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This is my first fanfic so be nice.

The Thing and Fry Part 1[/u]

“Good news everybody; my best friend just died, you all have the day off because I have to go to his stupid funeral. Oh yes and you’ll all be camping.” Announced the Professor.
“Yay a day off!” I shouted.
“Let’s go.” Said Leela.
“Ah nothing like camping.” Bender said.
“Since when have you been camping?” asked Leela.
“I saw it on TV, seemed fun.” Replied Bender.
“Shut up and go! All of you!” Shouted the Professor.
“We’re going!” I replied angrily.
So we got into the ship and shot off into the air to the campsite.
The parking lot was as deserted as a turkey farm on New Years Eve.
“This is like a ghost town.” I said.
“It sure is.” Answered Leela.

We got out of the ship, and walked into the forest, all we could see were trees anything could jump out on us at any time. A chill went down my spine, but I dared not show it on my face.
I had a feeling that someone was watching us… Or something! We came to a clearing in the forest. I crept forward to check for any danger. 
“What was that?!” I shouted.
“What was what?” Questioned Leela. She checked the clearing.
“Well this is as good place as any to set up camp.” She said.
“Okay” I replied.

I got my tent out of its bag I started hammering the pegs into the ground so that the ground sheet would stay in place; hitting my thumb many times in the process. Many minutes pasted perhaps a few hours later I managed to get my tent up.
“Why didn’t you just squeeze your tent out of a tube?” Leela suggested. She took out a tube saying “100% Pure Tent” on it. She squeezed the tube and out came a little blob that fell on the ground, then suddenly a loud popping sound echoed through the forest as a tent flew 1 metre
up in the air and landed on the ground.
“Nice!” I exclaimed. By that time it was getting dark.
“Maybe we should be getting a fire going.” Leela asked.
“I’m on it!.” Bender grabbed a load of logs threw them in front of Leela, drank some beer and did an almighty burp sending flames out of his mouth instantly lighting the logs.

Matts

[Reply #1 on:]

thats good so far matts. 

[Reply #2 on:]

Good fic so far, I take it your Fry?

[Reply #3 on:]

Thanks NB!
Yes I am Fry FP.

[Reply #4 on:]

Really good so far.  I find it intriguing that you put yourself in the fanfic as Fry.  Can't wait to see more of your fanfic.

[Reply #5 on:]

After this fanfic is finshed, I might write a really shippy Fic.

Edit: Part two coming soon.

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The Thing and Fry Part 2[/u]

There I sat in front of the fire, the embers glowing crimson red. I stared into the embers. “Camping is so relaxing... isn’t it Leela.” I said. I put my arm on her shoulder, she does not reply because she is asleep. I turn and stare into the fire; the ashes of the fire glow and eerie     florescent green glow it faded then went back to the same brightness it happened over and over again. The eerie florescent green glow cast a shadow over the trees, I turned back and looked into the fire again, there seemed to be a face in the embers it seemed to chant something over and over again. Then there was a dark whisper.
“Come with me or I’ll drag you down."
The whisper echoed getting louder and louder in my mind.
“Come with me or I’ll drag you down… Come with me or I’ll drag you down.”
Suddenly I was grabbed by something it dragged me into the forest.
“LET GO! LET GO!”
I cried. I struggled as hard as I could; trying to loosen the ice cold grip of whatever was dragging me. Suddenly the dragging stopped. I looked up we were in a clearing. There was a stench of death in the air… A face began to emerge from the darkness…   

Sorry It's very short I wanted to leave you all on a cliffhanger.

Matts
P.S Sorry about the double post.

[Reply #7 on:]

thats great, more,more,more! 

[Reply #8 on:]

You want more hey? More I shall give you...
3 years later "Part 3 is finished!"

[Reply #9 on:]

It better not be 3 years! Great so far!

[Reply #10 on:]

Thanks FP... Yet again.

[Reply #11 on:]

It's so good
please continue

[Reply #12 on:]

Three years and I'll never read your work again! It's a completely new direction from most fic around here, what with putting yourself in as Fry. Incidentally, I'm wearing one of my favorite Futurama shirts today with the main crew on it.

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The reason I put myself as Fry was to make my fic more scary.

[Reply #14 on:]

First-person narrative is more effective than the third in the depiction of emotions and internal conflict. The trick then, of course, is to discover adequate mechanisms by which other character's emotions can be displayed without resorting to cheesy 'change-the-perspective-to-different-characters-every-chapter' kind of cop-out gimmicks.
It's a lot of fun, and an interesting challenge. Needless to say it doesn't always lend itself to complex tales involving multiple locations or large-scale action sequences.
I use it for short introspective fiction. Like this very brief little romantic thing written from Leela's perspective: http://www.peelified.com/cgi-bin/Futurama/4-001474-1/

Great work so far. Hope to see more.

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Thanks coldangle! Part two is based on some writing I did at school to practise for my year 6 SATS and I got a level 5 (top mark) for it.

[Reply #16 on:]

So when's the next update coming?

[Reply #17 on:]

I don't know, it will be a while.

[Reply #18 on:]

How long ago were your Year 6 SATS, Mattador?

[Reply #19 on:]

A few weeks ago!

[Reply #20 on:]

Update coming soon, sorry about the long wait.

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 thts cool! -privateerdan