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DrThunder88
DOOP Secretary
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Two questions: - Are you 15 years of age or older?
- Is English your primary language?
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Dorian
Crustacean
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DrT always asks these questions and very sensible ones they are.
I think your stuff could actually show promise but it's impossible to tell from so little.
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badpinkmummy
Bending Unit
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okay time for part 2 : the Dwight is right
Zoidberg walked over to the limp corpse of Dwight and tasted one of his dreads, and automatically upon arrival: he spit it back out. "Errgh! Now I've done some crap in my time, and I don't know what this boys been doing." "Let me see." Said Nibbler grabbing the soggy hair. He then inspected the hair closely for a few minutes, as Zoidberg played with his yo yo.
"Well" Asked Zoidberg. "I have worked out, what has happened...it all sepends on whether diarrhoea have two r's or two h's." Zoidberg paced wondering the links between victims crapping their pants and green goo, what alien creature did this? What was it's motive? "Zoiderg? Are you familar with TV presenter, Morbo?" "Of course, I watch his show on why your pee burns." "Well, on Dwight's top is the blood of his species." "I'm confused, I'm going to my thinking room." Zoidberg entered the thinking room (aka the loo) and sat down on the thinking chair(aka the toilet). "Hmm, why would alien celebrity, Morbo come down here to San Francisco to murder the son of a rastafarian?...Theres only one thing to do. Nibbler get my hoverbike ready we're going to LA."
"And get some wipes I've got a problem."
yeah my story's kinda rubbish. But I enjoy making them.
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DrThunder88
DOOP Secretary
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I hope you'll understand why I am not going to be posting any more reviews.
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Demeter
Starship Captain
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« Reply #24 on: 04-29-2006 02:58 »
« Last Edit on: 04-29-2006 02:58 »
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No, they were getting back to the topic. Topic: spin off detective story And then art started coming in. I wouldn't call it plagiarism, b/c i think they were trying to show th first post, not the art. But hey, that's just my Stipulated Opinion. The Actual Topic; I think you do need to work at tad on your descriptions. Otherwise, seeing as it's your first work, I'll just nod and say keep working on it.
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