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Is there a pun in "citrus?" The story structure seems to say "yes" but my tired brain can't find it.
Aside from that momentary confusion, I loved it. Loved it. LOVED it. It's...well, I can't analyze it or point out why, but it's...just right. I mean, not just just right, but JUST right. It is the personification of "just rightness." It is totally Leela and Fry. And the fact that I'm watching "Cyberhouse Rules" right this very moment (and was before I read it) makes its just rightness more apparent and spookily synchronicitous.
Yay!
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DrThunder88
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« Reply #42 on: 11-12-2005 02:53 »
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Here's one for the deleted scenes challenge. Coincidentally, this is also my second one referencing KGKuaN.
'Family and Smizmar Medical Leave Act' a drabble “I must say, Lieutenant, this is a first.”
“You mean maternity leave for a male?”
“Maternity leave at all. That’s why women aren't allowed on this vessel, Kif. They’re sumptuous, sexual baby fabrication plants.”
“Actually, sir...”
“Not to mention all of their gyrocological problems, crashing ships and whatnot.”
“Sir, that ship crashed when you attempted to pop a wheelie on a ship with no wheels to impress the new intern.”
“I remember her fondley.”
“I’ll be going now. The doctor says to avoid undue stress.”
“Just to be sure, nothing aggravates you, I’ll be accompanying you the whole time.”
“Ugh...”
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Ralph Snart
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SEVEN-THOUSAND-WORDS?
What da hell? Fry's Choice is almost as long as 'War and Peace'.
At least it's entertaining.
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Shiny
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« Reply #45 on: 11-12-2005 23:18 »
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Originally posted by Ralph Snart: SEVEN-THOUSAND-WORDS?
What da hell? Fry's Choice is almost as long as 'War and Peace'.
At least it's entertaining. "At least?" AT LEAST?![/b] Are you nuts?! One of the best fan stories ever written in the history of the world and you're kvetching because there's too MUCH of it?!?! Perhaps you'd like to register a complaint that Futurama has far too many episodes?! I don't get it, not at all... Oh, and...Dr.T., excellent missing scene! (that's what we called "cut scene" vignettes in the days before DVD's...you know, in between the dinosaur hunts and all.... )
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Ralph Snart
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I DIDN'T MEAN IT THAT WAY!
I have been very entertained with 'Fry's Choice', however I have a bad feeling that Leela's not going to come out very well at the end.
'Fry's Choice' is a very good story, perhaps one of the best, but don't belittle the stories that you and Venus have blessed us with.
(OK Leela, I'm pulling for you! Don't drown in Fry's mind!)
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Shiny
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Well, since you buttered me up, I'll leave off my humourously exaggerated incredulous reaction and simulate a mollified demeanor. You're forgiven. And now, for something completely different: something on topic (probably)....
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Ralph Snart
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Originally posted by Shiny:
Perhaps you'd like to register a complaint that Futurama has far too many episodes?!
Not too many eps, but they could have left 'That's Lobstertainment' on the cutting room floor. Of course we have to have the turkeys to be able to judge the fantastic eps by. (The Sting, Parasites Lost, Time Keeps On Slipping, Jurassic Bark all come to mind). I am humbled by your forgiveness.
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Layla50
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You go away to New Brunswick for the weekend and people start talking about you behind your virtual back. I love this place! Anyway, hurrah for me, I pressured Venus into writing instead of t'other way 'round! Look at all these lovely drabbles of happiness. Venus: Loved it, loved it, loved it! I can picture it being a real missing scene. The citrus line was precious! Great choice of episode too. I've always regarded it as one of the more subtle shippy episodes. *sniff* Fry loves her for the weirdo she is! Drabbles are harder than they look, ain't they? FutureDramaQeen: Very sweet! I hope you realize that you've now forced me to keep my promise about tackling more embarrassing moments. I'm sure I'll enjoy it, so thanks! Officer 1BD1: Oh, that's so beautiful! My mushy, fluffy heart did somersaults, thanks! Plus, you are a very cool and look-up-to-able fanperson. Dr.Thunder: Loved both of your drabbles. You've got the same knack for making me laugh as Bergey does. Yay for Panucci and the word, gyrocological! Zapp's just a scream, too. Boltzmann_Fan: Awesome and very funny. I should have started recruiting drabble slaves a long time ago! I'd have never started writing! Now to stray off topic a bit (Hey, you guys did it first! ) Venus was not entirely accurate in her description of the upcoming update. (And this time, I mean it.) (Heehee, that amused me.) It's about half the remainer of the story and will almost certainly exceed 8000 words. The whole last part is already up to 15000 words and there's a lot to be written. Just something to look forward to or dread depending on if you are Ralph or not. Now to reread that conversation and bask in the love.
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fryismyhero
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« Reply #50 on: 11-17-2005 23:51 »
« Last Edit on: 11-18-2005 00:00 »
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A drabble of embarrassment... It's an existing scene of course, but since I find this scene so powerful I wanted to do my own take on it. Clammy fingers stumbled over tortured notes. A thousand faces answered with crumpled agony. The one facing the faces paused, unsure; the offending vessel fell limp into his lap. Silence. A thousand faces turned and disappeared, a stream of shame vanishing into the blackness. A single light fell onto the remaining face, alone with a discordant instrument and an over-familiar pair of talentless hands. He hung his head. He had failed again. The one who mattered had gone. “Please don’t stop playing, Fry. I wanna hear how it ends.” He looked up. Of the stream of faces a single drop remained. Drabbles are HARD!!! But fun. Hope you like it EDIT:Blasted thing was 101 words! Took a word out
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DrThunder88
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Originally posted by Layla50: Yay for Panucci... That little exclamation of Fry's is one of my favorite lines, and it's not even in the foreground.
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DrThunder88
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"Kif Gets Knocked up a Notch." If you cue the episode up to 13:52, you'll hear Fry in the background saying, "My face was stuck in a pizza."
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YeOReO
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Originally posted by Venus: "I'm surprisingly tasty."
"Leeeeelaaaa you're not taking this seriously!"
"How can I?" She asked. "I'm citrus."
That just made my day. Mine'll be a scene from A Fishfull of Dollars. Fry woke up in a very superb astoundingly awesome dream. How could he be in the era of the new millenium? In 2000? Leela and Bender walked in. "I hope you are happy." Leela stated. "You have shunned your friends to live in the past with your records and anchovies, and... and... All that useless crap!" "Nice place." yammed Bender as he began to walk around. "What do you eat?" Fry smiled coyly. "Meatballs and gravy!" he shouted stupidly. "IT'S A XANA ATTACK!!!" screamed Bender, starting to run off, but ending up running into Fry's wall instead. "That was random."And there is my happy little drabble, that's all and good night!
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« Reply #60 on: 11-21-2005 13:09 »
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I got bored on Sunday night and made my drabble longer and posted it on fanfiction.net. It's here if you want to read it. Edit: Just remembered- Venus, I forgot to put your name in the ' Dedication' line I put on my stories on ff.net. It was your idea to write missing scene drabbles which is where the whole thing came from. So, THANK YOU VENUS!
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Ralph Snart
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Originally posted by Layla50:
Just something to look forward to or dread depending on if you are Ralph or not.
Well, even if Leela doesn't come out well in this fic, you have redeemed yourself with Leela's story at the Rocket Skating Rink (I would like to see a short epilogue where she lets Fry know how much she enjoyed herself and that she no longer thinks that he has a drinking problem - but you're probably exhausting your free time with concluding 'Fry's Choice') Venus:
At last! Recognition! Aw, you've been recognized for a long time. You rock, girl!
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fryismyhero
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« Reply #64 on: 11-24-2005 18:02 »
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FDQ that's great, I love it! Here's another embarrassment drabble. FDQ I SWEAR I didn't copy the Leela/orphanarium idea from you...I had written it before read yours I promise! It wasn’t the braces. Ten staring pairs of eyes…Ten pointing fingers…Ten mocking voices. It wasn’t the freckles either. The centre of the circle was cold. Ice cold under the stares. Though crumbling inside, she still stood tall. A defiant glare did little to mask the pain. It wasn’t even the glasses. No-one stepped in to defend her…No-one called out to stop…No-one cared. “One eye! One eye!” Was this why she was alone? Why she was abandoned? Yes. It had to be. This was why no-one loved her. She broke down at last, sobbing. A single eye faced twenty and lost.
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Ralph Snart
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This is my try. Don't burn me at the stake if it doesn't work...
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Doug was sweet, well dressed and her eye didn't bother him. Except he had a vile lizard tongue.
He had promised to save her race by marrying her. Alkazar lied; he was a con man.
Adlai had made her normal; something she always dreamed of. Except he couldn't accept her for wanting to be different again.
Chaz was everything: Rich, successful, powerful. But he had no heart or soul.
Fry wasn't rich, or well dressed, or powerful. He accepted her as she was, one eye and all. He was always there.
He was the most important person in the world.
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« Reply #73 on: 11-28-2005 16:58 »
« Last Edit on: 11-28-2005 16:58 »
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Um... Am I allowed to post a drabble that's not necessarily based on a challenge? From what I can gather from Layla's intro that's OK...right? Man I'm a scaredy-cat! Well, here goes... --------------- “Why did you turn him down, Leela?” inquired Amy. They were sitting at the PE conference table, sipping coffee and discussing Leela’s latest ‘relationship’. “He was perfect – rich, handsome, good in bed- uh, so I’ve been told. By you.” “Amy, I never slept with him.” “Oh. Well, anyway – what was it?” “I don’t know. It’s just…” Leela paused and bit her lip, playing with her ponytail. “He wasn’t… He just wasn’t-” “Fry!” exclaimed Amy. The cyclops turned to see the redhead, grinning as usual, and humming a cheerful tune as he approached them. He took the seat beside her. “Hi.”
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Corvus
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Oh doggone it.. you guys and gals are soooo talented. These drabbles you've written are all great (have a few favorites, won't say which ). Have tried my hand at the fanfic game.. as yet it has turned out crap. (I even had hookers and blackjack, but to no avail, shouldn't have listen to Bender I guess. )
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« Reply #76 on: 11-29-2005 10:35 »
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Since it's been what, almost 5 days since I last posted a drabble, I feel like writing a new one (I'm just going to keep writing 'til I get told to stop ). This is for the 'shocking secrets' challenge. And by the way, I do know this makes no sense. Because of the word limit, most of the stuff that made it make sense had to be cut out. I still think this is a word or four over... Truth Or Dare"Truth or dare?" She hated this game. She didn't want to tell people about herself. Or do something stupid. "Okay...Truth." "Do you like me? You know, more than a friend?" "Fry, why do you ask? You know the answer." Well, he knew an answer. It just might not be the right one...Why is it always so hard to tell someone you like that you...like them? "Fine. Dare then. Kiss me." She wanted to so much... "No!" She exclaimed, going against her own thoughts. "Look, Fry. I don't like you that way." "Okay..." Both were crushed. One's pain evident, the other's hidden.
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« Reply #79 on: 11-29-2005 15:49 »
« Last Edit on: 11-30-2005 00:00 »
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Longer version (as demanded by Venus ) of Truth Or Dare. This isn't very good (in fact it's bad) because I accidently deleted the first good version, so this is 'rewrite' so to speak. Truth Or Dare"Truth or dare?" She hated this game. She didn't want to tell people about herself. Or do something stupid. But her urge to spend more time with him pushed her concerns away. "Okay." She hesitated. Which one was worse? Dare, she decided. "Truth." It took him no time to think of a question. "Do you like me? You know, in a more than a friend way?" She sighed. "Fry, why did you ask that? You know what the answer will be." Well, he knew an answer. It just might not be the right one...Why was it always so hard for her to tell someone that she...liked them? She knew why. But she would never tell anyone. "Fine. Dare then. Kiss me." She wanted to so much...to have him wrap his arms around her, to tell her how beautiful she is, for him to kiss her-to do more... But she couldn't tell him. If only he knew why... "No!" She exclaimed, going against her own thoughts. She hated to do this. It pained her. But she had to-for both of them. At least, that's what she told herself. "Look, Fry. I don't like you that way." Both were crushed. One's pain evident, the other's hidden. ---------- There's another chapter to go with this (which hasn't been written yet). I might open a thread here and re-post this and the new chapter on there.
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