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Sine Wave

Liquid Emperor
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« Reply #40 on: 04-08-2007 13:16 »

Bendersfan1221 - Leela doesn't remember anything from her interaction with the Nibblonians.

All - Thanks for the feedback, hopefully I'll get another chapter done in the next few days.
RobotDevilRox

Starship Captain
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« Reply #41 on: 04-08-2007 15:26 »

Ooh, great! Two updates that I missed! Two in a row has a great effect - and I post my fic as I write it too! I'm not actually sure about the main plot yet, I only know as much as the readers! XD But seriously, this is a really great story. What more is there to say but: I can't wait for the next update!
Sine Wave

Liquid Emperor
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« Reply #42 on: 04-10-2007 14:55 »
« Last Edit on: 10-03-2007 00:00 »

saccharine drivel,
PazuzuJr

Liquid Emperor
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« Reply #43 on: 04-10-2007 18:56 »

great up date! There isn't really anything else to say so i'll just stick with my normal line and say - 'Can't wait for the next update'  tongue
Sedna

Bending Unit
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« Reply #44 on: 04-10-2007 21:11 »

<Zoidberg>More. More. MORE!</Zoidberg>

Seriously, I about jump out of my seat every time I see that you've updated.  This is quickly turning into one of my favorite stories. 

I absolutely love the callback to 4x12.   big grin  The idea of them switching those particular places isn't unique by now, but her saying similar things - I had to grin.

The one thing I'd suggest is, what's the daughter look like?  Really, the only description is extremely sparse.
 
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Leela wordlessly took the pad and signed it. The Director picked her daughter up from her crib and handed her to Leela. Despite Fry’s peril, her internal fear and sadness, she couldn’t help but have her breath taken away.
If that were a one time thing to keep us hanging on, I'd understand - but it seems like we've not gotten a chance to see this little girl at all.  Unless you're waiting for a part where the reader can really look at her through Fry and Leela's eyes (after they realize what's really [not]wrong with her?), perhaps?  But that's the only thing bugging me.

Can't wait for another update!  (I know, we're insistent little buggers, aren't we?  tongue)
Sine Wave

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« Reply #45 on: 04-10-2007 21:34 »
« Last Edit on: 04-27-2007 00:00 »

Holy crap, I completely forgot. I thought I had it way back in Chapter Two! I can't believe I left that out. Thank you thank you thank you thank you thank you!

-alright, I worked it in to Chapter Two. Here's the part so you don't have to hunt for it:

“Now, this is your daughter,” the Director said when Fry and Leela were ready, “by all outward appearances a healthy six month old child.” Fry and Leela looked on in amazement. A beautiful baby girl, with red hair, and two eyes.
FuturamaPac

Professor
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« Reply #46 on: 04-11-2007 02:55 »

The thing I really like about this story is that there is no 'nasty plot' as such, Fry and Leela keep caring no matter what happens. Great, great story so far
JustNibblin

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« Reply #47 on: 04-11-2007 08:35 »

Hi Sine Wave,

I'm a sucker for these kinds of stories!
My favorite line so far is

"try not get fatally wounded as much.”
LuvFry

Bending Unit
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« Reply #48 on: 04-11-2007 13:03 »

I just read your latest chapter, and I'm hooked! Now to go back and read the other six...
RobotDevilRox

Starship Captain
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« Reply #49 on: 04-11-2007 13:55 »

Wow! That was... Brilliant!

And now, I have to say, at the risk of sounding unoriginal: I can't wait for the next update!  big grin
Unregistered

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« Reply #50 on: 04-13-2007 15:22 »

i second that notion.  do continue  smile
Bendersfan1221

Space Pope
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« Reply #51 on: 04-13-2007 16:37 »

Yeah he's alive. I keep for getting that Leela didn't remeber anything from when the Brain Spawn took onver. Update. Update. i really like it. More. More. MORE!

Zim- Why is there bacon in the soap?!?!

Gir- I made it myself!
Sine Wave

Liquid Emperor
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« Reply #52 on: 04-13-2007 16:38 »
« Last Edit on: 10-03-2007 00:00 »

and just plain
Sine Wave

Liquid Emperor
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« Reply #53 on: 04-14-2007 09:13 »
« Last Edit on: 10-03-2007 00:00 »

bad writing.
FuturamaPac

Professor
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« Reply #54 on: 04-14-2007 09:47 »

Huzzah! A great ending Sine!
LuvFry

Bending Unit
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« Reply #55 on: 04-15-2007 16:28 »

"typecast villian" indeed  smile

Great job!
Trombonist

Starship Captain
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« Reply #56 on: 04-15-2007 19:11 »

Wonderful ending.  I can't believe I almost forgot about this fic! 
Bendersfan1221

Space Pope
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« Reply #57 on: 04-15-2007 20:54 »
« Last Edit on: 04-24-2007 00:00 »

Great story, beautiful ending. I hope that you write more stories. Loved the story. You are a great writer.

Zim- Why is there bacon in the soap?!?!

Gir- I made it myself!
FuturamaPac

Professor
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« Reply #58 on: 04-18-2007 10:34 »

Yeah, have you got any ideas for a new story Sine?
Sine Wave

Liquid Emperor
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« Reply #59 on: 04-18-2007 15:32 »

1. Thanks for all of the great feedback everyone, it's real motivation to keep going sometimes.

2. I've got a few ideas, but nothing definite, possibly the alternate ending/plot line to this story mentioned before. Hopefully I'll get a compelling idea and start on it before too long.
PazuzuJr

Liquid Emperor
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« Reply #60 on: 04-18-2007 15:39 »

Great update! and ending!
RobotDevilRox

Starship Captain
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« Reply #61 on: 04-30-2007 13:51 »

Oh, wow! I can't believe I missed the ending all this time! Wow... It's really great!
Sine Wave

Liquid Emperor
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« Reply #62 on: 04-30-2007 15:33 »
« Last Edit on: 04-30-2007 15:33 »

Well, I've spent the last two weeks lying in bed on hydrocodine, so I should probably have something to show for it. For you guys that means a sneek-peek at what I'm working on. I'm such a tease.

“Yes! Yes, yes, yes, yes, yes!” Phillip J. Fry exclaimed, running down the stairs from apartment 1I. His momentum carrying him through the front door, he paused and stood in triumph on the street. He could hardly believe what had just happened, he had finally done it. Of course the opera didn’t go quite as he had planned, but he still couldn’t be happier with the result. He’d been holding in his exuberance while he walked Leela home so he wouldn’t mess anything up, but now he was alone, and free to hoot and holler as much as he could. He ran and jumped in circles down the street, yelling and singing with joy. He even tried to swing on a lamppost, but he fell in the process. He got up laughing; he didn’t care. It was the happiest night of his life.

Turanga Leela leaned against the inside of her apartment door, the warm smile she’d had as Fry walked her home from the opera still lingering on her face. As she made her way across her living room, she heard Fry’s echoing cries of celebration ring through the building, and her grin grew wide enough to let out a chuckle. She looked down from her recently installed window and saw Fry dancing in the street, like a puppy imitating Gene Kelly. He was so cute when he was happy, and she hadn’t seen him like this since, well, when they were married. It made sense though; she had just fulfilled his reason for living. She couldn’t quite explain it, but the fact that he had written an opera for her, just so he could show her how he felt inside, what he had always been trying to say to her but couldn’t, made something inside her click, and the swirl of emotions she had for Fry coalesced into something understandable, like a game of tetris in her heart. And that led to what for so long was the unthinkable. It wasn’t just finally giving in, either. No, she wanted it almost as much as he did. Watching Fry eventually round the corner and disappear out of sight, her only wish was that Friday night wasn’t five days away.

The Dolomite Maneuver

Coming soon to a computer near you!

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Title, subject, and wording subject to change at author's discretion. Void where prohibited. Can be returned in for 2 cent refund in Maine and Hawaii. No purchase necessary.
Bendersfan1221

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« Reply #63 on: 05-01-2007 06:37 »
« Last Edit on: 05-01-2007 06:37 »

Sounds good. Hope it gets up son.
FuturamaPac

Professor
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« Reply #64 on: 05-01-2007 11:21 »

Now this is a story I can't wait to hear!
You will inform me when you've finished part 1, won't you Sine?
Sedna

Bending Unit
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« Reply #65 on: 05-03-2007 03:32 »

Mmmmm.  Sounds really good (as usual!).

Can't wait for more.  And by the way, I never got 'round to saying that the ending of BNW was wonderful and amazing and all that other good stuff.  love

 
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Well, I've spent the last two weeks lying in bed on hydrocodine, so I should probably have something to show for it.
Oooh.  I just got prescribed the same stuff.  ...Does this mean I'll have to seriously start working on [even finishing] my own fic?  hmpf
Sine Wave

Liquid Emperor
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« Reply #66 on: 05-03-2007 15:20 »

Thanks for all the nice comments you guys keep making.

@Sedna - No, it doesnt. You'll probably end up nearly asleep or incredibly ADD most of the time, which makes it hard to work. Makes school a blast, though. What's it for? I'm sorry to hear you need it.

Also, anyone who could possibly be a beta for my new fic would be incredibly appreciated, as I just feel that, well, I want to get better as a writer, and I can only go so far myself. Anyone willing to help at all would be greatly appreciated.
gwynhwyfar

Bending Unit
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« Reply #67 on: 05-03-2007 15:23 »

mmm.. me like very much!
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