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Erdrik

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« on: 03-18-2002 10:42 »

Im writing a fin-fiction where after 'Love & Rockets' and 'Leela's Homeworld', Fry and Leela have been "together" tho in secret.  love
Leela is the one that wants the secrecy, tho I haven't figured exactly why yet... Partly because she doesn't what the rest of the crew to gawk, and bother her about it. But I need another reason. Any ideas?

I also need help writing Amy's part(As she isn't my favorite charactor and I don't know enough about her   tongue ) She is on a family cruise and thus isn't directly tied to the first half of the story. Tho she uses a VidPhone to call Leela from the Cruise ship. Leela, is in the middle of a delivery with Fry, Bender, and Zoidberg(Zoiberg or Zoidberg? ). So far she asks if Leela is busy, and Leela says no more than usual, then Amy's Parents show up. I don't like it cause its short and isn't really funny So I need help for fillers jokes ect... Also she is suppose to drop a hint on what'll happen later in the fic... Also catch phrases she normaly says would be nice   wink

Thnx in advance.   smile 

Call me Erdrik

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Kryten

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« Reply #1 on: 03-18-2002 16:53 »

Erd, if you don't think the Amy bit works, you don't have to use it...
Tzlk
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« Reply #2 on: 03-18-2002 20:04 »

Yea, things flow better when they are natural, not forced.  If you can include amy in a meaningful way great, but if not leave it out because it could feel forced, thus lessing the quality of the fic.
Erdrik

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« Reply #3 on: 03-19-2002 08:46 »
« Last Edit on: 03-19-2002 08:46 »

true...

k, then Amy's out   tongue

Ill post what I got so far in a few days(can't right now becuase my new and old computers will be pre-ocuppied for the next 20 hours, whilst they transfer files   tongue )
Chump

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« Reply #4 on: 03-19-2002 21:12 »

Its Zoidberg, there is a "d". Also, I wrote about 1/36th of a fic then gave up when I learned that the topic is going to be an actual episode... however, the stuff I wrote could work for what you are doing... its the opening and it is setting up for a delivery... you can take it if you want. (I love the Scary Door part):
My partial fic:

Opening Some assembly required

Begins, Bender and Fry sitting in their familiar positions on the couch watching TV. It zooms to the screen. They are watching another installment of “The Scary Door”.
Narrator: You are entering a place where ordinary people, do extraordinary things. Where people’s worst fears are brought to life, and where ketchup bottles don’t get that hard black ring around the top. You’re about to enter: The Scary Door. (Main logo) A glance to your right reveals one Elizabeth Powell. He day begins as it usually does, but with a sudden twist… (She buts a cup of coffee, and tosses a coin to pay for it. The coin begins to inexplicably hover. She is jittered and continues to walk down the street. She gets to the bus stop and is the last one to board, as she does, she looks up at the driver, who smiles with his mouth closed, but she clearly hears his say: “Room for one more”. She screams and rushes out of the bus, where she is snatched up by a giant hand. The driver adjusts his hat revealing a third eye, smiles, and drives off.

Scene changes back to Fry and Bender on the couch.

Bender: Boring!

Leela enters the room.

Leela: What are you guys doing? I told you we had a meeting at 10, and its 10 right now!

Fry: (Glancing at wrist) 9:59 by my watch.

Leela: Fry that’s not a real watch. It’s a picture you drew on your wrist in pen.

Fry: That doesn’t make it any less accurate than my other watches.

Leela: (sighs) Come on, let’s go.

The scene changes to the crew seated at the boardroom table. The professor is addressing the crew.

Professor: Good news everyone! Today you’ll be performing a suicidal mission that’s never been successfully attempted by man!

Leela: Why would that be good?

Hermes: (Showing off three envelopes) You life insurance policies have been cleared.

End

I'd also like to see someone write a fic about one of the crew doing something like destroying a priceless religious artifact and having to seek the forgiveness of the space pope.

Kryten

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« Reply #5 on: 03-20-2002 01:07 »

*snif*

That... was... brilliant.
Erdrik

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« Reply #6 on: 03-20-2002 08:23 »

mmmm looks good. Ill take it(You'll of course go in the creds  wink ). Although I might modify it a bit if thats ok.
Chump

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« Reply #7 on: 03-20-2002 15:30 »

By all means. I actually thought I had deleted it... (i had meant to :P) but at least it can be of some use.

It was going to continue and be about the parallel universe, and they had to make a delivery there (a supply of cowboy hats, they had a severe shortage) and they couldn't just blast it through on an unmanned rocket because the prof. refused to pay transdimentional postage.
Erdrik

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« Reply #8 on: 03-21-2002 11:14 »

ok I finished modifying the 'ScaryDoor' part
how's this?

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Bender and Fry sit slumped on the couch watching TV.
The screen shows that they are watching another installment of ‘The Scary Door’.

TV Show>>

TVNarrator:   You are entering a place where ordinary people, do extraordinary things.
Where people’s worst fears are brought to life, and where ketchup bottles don’t get that hard black ring around the top. You’re about to enter: The Scary Door.

The shows Main logo appears, then fades to a small town.

TVNarrator:   The rising sun brings forth the new day, but the town is quiet still.
A glance to your right reveals one Elizabeth Powell.
Her day begins as it usually does, waking early in the morn, whilst everyone else sleeps.
But today, is different…

Elizabeth Powell buys a cup of coffee, and tosses the Robot Merchant a coin to pay for it.
She turns to walk away, but the coin begins to inexplicably hover.
She is shaken, and stares at it for a minute, then slowly backs away before turning and continuing to walk down the street. She goes to the bus stop and notices that there is a line of people.

Powell:      (Thinking) Strange. Usually no one but Robots are up at this hour.

Shrugging she gets in line and waits as the bus pulls up and people start boarding.
She is the last one to board, as she does, she looks up at the driver, who smiles with his mouth closed.

BusDriver:   Room for one more.

The bus driver’s mouth never opens, yet the words are clear and audible.
She gasps and rushes out of the bus.
She stops suddenly as a giant hand reaches down out of nowhere grabs her, and pulls her up and off screen.
The driver adjusts his hat revealing a third eye, smiles, and drives off.

TV Show<<

Bender pulls out a beer from his chest compartment and takes a swig.

Bender: What a load of crap!

Leela enters the room.

Leela: What are you guys doing? I told you we had a meeting at 11, and its 11 right now!
Fry: (Glancing at wrist) 10:35 by my watch.
Leela: Fry that&#8217;s not a real watch. It&#8217;s a picture you drew on your wrist with a pen.
Fry: That doesn&#8217;t make it any less accurate than my other watches.
Leela: (sighs) Come on, let&#8217;s go.


Call me Erdrik

Boycott Fox!! Down with the Evil OverLords!!
Erdrik

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« Reply #9 on: 03-21-2002 14:42 »

In the Fic 'Dr.' Zoidberg has examined Hermes, and when asked about it states that he couldn't find his...

so, what kind of 'unknown alien organ' should it be?


Call me Erdrik

Boycott Fox!! Down with the Evil OverLords!!
Chump

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« Reply #10 on: 03-21-2002 15:26 »
« Last Edit on: 03-21-2002 15:26 »

Person: So whats wrong with Hermes?
DZ: His gas bladder is highly inflammed! This is often I sign of fin-rot... I'm afraid we'll have to put him down. (He sighs and reaches for a needle that reads: St. John's Arsenic for Children)
Others: NO!
Bender: Moron!

BTW, please credit Kevin Mac. Not Chump.  smile
Erdrik

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« Reply #11 on: 03-21-2002 16:50 »

hee hee gas bladder. thats a good one lol  smile
Unless I get a better one Im using it.  wink
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« Reply #12 on: 03-21-2002 23:19 »

welcome to PEEL, Erdrik!  smile
Erdrik

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« Reply #13 on: 03-22-2002 09:46 »
« Last Edit on: 03-22-2002 09:46 »

ok Im aaaaalmost ready to post what I got so far.
I just have a question:
I have Fry shower, and clean up for once, and the rest of the crew had bet on how long it would take before he finaly does. the bet was three years ago, around the begining of the show, but I have only seen 1 season 1 eps...
I want a flash back to show the bet, but I can't think of how it'll play out... any ideas?

oh Leela wins it btw..    tongue
Erdrik

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« Reply #14 on: 03-23-2002 15:18 »

k, it'll be up soon Im going to link to it instead of posting it in the forum, becuase it is 8 pages   tongue

Call me Erdrik

Boycott Fox!! Down with the Evil OverLords!!
Erdrik

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« Reply #15 on: 03-23-2002 15:26 »
« Last Edit on: 03-23-2002 15:26 »

First here is a list of ideas, and such that Ive been thinking about doing in other FanFics(I especially like the last one with the Evil Worms).   laff
 http://www.planetunreal.com/ucz/files/FutScraps.txt 

and the Fic itself(note there is a scrap/idea at the top, it has nothing to do with the fic).    tongue
 http://www.planetunreal.com/ucz/files/FuturamaFanFic.txt 

Tell me what you think, k?


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Tzlk
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« Reply #16 on: 03-23-2002 17:25 »

Well I just read it Erdrik and i liked it.  I was  a little confused at certain parts, and it ended quite abruptly.  Are there going to be more parts?
Erdrik

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« Reply #17 on: 03-23-2002 17:49 »
« Last Edit on: 03-23-2002 17:49 »

yes. its currently just a quick draft, and there are parts I intend to 'beef up'. its not complete yet, I just thought id post it and see what you guys thought of it so far...

One thing Im curious about is if the characters are accurate? If you catch any parts where the characters react differently than they should, ect...
Kryten

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« Reply #18 on: 03-23-2002 21:02 »

FIX THE WORD WRAP!
Kryten

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« Reply #19 on: 03-23-2002 21:04 »

Some ideas I've been kicking around...

The gang goes on a teamwork-building retreat.

Leela meets her long-lost twin sister.

Mirror universe fic.
Venus

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« Reply #20 on: 03-23-2002 22:20 »
« Last Edit on: 03-23-2002 22:20 »

 
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Originally posted by Kryten:
Leela meets her long-lost twin sister.

That would be really hard to explain since we've already seen the flashback of her birth and she was definately the only baby there. But maybe she has younger sisters or something that her parents also gave up for a better life.
The teamwork siminar idea sounds awsome!
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Erdrik

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« Reply #21 on: 03-23-2002 22:48 »

 
Quote
Originally posted by Kryten:
FIX THE WORD WRAP!

blah blah blah   tongue   sleep

Call me Erdrik

Boycott Fox!! Down with the Evil OverLords!!
Kryten

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« Reply #22 on: 03-23-2002 23:06 »

The twin thing was a typo. She's a younger sister.
Venus

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« Reply #23 on: 03-23-2002 23:08 »

that actually sounds pretty cool Kryten, go for it. I know i'd read it.
BumbleBeeTheta

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« Reply #24 on: 03-23-2002 23:59 »

Me too.  Heck, I'd read anything by Kryten.

Oh, and Erdrik, I REALLY like it!  Sounds so far.  I just have a couple questions.  I didn't thoroughly read it, so where exactly is it going?  I know, a rude question, but hey, I, like Life, am a bitch.  wink   Also, I'm guessing you plan on the crew finding out about L&F, so do you also plan on someone (i.e. Bender) finding out and then telling everybody?  I'm just axeing.  I think having someone walk in on them is a good way for it to spread.  That's how I thought Buffy and Spike would work out, but she told Tara instead.  Anyway, I think it's great and I look forward to reading more!  smile

Who is Agent Codename: Dragonfly?
Erdrik

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« Reply #25 on: 03-24-2002 13:39 »

during the mission, Fry, and Leela are going to nearly get killed but I can't think of anything else...

I intend either Amy, or Bender walking in on them.
immidiatly after the Delivery. or after a second delivery...  tongue
Chump

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« Reply #26 on: 03-24-2002 13:46 »

 
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Originally posted by Kryten:
Mirror universe fic.

I think thats gonna be a real episode, which is why i scrapped my fic.
AstroZombie

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« Reply #27 on: 03-24-2002 16:29 »

Pretty good edrick, send it to me at FSAC when its finished and I'll put it in our Fan Fiction section.

If any one else wants to send in their futurama fan fiction to me at FSAC then please do so, its always welcome.

 big grin

OK cheap plug over for now
 
Kryten

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« Reply #28 on: 03-24-2002 17:49 »

 
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Originally posted by Chump:
 I think thats gonna be a real episode, which is why i scrapped my fic.

I don't mean the Cowboy Universe, I mean one like in DS9. Based on Andy McDermott's "Mirror Universe Amy" pic.
Erdrik

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« Reply #29 on: 03-25-2002 14:09 »

 
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Originally posted by AstroZombie:
Pretty good edrick, send it to me at FSAC when its finished and I'll put it in our Fan Fiction section.

K, When its done Ill send it  wink
Oh and I can't wait for the second part to your fic  big grin hurry hurry  laff


Call me Erdrik

Boycott Fox!! Down with the Evil OverLords!!
AstroZombie

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« Reply #30 on: 03-25-2002 16:21 »

Its not just mine Edrick, its a joint effort with Paul from FSAC,

I have done solo fics before (UH OH I FEEL A SHAMELESS PLUG MOMENT ARISING HERE!!)

Their are "Crash Course In love" and "Precious Memories" and they can be found at TLZ, LIC, FSAC, and CGEF.

(SHAMELESS PLUG OVER  wink )
Erdrik

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« Reply #31 on: 03-25-2002 16:33 »

yes I know Ive read them already lol.

"Crash Course In love" and "Precious Memories" were both good. I liked "Crash Course In love" better.  smile
Tzlk
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« Reply #32 on: 03-25-2002 17:03 »

I must offer my praise of you work too Zombie! I really like your fics them And i know if said it before but ill say it again..  I cant wait for the second part of Minds apart!
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« Reply #33 on: 03-26-2002 23:36 »

btw: ooooooo, sounds interesting! dont make me do my go erdrik dance again  big grin
Erdrik

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« Reply #34 on: 03-27-2002 11:41 »
« Last Edit on: 03-27-2002 11:41 »

mkay. I did more work on it. I moved it into Word, as a .doc file so that I could orginize it better, and then colored the Narrative text to be green, and slightly smaller.
As for the plot, I have finished working it all out. I have even written abit of the ending. Also Ive added about 3 pages, and reworked/worded some of the existing text.
I'll send it in to TLZ, FSAC, and CGEF(and maybe others) when it is done.

hmmm... I wanna post but I also don't wanna post... If I post more Ill no longer be a 'delivery boy'... Arrrrrg... decisions, ohhh the stress!
Erdrik

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« Reply #35 on: 03-27-2002 11:51 »

Ah, heck. Ill give ya another quick peek  smile
Im just too kind  tongue
___
Later. The door to the bridge slowly creeps open
and a shadowed head with one-eye peeks out.
After looking around Leela steps off the bridge
and quietly takes a few steps to the other end
of the hall.
Her hair is messed, her tank top is un-tucked,
and one of the shoulder straps is hanging loosely
over her upper arm.
She looks back and motions to the still opened
door, then notices the strap and quickly pulls
it back up over her shoulder. Fry walks out,
his jacket flung over his shoulder, and his
hair also in a mess.
Fry:   (Quietly but Sly) You dropped this, ma&#8217;am.
Fry holds out his hand revealing Leela&#8217;s bra.
Leela&#8217;s eye widens, and she quickly snatches it
out of his hand.
___

Hee hee, enjoy.  smile

Call me Erdrik

Boycott Fox!! Down with the Evil OverLords!!
AstroZombie

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« Reply #36 on: 03-27-2002 16:08 »

 
Quote
Originally posted by futurefreak:
dont make me do my go erdrik dance again   big grin

The Go Erdrick Dance???  confused

WTF!
Erdrik

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« Reply #37 on: 03-27-2002 16:41 »

FF does it in my FanArt post. But regardless I still think FF is a little wacko  tongue lol
Tzlk
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« Reply #38 on: 03-27-2002 17:01 »

lookin forward to the fic Erdrik! 
BumbleBeeTheta

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« Reply #39 on: 03-28-2002 01:26 »

Shmeesh, Erdrik.  You post the tiniest bit of your fic and get me completely hooked.  Bad dog!  I condemn you to hell!  evil laugh  JK.  laff
But seriously, finish it soon!  I'm dying here!

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