickly she removes the covering and starts pulling and switching wires. She then puts the covering back and arrogantly taps a few buttons.
Leela had just finished upper-cutting the Neptunian when he suddenly vanishes. Only to be replaced by Zapp Brannigan! Zapp advances on Leela.
ZAPP: Hey, my one-eyed Lovely, you want some Champaggen?
LEELA: (Horrified) AAAAAAGH!
Leela, screaming, closes her eye and attacks blindly. She kicks him in the gut, then quickly jabs him in the jaw.
ZAPP: Hey could you do that again, only more sex-fully?
LEELA: Amy! Shut it off!
AMY: Do you promise?
Zapp is now holding her by the arm, Leela pushing his face away from hers.
LEELA: Yes! Fine! Anything just, shut it off!
Amy pulls the cover off and pulls out a wire, and Zapp vanishes. Leela opens her eye and looks over to where Zapp was standing then darts her eye back and forth to make sure he is really gone. Then she turns and storms over to Amy.
LEELA: Amy, that was just mean.
AMY: I’m sorry, Leela. But I can’t help it! I wanna know!
LEELA: Ugh. Fine. My place after work, ok?
AMY: Yes!
LEELA: Yer lucky Fry made plans with Bender for tonight.. ..
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Tzlk
Professor
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WHY MUST YOU TEMPT US YOU BASTARD!!! sounds good and now im interested! wanna read more wanna read more wanna read more
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meisterPOOP
Professor
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The virtual internet...Guess it is now called the library reading room...DUH!!!
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TheVoices
Starship Captain
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« Reply #95 on: 04-05-2002 16:43 »
« Last Edit on: 04-06-2002 00:00 »
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okay because everyone else id doing it, and i wanna be popular here's a sneaky preview of my first ever fan fic! -------------------- sorry, you've missed it, wait you would have but i'm in a good mood so i've posted it further down this already long page -------------------- this is just an extremely rough version, when it's finished it could be completely different or not include this scene at all right now i'm gonna go and watch the last part of 'Black Books' oh yeah this will only be up till tommorow, cos i'm taking it off. i can't give away everything you know
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Erdrik
Professor
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seems a bit sudden... and misplaced... I'd suggest moving the kissing scene. Of course I dunno what happens before your scene so the moment could be building throught the fic and then BOOM! kissy kissy Its nice tho.
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Tzlk
Professor
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I agreewith Erdrik, seems kinda sudden, but i dont know where in the fic this takes place, but i like where its goin!
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DrThunder88
DOOP Secretary
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Originally posted by Erdrik: actualy, I'm Erik.
Yeah, and my "review" may or may not have been a load of sunshine I blew up your ass. I don't know if you missed the conversation about me delivering rave reviews regardless of what I thought of the story.
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Erdrik
Professor
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Originally posted by DrThunder88: Yeah, and my "review" may or may not have been a load of sunshine I blew up your ass. I don't know if you missed the conversation about me delivering rave reviews regardless of what I thought of the story. No I saw that post. I was basicly being a sarcastic pompus ass. lol You mess aroun', I mess aroun'. Simple, no?
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Tzlk
Professor
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« Reply #105 on: 04-06-2002 06:03 »
« Last Edit on: 04-06-2002 06:03 »
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*really wasted* ill give a real evaluation later.
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Tzlk
Professor
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Nice! Now that i can actually see the letters its a very descriptive scene! That would be an appropriate climax to a longer fan fic. Good Job man!
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Tzlk
Professor
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« Reply #110 on: 04-06-2002 15:00 »
« Last Edit on: 04-06-2002 15:00 »
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yes and ill say it again- im sorry for my incohernt posts! Ill try and just go to sleep next time... also im trying to find all my blasted wasted postes and edit them so that either they make sense or I just take them down.
edit- Anyone if you find a post by me that doesnt make sense please tell me and Ill edit it or take it down thnx
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Tzlk
Professor
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« Reply #112 on: 04-06-2002 18:37 »
« Last Edit on: 04-06-2002 18:37 »
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Another way you could use it would be as the opening scene, and then you could work backwards from there, explaining how Fry/leela got to that point! There are tons of possibilites there Voices, go with it!
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Erdrik
Professor
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Originally posted by Tzlk: Another way you could use it would be as the opening scene, and then you could work backwards from there, explaining how Fry/leela got to that point! There are tons of possibilites there Voices, go with it!
Hey Thats what I'm Doing! lol
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Tzlk
Professor
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Did I completly miss somthing? Did you say that earlier? If you did im sorry, I wasnt intentonally giving away your secret to success!
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Erdrik
Professor
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read it. A few crits. 1) Why would her parents give chase? The whole point was that Leela never find out about her origins. 2) Leela seems too compliant... at that age one would think she'd be more inclined to get away from her parents even if she had just recently found her parents... Then again it might be the whole western motife... I'm not a big western fan its ok so far I a guess. Tho the Romeo & Juliet bit makes Fry look a little too intelligent.. Lol
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