fry's destiny

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here it is my story fry's destiny i hope you all like it remember this is my first atempt at wrighting a fanfic so pleas be kind

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...your supposed to actually have something to say when you make a new thread.

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sorry i'am a little new at this hole thread thing but i will make sure to do that thank for posting though.

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As nice as you seem for a newbie, this is not the right way to start a thread, and your first one I think too.

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oh sorry i gusse that i have far to go before i get a hang of this hole thing but if you still whant to read my story you can find it at FM:TLZ and it is under the name raziel.

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Oh, it's ok jubei  Yeah I'll still read it, and you should still put it up here. I took me awhile to get a hang of the place, but I did in time 

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thanks oh honorable capitan but one question how do i do that if you have an answer don't be affraid to e-mail me. my e-mail address is dustin85@sbcglobal.net

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Well I just finish reading your fic.
It was good and... Well... weird.
But still, it was a good way to past my lunch time. 

If you want to post your fic here, just copy and paste it. Then voilà you got you’re self a fic on PEEL. 

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Dear Nic how do i do that because i really whant to have my fic on PEEL. so if you have any answers  let me know.

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Grettings all I guess the reason i am wrighting is to tell you that i will be wrighting the reast of my fic by my self and about the sequel i just need a name and i can go from there. and also i'am sorry if i have not made any body happy so as soon as i get through wrighting my fic i will send it to FM:TLZ for those who whant to read it can find it there. but i will keep my thread up for people who whant to comment on my work .

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English, please?

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Grettings Gunieapig Trick what i was trying to say is that the two people that will remain nameless i asked them to help me wright the reast of my fic but it turn's out that it won't so i will not ask them anymore and i also said that i was sorry if i not made anybody happy and that i may not put it up on peel instead it will be on FM:TLZ for those who whant to read it and i will keep my thread up for people who whant to comment on my work.

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Grettings all fanfic wrighter's I need idea's lot's and lot's of idea's for the reast of my fic and for the reast of the chronicle's of the quiet one and also how many chapter's do you think there should be. P.S if if you don't have any that is ok but not to sound mean or any thing if nobody can give me any idea's soon I might just have to scrap the reast of the story the sequel on the other hand I might continue I know that the sound of me scraping  my fic might put some people off  know that I am sorry so to keep from resorting to these kind of mesure's send your idea's soon eather by e-mail or by posting on my thread. later day's

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Greatting's all I come to you with a question how do i summit a fic here on peel I ask because I not only whant to put my first fic which i bet some  some of you hate any way's I whanted to know because I might whant to put the chronicles the quiet one on here so if any has any answers let me know also if you have any idea's for chapter's 8-20 and on how many chpater's the sequel should have let me know viea e-mail or by post.Later day's

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Before doing anything with your fic, please make sure you grammar- and spell-check it.  Your posts are giving me eye cancer.

There are to ways of posting your fic.  First, if your format looks pretty much like this:
 

Fry: How come when I want to fun stuff that'll kill me you're always against it?
Leela: This is more important than that marble-eating contest, Fry.

...or...

 

Fry was confused by what he perceived to be Leela's uncharacteristic support of dangerous activities among her friends.  He wondered about the many times she had saved him from prematurely terminating his own existence.  These thoughts drained away, however, as the memories of all of her rejections of his love flooded his consciousness.  Now, instead of just being confused he was deeply hurt, distraught over her active neglect of his feelings.  Oh, how he wished he could tell her this, but all he managed to say was, "How come when I want to do fun stuff that'll kill me, you're always against it?"

Leela could feel the anger in Fry's voice.  She knew how he felt about her, and, on some level, she felt the same way, but Fry was being immature, and it had to stop.  She didn't want it to stop for good, mind you.  Fry's child-like innocence was charming and a welcome change of pace from many of the other men that had breezed in and out of her life, but any romance would have to wait until she fulfilled her lifelong ambition through Bender's success.  She would hae to shoot Fry down again, and Leela wanted to do it as tactfully as possible so as not to damage Fry's gossamer feelings, but the heat of the exchange overwhelmed her and she snapped back condescendingly, "This is more important than that marble-eating contest, Fry."

(I swear to god, if your fic looks like this melodramatic hogwash, I will punch you in the ovaries)

...then your best bet is to just post it in segments directly in this thread.  This is the most common method of getting fanfics on PEEL.  Second, if your story uses a format most commonly associated with screen- and teleplays or some other, crazy formatting system, it might be best to convert it to an HTML file, host it with any of the myriad of free hosting websites across the net, and link to the files in the thread.  That's what I did (Example and gratuitous plug) because I was using a program that automatically locked me into script format.

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Greattings DrThunder88 all of my storie's have been checkd for spelling errors and for garmmar errors as well also how do I go aboutposting it on this thread because I asked some oneelse the same thing they said that I could just cut and paste it on to this thread so if you have any think useful to tell me let me know and I understand if you hate it most of the people who posted on thread made it clearly known that they hate it so sorry if it was not to your liking. Later day's

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PEEL isn't like TLZ. You don't need to submit your fic to a webmaster to get it up here; you simply post it the same way you'd post anything else. But since it already is on TLZ, I suppose you could also link to it this way:

Fry's Destiny
by jubei/Raziel

Jump to part: 1 2 3 4 5 6 7

There. Now it's more convenient for PEELers to find, and to discuss if they feel like it.

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I praise thee oh honorable captain TL finally some one has some thing useful to tell me so thank you for helping me with this Tongue Luck also if you could also link the sequel as well when I GET it finshed and if you have any idea's for the reast of Fry's Destiny that would be nice and tell me how many chapter's you whant in the Chronicle's let know really really soon. P.S. finally some who dosen't hate me or my fic so thank you from the bottom of my lonely lonely heart. Later day's

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Hate you???     Who said that we hate you Jubei.

I only said that I didn’t have the time to help you with your fic.
Also I thought that I gave you a clear explanation about how to write your fic here on PEEL. I realy think that Tongue Luck did a great thing when she linked your fic for you.   

Jubei, don’t say that we hate you! No one here ever said that. (I think… Maybe I’m wrong? But I never said that!) We’re all deferent and we act all differently.

Anyway, I must go now. My break time is over.
 

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Greattings Nic2001 thank you from the bottom of lonely lonely heart I am glad to know that to know that you dn't fell that way I know that you don't have time to help me with it but if you have any idea's for the reast of my fic that would be nice also if you any idea's for the chronicles that would buuku sweet oh one more thing let me know how many chapter's you think the sequel should have so onece again thank you from the bottom of my lonely lonely heart. later day's

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It's not that we hate you it's just that the constant asking others to write your fic for you thing you do is annoying. If you're not asking someone to write it for you you're asking us to tell you how many chapters to write or give you ideas. If you don't have an idea for a story don't write one. If you do have an idea, write it yourself. And don't worry about how many chapters to make it. Just write until there's no more story left. And if you have specific things you need help with ask in the fanfic help thread and not in other peoples fic threads.

 http://www.peelified.com/cgi-bin/Futurama/4-000209-7/

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It's not fair to say I hate your story, jubei.  I hadn't even read your story until TL posted those links.  I was genuinely trying to help you because I wanted to read your story.

Thanks to TL's understanding of what you meant, I have now read your story and am willing to post my thoughts on it.  Before I do, however, I need the answers to two questions that should always be asked if the answers are ambiguous.

• Are you under fifteen years of age?
• Is English your primary language?

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Thank you Venus I will remember that also I asking people to wright my fic for I was asking people if they whanted to to wright on half and then I would wright other half basically I asking people they would likebe a co author or something like that. Greatting's DrThunder88 to answer your question's no I am not fifteen I am 20 year's old and to answer you seconed question yes English is my primary language hope that tells you a little bit about me.  P.S. if any one would like to do some art fo my stories that would make me very happy my e-mali adress can be found in my profial. later day's

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Grettings all I come to you with a question and that question is for the fan artists out there. IF you would like yo do some art fore my stories that would make me very happy so let via e-mail or by post my e-mail adress in located in profile.Later day's

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Gretting's my fellow futurama nauts just reminding you that if would like to do some art for my stories let me know by ether e-mail or by post my e-mal adress is located in my profile. later day's

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Greattings my fellow futurama supernauts just thought come out of hole to see if any one was willing to do any art of story if so let me know by posting in this thread so if so that will make me very happy the reason I ask is because I can't draw the futurama characters like you do the only thing I can dtaw anime style. they are usually the characters that  made up so I would be very gratefull if any one whanted to do some art of their favorit scenen's. later day's

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Yes I jubei master of the blade is finally delivery boy.

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I bring you greattings to those who have or may have not read my fic well now that the plesantry's are over I regret to in form you that both of my stories might be going on permaneant hieatus why you may ask I will tell you since I don't have any more idea's or any thing to inspire me and when I aske people if rhey have any idea's they don't and it also as to do whith that I can't find any one who would want to be a co-author I know that it might put some you off but what can ya do when there's no help in sight but I will keep this thread up for any one who want's to comment on the seven chapter's of fry's destiny also I can tell you one thing that might give you  a glemer of hope and that is I might try again that is as soon as I get through  moving to phoenix arizona next year untill then. later day's 

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Wow! Look at all these fellow captains!
Is Fry's Destiny a finished story?

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I'm going to be really honest with you, jubei.  Your story is confusing as hell.  It's like you wrote another story and you just threw the Futurama characters' names onto them.  Unless there is a preface or prequel or some other backstory that was never brought to my attention, you've asked your readers to assume an awful lot right from the outset.  You never mention who the "priest of fire" is.  You don't explain why Leela is suddenly the daughter of a queen on planet Amazonia.  I don't understand how Fry came to be from Japan or why he has swords or when his parents gave him the cloaking device for those swords.

From a technical standpoint, some of your writing is cumbersome and difficult to read.  Cases in point:
 

From Part 6
It has been two weeks since that fateful day and it was now morning of the first week.

Cumbersome.  After re-reading it seems like you're refering to a three-week period and the day in question is the first day of the third week, but when I first read it, it seemed like you were referring to two different times at once.
 

From Part 1
but instead of continents there are island's that are about the same size as earth's continents

Can you explain the difference between continent-sized islands and continents themselves or is this strangely worded as a joke?
 

From Part 3
...unconscious sleep...

As opposed to what?  Is this another joke?

Your spelling is also pretty bad.  I suggest that you take a good, hard look at whatever force in the Universe you use to check your spelling.  If English is your first language and you're over 15, you shouldn't be making many of the simple mistakes that dot the chicken paprikash of your fanfic like so many red flecks of paprika.

Like I said, the story reads like an anime fantasy fanfic that uses the names of Futurama characters without actually using those characters.  My advise is go balls out one way or the other.  It is my opinion is that Futurama and anime are mutually exclusive.

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Greatting's DrThunder88 to answer your questions. first question which is the if there is a prequel well ther would have been one but like i said this thing was actually based on some dream's i had I know I sound insane but it is true the main charachter was supossed to be called mudai. seconed question. who is the priest of fire. answer he is an old family friend that was there scince his birth.third question how did leela become the daughter of the queen of amazonia.answer amazonia wasn't always a planet ruled by women  it was ruled by both men and women  see on day the queen of the province that was ruled by women met the king of the province that was ruled by the males at a royal gahthering so you know what happens.fourth question fry did not come from japan his parents abadoned him on the island and the swords where a gift from his parents the cloking device wwas not from his parent's he built it him self so i hope that answer's your question's. Cap'n Skusting I don't really know if the story is finished or not the only way it won't end is if some could give me any ideas and who would or would not like to be a co author with me so untill then. later day's 

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Greatting's all first off I could not belive my eye's when I read cap'n skusting's post I did not know that my declaration of the fic going on a permanent hiatus would shock some one. DR Thunder88 about the prequel you see the story  is about what he wright's down in his captain's log recounting the event's that had happened in his life and the sequel take's place 25 year's after the death of the mighty kuga so I hope that explain's some thing. later day's

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Greattings all it is me again I have droped by to tell you that chapter's 1-6 have been fixed so that you  all won't be to confused when you read it so if you whant read it i will e-mail a copy to you if so let me know.Also if any of you have any idea's for my fics let me know because I really don't want to kill off my fics so if you do let me know by posting in this here thread or by e-mail and that is in my profile till next time. later day's

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Gretting's My fellow spaceminers it's me again come to tell you that chapter's 1-6 of Fry's Destiny has been fixed so that you all won't be really to confused when you read it so if you whant to read it I will e-mail you a copy if you whant me to that is. So if you do let me know also if you have any idea's for my fics let me know because I really don't want to prematurly kill off my fics before they get finished as always you can ether post your idea's in this here thread or send them to me in an e-mail which is located in profile till next time. Later day's  P.S I am going to Albuquerque next sunday so between now and until that da I will answer any question's that you might have about my storie's and or e-mail. Till next time later day's 

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Greatting's My fellow Spaceminers I was wondering if any one had any idea's for my storie's the reason that i ask is because I want to know what you think should happen as alway's you can ethre post them in this thread or you can send thme to by e-mail my e-amil is located in my profile oh and by the way I will not be here august 7th because I am going to New Mexico that day and won't be back until friday so from now until then I will answer any quesation's that you may have about my  stories. till next time. later day's     

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Greattings my fellow spaceminers it's me again telling you that right after this coming week I will be leaving for Albuquerque NewMexico next sunday so as always if you have any question's or idea's for or about my stories let me know ether some time today or some time during the week until then. later day's

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Greattings my fellow spaceminers it's me again if any of you would like me to e-mail you a copy the seven chapter's of fry's destiny and what I already have written for part 1 of the chronicles let me know till next time. later day's

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Greattings to all my favorite wrighters and fellow spaceminers it is me again telling you that I have started wrighting the reast of chapter one of the chronicles of the quiet one. So I was wondering if any of you had any idea's for chapters 2-30 of the cronichles as well as for chapters 8-20 of fry's destiny and if so let me know by ether posting in this here thread or by e-mail which is located in my profile until next time. later day's

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Greattings my fellow spaceminers it is me again asking you the question you all hate to hear but I'm going to ask it any ways doe's any one have idea's for fry's destiny and the chronicles of the quiet one and if so let me know ether by posting inthi thread or by e-mail which is located in my profile until next time. later day's

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konbanwa my fellow spaceiners it is aking you all if you have any idea's 8-20 of fry's destiny and any for chapter's 2-30 of the chronicles of the quiet one and if so you let me know ether by posting in this thread or by e-mail my e-mail adress is located in my porfile so as always until next time. later day's