Erdrik
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« on: 03-18-2002 10:42 »
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Im writing a fin-fiction where after 'Love & Rockets' and 'Leela's Homeworld', Fry and Leela have been "together" tho in secret. Leela is the one that wants the secrecy, tho I haven't figured exactly why yet... Partly because she doesn't what the rest of the crew to gawk, and bother her about it. But I need another reason. Any ideas? I also need help writing Amy's part(As she isn't my favorite charactor and I don't know enough about her ) She is on a family cruise and thus isn't directly tied to the first half of the story. Tho she uses a VidPhone to call Leela from the Cruise ship. Leela, is in the middle of a delivery with Fry, Bender, and Zoidberg(Zoiberg or Zoidberg? ). So far she asks if Leela is busy, and Leela says no more than usual, then Amy's Parents show up. I don't like it cause its short and isn't really funny So I need help for fillers jokes ect... Also she is suppose to drop a hint on what'll happen later in the fic... Also catch phrases she normaly says would be nice Thnx in advance.
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Tzlk
Professor
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Yea, things flow better when they are natural, not forced. If you can include amy in a meaningful way great, but if not leave it out because it could feel forced, thus lessing the quality of the fic.
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Erdrik
Professor
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« Reply #3 on: 03-19-2002 08:46 »
« Last Edit on: 03-19-2002 08:46 »
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true... k, then Amy's out Ill post what I got so far in a few days(can't right now becuase my new and old computers will be pre-ocuppied for the next 20 hours, whilst they transfer files )
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Chump
Urban Legend
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Its Zoidberg, there is a "d". Also, I wrote about 1/36th of a fic then gave up when I learned that the topic is going to be an actual episode... however, the stuff I wrote could work for what you are doing... its the opening and it is setting up for a delivery... you can take it if you want. (I love the Scary Door part): My partial fic:
Opening Some assembly required
Begins, Bender and Fry sitting in their familiar positions on the couch watching TV. It zooms to the screen. They are watching another installment of “The Scary Door”. Narrator: You are entering a place where ordinary people, do extraordinary things. Where people’s worst fears are brought to life, and where ketchup bottles don’t get that hard black ring around the top. You’re about to enter: The Scary Door. (Main logo) A glance to your right reveals one Elizabeth Powell. He day begins as it usually does, but with a sudden twist… (She buts a cup of coffee, and tosses a coin to pay for it. The coin begins to inexplicably hover. She is jittered and continues to walk down the street. She gets to the bus stop and is the last one to board, as she does, she looks up at the driver, who smiles with his mouth closed, but she clearly hears his say: “Room for one more”. She screams and rushes out of the bus, where she is snatched up by a giant hand. The driver adjusts his hat revealing a third eye, smiles, and drives off.
Scene changes back to Fry and Bender on the couch.
Bender: Boring!
Leela enters the room.
Leela: What are you guys doing? I told you we had a meeting at 10, and its 10 right now!
Fry: (Glancing at wrist) 9:59 by my watch.
Leela: Fry that’s not a real watch. It’s a picture you drew on your wrist in pen.
Fry: That doesn’t make it any less accurate than my other watches.
Leela: (sighs) Come on, let’s go.
The scene changes to the crew seated at the boardroom table. The professor is addressing the crew.
Professor: Good news everyone! Today you’ll be performing a suicidal mission that’s never been successfully attempted by man!
Leela: Why would that be good?
Hermes: (Showing off three envelopes) You life insurance policies have been cleared.
End
I'd also like to see someone write a fic about one of the crew doing something like destroying a priceless religious artifact and having to seek the forgiveness of the space pope.
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Erdrik
Professor
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mmmm looks good. Ill take it(You'll of course go in the creds ). Although I might modify it a bit if thats ok.
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Erdrik
Professor
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ok I finished modifying the 'ScaryDoor' part how's this?
-- Bender and Fry sit slumped on the couch watching TV. The screen shows that they are watching another installment of ‘The Scary Door’.
TV Show>>
TVNarrator: You are entering a place where ordinary people, do extraordinary things. Where people’s worst fears are brought to life, and where ketchup bottles don’t get that hard black ring around the top. You’re about to enter: The Scary Door.
The shows Main logo appears, then fades to a small town.
TVNarrator: The rising sun brings forth the new day, but the town is quiet still. A glance to your right reveals one Elizabeth Powell. Her day begins as it usually does, waking early in the morn, whilst everyone else sleeps. But today, is different…
Elizabeth Powell buys a cup of coffee, and tosses the Robot Merchant a coin to pay for it. She turns to walk away, but the coin begins to inexplicably hover. She is shaken, and stares at it for a minute, then slowly backs away before turning and continuing to walk down the street. She goes to the bus stop and notices that there is a line of people.
Powell: (Thinking) Strange. Usually no one but Robots are up at this hour.
Shrugging she gets in line and waits as the bus pulls up and people start boarding. She is the last one to board, as she does, she looks up at the driver, who smiles with his mouth closed.
BusDriver: Room for one more.
The bus driver’s mouth never opens, yet the words are clear and audible. She gasps and rushes out of the bus. She stops suddenly as a giant hand reaches down out of nowhere grabs her, and pulls her up and off screen. The driver adjusts his hat revealing a third eye, smiles, and drives off.
TV Show<<
Bender pulls out a beer from his chest compartment and takes a swig.
Bender: What a load of crap!
Leela enters the room.
Leela: What are you guys doing? I told you we had a meeting at 11, and its 11 right now! Fry: (Glancing at wrist) 10:35 by my watch. Leela: Fry that’s not a real watch. It’s a picture you drew on your wrist with a pen. Fry: That doesn’t make it any less accurate than my other watches. Leela: (sighs) Come on, let’s go.
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Erdrik
Professor
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In the Fic 'Dr.' Zoidberg has examined Hermes, and when asked about it states that he couldn't find his...
so, what kind of 'unknown alien organ' should it be?
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Chump
Urban Legend
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« Reply #10 on: 03-21-2002 15:26 »
« Last Edit on: 03-21-2002 15:26 »
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Person: So whats wrong with Hermes? DZ: His gas bladder is highly inflammed! This is often I sign of fin-rot... I'm afraid we'll have to put him down. (He sighs and reaches for a needle that reads: St. John's Arsenic for Children) Others: NO! Bender: Moron! BTW, please credit Kevin Mac. Not Chump.
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Erdrik
Professor
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« Reply #13 on: 03-22-2002 09:46 »
« Last Edit on: 03-22-2002 09:46 »
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ok Im aaaaalmost ready to post what I got so far. I just have a question: I have Fry shower, and clean up for once, and the rest of the crew had bet on how long it would take before he finaly does. the bet was three years ago, around the begining of the show, but I have only seen 1 season 1 eps... I want a flash back to show the bet, but I can't think of how it'll play out... any ideas? oh Leela wins it btw..
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Tzlk
Professor
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Well I just read it Erdrik and i liked it. I was a little confused at certain parts, and it ended quite abruptly. Are there going to be more parts?
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BumbleBeeTheta
Starship Captain
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Me too. Heck, I'd read anything by Kryten. Oh, and Erdrik, I REALLY like it! Sounds so far. I just have a couple questions. I didn't thoroughly read it, so where exactly is it going? I know, a rude question, but hey, I, like Life, am a bitch. Also, I'm guessing you plan on the crew finding out about L&F, so do you also plan on someone (i.e. Bender) finding out and then telling everybody? I'm just axeing. I think having someone walk in on them is a good way for it to spread. That's how I thought Buffy and Spike would work out, but she told Tara instead. Anyway, I think it's great and I look forward to reading more!
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Erdrik
Professor
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during the mission, Fry, and Leela are going to nearly get killed but I can't think of anything else... I intend either Amy, or Bender walking in on them. immidiatly after the Delivery. or after a second delivery...
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AstroZombie
Bending Unit
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Its not just mine Edrick, its a joint effort with Paul from FSAC, I have done solo fics before (UH OH I FEEL A SHAMELESS PLUG MOMENT ARISING HERE!!) Their are "Crash Course In love" and "Precious Memories" and they can be found at TLZ, LIC, FSAC, and CGEF. (SHAMELESS PLUG OVER )
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Erdrik
Professor
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yes I know Ive read them already lol. "Crash Course In love" and "Precious Memories" were both good. I liked "Crash Course In love" better.
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Tzlk
Professor
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I must offer my praise of you work too Zombie! I really like your fics them And i know if said it before but ill say it again.. I cant wait for the second part of Minds apart!
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Erdrik
Professor
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Ah, heck. Ill give ya another quick peek Im just too kind ___ Later. The door to the bridge slowly creeps open and a shadowed head with one-eye peeks out. After looking around Leela steps off the bridge and quietly takes a few steps to the other end of the hall. Her hair is messed, her tank top is un-tucked, and one of the shoulder straps is hanging loosely over her upper arm. She looks back and motions to the still opened door, then notices the strap and quickly pulls it back up over her shoulder. Fry walks out, his jacket flung over his shoulder, and his hair also in a mess. Fry: (Quietly but Sly) You dropped this, ma’am. Fry holds out his hand revealing Leela’s bra. Leela’s eye widens, and she quickly snatches it out of his hand. ___ Hee hee, enjoy.
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Erdrik
Professor
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FF does it in my FanArt post. But regardless I still think FF is a little wacko lol
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Tzlk
Professor
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lookin forward to the fic Erdrik!
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