Fan Fiction help...

[Reply #200 on:]

Erdrik- Ah.  I get it.  That's clool.  Mine's actually taking the basic premise of Fry's What If in my fic "The Family Fry" and making it more...Americanized.  Well, early 60's Americanized.  So you can look forward to Leela in an apron and plenty of "Now, son" and "Gee, Dad"s.      Also, Fry's masculinity gets insulted...by his own pre-school age daughter even!   

Fan-ficcing TOTPD 
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"A good many dramatic situations begin with screaming."

[Reply #201 on:]

 

Originally posted by BumbleBeeTheta:
Erdrik- Ah.  I get it.  That's clool.  Mine's actually taking the basic premise of Fry's What If in my fic "The Family Fry" and making it more...Americanized.  Well, early 60's Americanized.  So you can look forward to Leela in an apron and plenty of "Now, son" and "Gee, Dad"s.        Also, Fry's masculinity gets insulted...by his own pre-school age daughter even!     

Fan-ficcing TOTPD   

blech.. nothing personal but I hate that era    I hate it with an unending passion! Leela?.. in and apron?.. uuuuhhh....    I suppose it matches the era but like I said... ... ...

besides shouldn't you be writing Chptr4 of IDoL? 

[Reply #202 on:]

BBT: IDoL
Chptr3 was alright btw. Although I'm not sure what it was exactly but something about Leela was... off...    its one of those thing I can't put my finger on and its kinda hanging at the back of my mind bugging the hell outta me    ... also I'm not a big fan of Time Travel... But still a good chptr   

[Reply #203 on:]

Allen said Leela was out of character in Part Three as she was more "enthusiastic" than Fry was, y'know-wise...     As for the Time Travel idea, Allen brought to my attention that it and Part Four(I showed him a sample) sounded too much like the Frylight Zone.  So I basically trashed the nine pages I had of Part Four and started all over today.  The time travel aspect has been watered down majorly and reduced to Yancy drifting between 3004 and 2002 every once in a while and then of course, the end which I shan't spoil here.     Anyway, Part Four should focus more on L&F rather than the bonding between Leela and her future brother in law as it was originally set.  I've got about three pages thus far and it's much better than my original I think.  Though I suppose I should let you be the judge...
 

Scene: Bathroom on the PE ship.

(‘Member?  Yancy’s fading in front of the mirror while Fry and Leela stand in the doorway, gaping.)

Fry:  What the hell’s happening?!

Yancy: I dunno!  It started about half an hour ago.  I was in the kitchen and…and then I wasn’t.

Leela:  What do you mean you weren’t in the kitchen anymore?

Yancy:  It’s like a rip in the space-time continu- Okay, I have no clue.  Hell, I’ve only seen “Farscape” once.

Leela:  So you jump into another dimension?

Yancy:  Not really.  I just jump back to where I was before I came here.

Fry:  You mean mom and dad’s house?

Yancy:  Yeah.  And Pearl Harbor was still on and everything.

Leela:  That’s weird.  Usually when that sort of thing happens, you just rip apart into shreds…

(Yancy gulps.)

Fry:  We should take him back to the Professor.  Maybe he’ll know what’s up.

Leela:  That’s a good idea.  I’ll make sure we’re going full speed.  We don’t want this happening again.

Yancy:  Erm…you didn’t really mean the part about being ripped apart, did you?

Leela: (laughing nervously) No…of course not.

Scene:  New New York at night. 

(It’s literally raining cats and dogs and the sky is dark.  The ship gently lands in the PE docking bay.

Cut to inside.

(Everyone gets off the ship and they are greeted by Hermes.)

Hermes:  Yer two minutes early.  I’m gonna have ta dock ya all a quarter of yer day’s salary.

Leela:  But we could still make deliveries!

Hermes:  Not at dis time of night and during dis weather.  Planet Express’s insurance don’t cover damage by Jack Russell.

Everyone: (disappointed) Aw…

Fry:  Anyway, we need to see the professor.

Hermes:  Why’s dat?

Fry:  ‘Cos otherwise Yancy’s gonna be floating between now and the twenty-first century forever.

(Suspenseful music plays.  Dun dun da…A beat as no one says anything.)

Fry:  He might be torn apart!

(Gasps.)

Fry:  Thank you.

Professor: (coming down the stairs) What’s this about being torn to shreds?

Yancy:  I’ve been being yanked back and forth between the year 2002 and…uh…

Leela: 3004.

Yancy:  The year 3004…I mean, now.

Professor:  Oh, my, that sounds like something serious that could very well take more than a warm chocolate chip cookie to solve.  We’ll have to run some tests.

As for the What If fic, I've written about half of Leela's part and come up with various ideas over IM with my best friend and no. 1 fan, Jamie.  I always knew Aussies were good for something... 
Hey, now that I've changed IDoL, I guess I'll hafta swipe the "death speech".  Aw, it sounded John Crichton-y too...Ah well.  I can always write another fic...   

[Reply #204 on:]

hee hee Ill take Fry/Leela lovin' over Yancy bonding anyday 

It sound ok but: Constructive Critisism!!! Yay!

If they get to PE at night, how come they're early? and why would they be interested in deliveries when Yancy is time warping?
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Fry: He might be torn apart!

(Gasps.)

Fry: Thank you.
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why's he saying 'thank you'? shouldn't he be more pissed that they didn't respond?

mmmm I guess thats it  sounds good so far 

[Reply #205 on:]

 

Originally posted by Erdrik:
AH, yes Hot chocolate, and fuzzy-..    Kittens?!? what have you been eating?! spit that out now!! Kittys are for petting not eating!

:: spits out a crying tabby :: i meant it as a sign of affection! 

[Reply #206 on:]

 

Originally posted by Erdrik:
hee hee Ill take Fry/Leela lovin' over Yancy bonding anyday   

It sound ok but: Constructive Critisism!!! Yay!

If they get to PE at night, how come they're early? and why would they be interested in deliveries when Yancy is time warping?
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Fry: He might be torn apart!

(Gasps.)

Fry: Thank you.
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why's he saying 'thank you'? shouldn't he be more pissed that they didn't respond?

mmmm I guess thats it    sounds good so far   

Erdrik- All humanoids are greedy, greedy things so that's why they were more interested in delivering stuff and getting paid than Yancy's well-being.  As for Fry's remark, I think he was just happy that he was awknowledged for having a dramatic line.

[Reply #207 on:]

Yes humaniods are greedy but only to an extent, and not necissarily for money. Leela for example would be more interested in affection than money since she's had a major lack of it in her life. And thus would in the very least 'pretend' to care about Yancy's plight so to get affection from Fry.
and I doubt Fry would actualy want to work.. 

Well As for Fry's 'ThankYou' remark... I guess but I still sounds a little funny to me  But it doesn't hurt it any so whatever 

[Reply #208 on:]

I have a questions involving a new fic of mine:
(which is a Fry/ Leela romance but not apart of my serial..)
Leela has a dream in which Fry is rubbing his face on her undergarments...
the camera pans out revealing she still wearing them!
She then wakes with a start...
(the reasons for the dream will be explained in the fic)

and
She catches Fry sifting through her underwear drawer
(the reasons his 'search' will be explained in the fic)

My question is thus: Which should come first?
Should: Leela have the dream then catch Fry,
and have a fit of stuttering,
and blushes becuase of the coincidence?, or
Should: Leela Catch him first and then have that
be part of what cuases the dream?

I perfer the first one but I want some of your opinions too     

[Reply #209 on:]

hahaha, you are SO filthy Erdrik 
and i guess that would be evident too if one ever got to see those *ahem* "special" pics you've never posted.

oh btw, i prefer the second option. A dream trigger sounds more realistic to me (as realistic as anything gets in futurama anyways).

I believe i may have already praised you for your fics so far (secrets revealed and Juicy details 1,2) but if i havent, then: I think they're great! only thing i personally noticed was the bender did seem a bit _too_ evil and not caring then ususal but there have been episodes in which he has excelled in this area so i will only suggest that you might slow down his evilness a bit at least once in a while, even if only for variation.

[Reply #210 on:]

Ooooh, tough call. The second option (catch him first, dream about it later) is the more logical cause-and-effect situation, that also suggests something kinky about Leela, but the first option (dream first, catch him later) has a nicely sick take on the "it's destiny" angle. Still, I'd go with the second option...

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Meanwhile, I, too, could use a little help. I'm trying desperately to finish Doctor Strange-Love or How I Learned To Stop Worrying And Love The Worm within the next few days as promised.

I've changed my mind about including a scene involving Amy's wardrobe, that spoofs the recent controversy about racial stereotypes in Abercrombie & Fitch clothing. However, the scene I posted at PEEL (in "The World Needs More Fanfics") contains a real-life racial stereotype--for the sake of satire--that I don't want to appear in the new version.

So, Amy's shirt will have an derisive portrayal of Kif's race. (Amy--like certain real-life A&F customers--doesn't realize the offensiveness of the portrayal.) So:

(1) Has Kif's race been named anywhere? The show, the DVD commentaries, a note scribbled in a script liner, an interview, the comic books--anywhere at all?

(2) If not, what would you call them? (Either the race's real name or the offensive deragatory version.) I'm toying with Bladderians, Bladderoids, Frongs, Chameleotoads, Krinks, and Goops.

Those last two may be crossing the line, as they are very close to real-life slurs. Thoughts?

[Reply #211 on:]

 

Originally posted by Erdrik:
I have a questions involving a new fic of mine:
(which is a Fry/ Leela romance but not apart of my serial..)
Leela has a dream in which Fry is rubbing his face on her undergarments...
the camera pans out revealing she still wearing them!
She then wakes with a start...
(the reasons for the dream will be explained in the fic)

and
She catches Fry sifting through her underwear drawer
(the reasons his 'search' will be explained in the fic)

My question is thus: Which should come first?
Should: Leela have the dream then catch Fry,
and have a fit of stuttering,
and blushes becuase of the coincidence?, or
Should: Leela Catch him first and then have that
be part of what cuases the dream?

I perfer the first one but I want some of your opinions too     

I prefer the first idea too Erdrik 

That Fry's a lucky guy         


MMMMMM Leela's soiled undies   

[Reply #212 on:]

i'd go with number 1 aswell, it gives you more to right about, and stuttering and blushes is more fun

[Reply #213 on:]

 

Originally posted by BrainSluggo:
Ooooh, tough call. The second option (catch him first, dream about it later) is the more logical cause-and-effect situation, that also suggests something kinky about Leela, but the first option (dream first, catch him later) has a nicely sick take on the "it's destiny" angle. Still, I'd go with the second option...

I called them Greenians in "Amy's Wedding" (or "One Wedding and No Funerals", on the dearly deoparted LiC), and I'm calling them Teralians (after Teral, who's a Kif fan), in an upcoming serious fic I'm doing that's set 20 years from "now" and stars Amy and Kif's daughter.

[Reply #214 on:]

Thanks, Kryten. I like "Teralians!" But for the purpose of the scene I have in mind, I think I'll go with a variation of your other word, and use "Greenies" and maybe "Goops." Those sound sufficiently insulting, and seem easily connected to Kif; the T-shirt will have an illustration, of course, though the story itself will not...

The story itself is currently bloated beyond belief. I know I can hack it down to the size of an episode-length script, but it hurts. And it's still waaay behind schedule. I shouldn't have promised it by today...   

[Reply #215 on:]

bloaty is good. as long as the plot is cool and everybody is in charactor nobody minds the length. longer just makes the plot more detailed.

[Reply #216 on:]

S'okay, we'll see it when we see it.

[Reply #217 on:]

k, thanx for feedback  First variation it is. 

[Reply #218 on:]

 

Originally posted by Erdrik:
k, thanx for feedback    First variation it is.   

YAAAAAAAAAAY!   
GOD I LOVE BEING A SHIPPER!!!

Ah Fry N Leela for ever      

:goes all warm n fuzzy

MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM      

[Reply #219 on:]

Zombie, when are you and paul gonna finish the second part of Minds Apart?!?!?!

[Reply #220 on:]

I know Tzlk, and I feel shit for keeping everyone waiting, but I'm currently in my last week or two of college (I forget how many i got left) so I got a shit load of work to complete.

However part 2 is well under way and should be comleted very soon after college finishes, i.e I'll have plenty of time on my hands both, through the day and in the evenings.

 

So don't lose faith.

Plus I'm itching to get some more solo fics done, (if you dont like LFR Shipper stuff look else where) and further joint ones aren't being discounted either   

[Reply #221 on:]

excellent, excellent.
only a few more weeks to go then 
im looking forward to it!

im still having a writers block on my end though, so people dont get your hopes up too far on my fanfic for a while.

[Reply #222 on:]

Rebirth!

Let the firey Phoenix Fly!

[Reply #223 on:]

I have been writing again.  I got 12 pages of 'The Praying-Leela' done, I'm 3/4 of the way thru with part 1. 

[Reply #224 on:]

My first fan-fiction is still going, but seems to be getting longer and longer away from the end every 10 pages I write. Problem is that a) I include new ideas as I go along and b)I'm using nearly every single one that I've come up with, and while many people can find a way of snipping large sections without destroying the story, I feel that is not possible with my story, I've made it too dependant, and thus just one massive read. I can't even think of a good place to end and start new chapters. 

But for my next (well, one of my next) fic(s), that is going to be linked to 31st Century Formula One, I'll certainly write to a race-by-race chapter format 

[Reply #225 on:]

finally, some new stuff. its been a while since a new fic came out.

[Reply #226 on:]

agreed! hurahh for new fics!

[Reply #227 on:]

I'm writing. Honest, I am.

Well, no. But I will someday.

[Reply #228 on:]

 

that is going to be linked to 31st Century Formula One  I'll certainly write to a race-by-race chapter format

[Metallica] Die, die, die my darling... [/M]

edit: tsk-tsk-tsk, what a shameful mistake

[Reply #229 on:]

[Misfits]don't utter a single word
         Die die die my darling
         Just shut your pretty eyes
         and I'll be seeing you in hell[/Misfits]

See even Mettalica have to cover a great band.

Anyway on the fanfiction note I trying to start the 6th chapter of my fan fic I've jsut been preoccupied (damn you Final Fatasy X aahh well only the final boss to go i guess) I might even start writting again today but i wouldn't count on it.

[Reply #230 on:]

 

Originally posted by wu_konguk:
 (damn you Final Fatasy X aahh well only the final boss to go i guess)

I might be distracted by FFX if my save wasn't overritten by my brothers!! 

eh, I guess that just means more time to write...  lucky you.. 

[Reply #231 on:]

Yes soon damn you Jecht damn you.

[Reply #232 on:]

 

Originally posted by Kryten:
I'm writing. Honest, I am.

Well, no. But I will someday.

Sure, Kryten, I believe you.

Show spoiler

He's not gonna, you all know that right?

Just kidding buddy. Speaking of new fics or rather old ones that need to be finished, part 6 of TFZ is finished and shall be posted soon. A word of warning to the wise, this part signals BIG changes. Well, maybe not that BIG, but enough so that Futurama will never be the same.

So when it's posted, give it a read. Let us know what you think and don't hold back. Just let it all out. BTW, little poll: How many thought this story was going to end up like all the other unfinished stories?

Well ta ta for now.

[Reply #233 on:]

Meanwhile, I've started on a new fic, Robot Vampires from Space Hell.

[Reply #234 on:]

Have you really kryten? or are you just getting our hopes up so that you can shatter them all into a deep pit of despair?

[Reply #235 on:]

I've actually written about a page of it.

[Reply #236 on:]

I'll get started on Part 2 of No Compromises sometime, just working myself into fic writing mood at the mo.

[Reply #237 on:]

Unfortunately I'm in such a mood to write fics that I'm not doing any school work.
In fact my enthusiasm for doing school work at home (homework in other words) has reached rock-bottom, with only 9 weeks till my AS exams.
Go me!

[Reply #238 on:]

I've pretty much finished the first part of 'The Praying Leela'.
I still need to touch it up a bit tho,
I've started the second part put its going kinda slow at the moment...

[Reply #239 on:]

A quick question.

Have we ever been told the name of Morbo's race? If not, does anyone have some good sugestions?