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DrThunder88
DOOP Secretary
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Before I post my thoughts, SORF: - Is English your primary language?
- Are you under 15 years old?
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stucksteve
Crustacean
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Thanks for the welcome sorf. Is there anything I really ought to knwo before posting a story of my own?
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DrThunder88
DOOP Secretary
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I'll make the same assumptions PG did.
SORF, you call that an act? You've written two minutes of dialog.
I like the idea of a robot "coming of age" (what a Bot Mitzvah celebrates, I suppose), and there are a great number ways this story could develop, but you're not giving us a whole lot to work with. Your spelling is bad and your formatting is hard to follow, both could be solved by proofreading before posting.
It could be a very good story, but you need to put a lot of effort into it. I recommend writing the entire story before posting it, but the big guns on this forum seem to write in segments. I have to imagine, however, that they know exactly where their stories are going. So if you don't have a fairly specific outline of major plot points for your story, you could be in for a world of literary hurt.
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