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Venus

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« Reply #560 on: 02-07-2005 23:21 »

i never saw Katey as being an author insertion, and i always thought i was pretty good at picking them out.
Procyon

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« Reply #561 on: 02-07-2005 23:29 »
« Last Edit on: 02-07-2005 23:29 »

Oh, I didn't mean it like that. I meant she was just a new charcter not actually in the show. Exactly why I'm not the one writing this thing.   tongue
She doesn't come off as someone who would never fit in the show, like other fanfics (i will not mention names) but a genuine, realistic made up character.   tongue Seriously though, the story's great, no need to change anything.
Nerd-o-rama

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« Reply #562 on: 02-07-2005 23:45 »

 
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Ah, you're just too good to me. I'll have to write you something special when this is done.
*Beams*

And yes, emotion was in there twice for a reason.  Melodramatic but still believeable emotion and characterization seems to be your strong suit.
Venus

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« Reply #563 on: 02-07-2005 23:51 »

 
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Originally posted by Procyon:
Oh, I didn't mean it like that. I meant she was just a new charcter not actually in the show.


Usually author insertions are really obvious and don't fit into the universe they're being placed in. Not all original characters are author insertions.
PJ

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« Reply #564 on: 02-08-2005 01:30 »

 
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Originally Posted By layla:PJ:Thanks for starting up such an interesting conversation there!
i didn't think i deserve credit for that whole thing cause i was just kinda joking around about the cliffhangers if anything the credit should go to:
Say what now
Tom35
Gorky
Venus
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Originally Posted By layla:He's on Fry's mother's side, like you guessed. Bravo!
i got something RIGHT Cooool

Gorky

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« Reply #565 on: 02-08-2005 15:25 »

Hmm...you like the play-by-plays, eh? Well then, here's one on that (long) comment you left me.

First my ego went up three points (its like the stock market, only bigger and more bustling), then I was reminded again of that hilarious Yancy Sr. line, then I laughed myself silly for about three minutes until I realized that I was supposed to be writing this thing, then I got back to writing this thing, then I was reminded again of the shippy moment and remembered one of the reasons this thing is so great (you can squeeze in that ship without it being out of place), then I was shocked that you would even think of cutting that, then I cried at the fact that that teriffic scene almost ended up on the cutting room floor, then I stopped crying when I realized how utterly pathetic that was, then I cried again at the realization that I actually am that pathetic, then after all that crying I needed a pick me up, so I went outside and chased a couple of squirrels, then I got back to writing this thing, then, like the Grinch's heart, my ego grew three more sizes because of that free compliment/plug that you paid me, then I was happy that you were gonna review my stuff, then I felt bad 'cause you were so tired, then I realized that I was really tired too so I took a nap.

And now I'm back. Anyway, about the shippy thing, I can't even believe you could ever think of cutting something like that. It's not even really shippy so much as it is...well, perfect. I mean, Fry's opening up to Leela, being his usual self, and just that little contact made Leela's insides do that little jump thing. Amazing.

Oh yeah, and it just ocurred to me that this thread might reach its 20-page limit before you finish the story. So, the question I'm asking is, how much more of the story is there? I'm sure it could go on for 100 more pages, but that's likely not the case. (But if it is, that's just awesome, man...)

As I always say, I can't wait for more...
say what now

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« Reply #566 on: 02-08-2005 18:53 »
« Last Edit on: 02-08-2005 18:53 »

The only thing I've done to further the story is figure out what I wanted to do with the "shippy" scene, if you remember what I'm referring to. But my computer is currently comatose, and my mother's is too (I've been hogging my dad's claiming I need it to do homework), and unfortunately that whole synopsis I wrote out to you is on my comatose computer, so I have to wait until I get that back... plus I'm lazy. But I'll get on it once my computer wakes up!

Anywho, darn you and your vile cliffhangers that you do not have to suffer through. You know I was so eager to read that last part I printed it out? I mean this in the way that my friend was over so I couldn't just sit here and read it, and she wanted to watch Family Guy, so I printed it out and read the whole intro-y thing and stuff while glancing at the show every now and then, then I fell asleep for like ten minutes and I had this whole weird dream about what the controversy was... maybe I'll email you about it.

Edit (God, I always edit): Yes, I mentioned that she wanted to watch Family Guy for a reason. It contributed to my dream's take on the controversy.
Procyon

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« Reply #567 on: 02-08-2005 19:09 »
« Last Edit on: 02-08-2005 19:09 »

Sorry Venus. I don't write or draw, so I know nothing about writing terms. I just heard it somewhere and it seemed to fit, because Katy was created by Layla. Curse all you talented people who know stuff!   tongue

God, I've been using the :P smiley too much!
Layla50

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« Reply #568 on: 02-10-2005 15:27 »
« Last Edit on: 02-10-2005 15:27 »

Well, I'm starting to recover from this nasty illness, which means that I've started writing again. Nothing I can post just yet, but certainly by the weekend, Saturday at the latest.

I'm relieved that the author insertion was just a misunderstanding, since it was probably the most dangerous part of writing an OFC. I tend to think or author insertions as self insertions really, and I didn't want anyone thinking that I was Katy.

In answer to Gorky's question (Thanks for the play by play, by the way! Cracked me up, and turned me to mush at the same time. Oh, and you may want to check out the Valentine's day thread, as well as Jberges as there's this crazy poem. (I didn't mean to leave you out Venus, I swear, or say what now, or anyone else.)

So what was I saying? Oh, right, Gorky's question as to how much there is left. Well, it's hard to say. I just sketched out what's going to happen in the rest of the story and that ended up being about two pages or brief notes. It wouldn't surprise me in the least if I hit the 100,000 word mark, but I'm thinking that it should be done before I hit the twenty page limit. (Hard to imagine that's a concern!)
Lots of action, drama, comedy and some shippyness to come.

Incidentally, does anyone know what I'm supposed to do when this thread hits 20 pages? I'm not really sure.

Oh, and I have a question for anyone with an opinion. Do you want to know what happens to Katy in the end? After all the excitement? Or do you not want to know. I have a short little scene in mind, but I'm not sure I should include it.

say what now: Ah, your poor computer. That bites! Still, I'm happy you're still thinking about it.
I'm flattered you thought this story worth printing out for the purposes of reading, and you must tell me, if you can still remember, about your controversy dream.

Procyon: Thanks for the support and the helpful comments. You scared me and then made me feel better, so thanks!   wink

Tom35

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« Reply #569 on: 02-10-2005 15:32 »

Good to see that your getting better now, can't wait for the next part.

*takes sleeping pills to help the time pass quicker*
Ol´coot

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« Reply #570 on: 02-10-2005 16:11 »

 
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Originally posted by Layla50:
Oh, and I have a question for anyone with an opinion. Do you want to know what happens to Katy in the end? After all the excitement? Or do you not want to know. I have a short little scene in mind, but I'm not sure I should include it.

Do as you want Layla but I'd like to know how she turned out! I am also looking forward to see how the memory of his uncle still has such a powerful hold on Fry.  confused
say what now

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« Reply #571 on: 02-10-2005 16:19 »

Yes, I WOULD like to know what happens to Katy and yes, I WILL send you that email!
Gorky

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« Reply #572 on: 02-10-2005 16:50 »
« Last Edit on: 02-10-2005 16:50 »

 
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Incidentally, does anyone know what I'm supposed to do when this thread hits 20 pages? I'm not really sure.

Well first, you'd have to congratulate yourself for reaching twenty pages. Then, you'd just open up a new thread (I'm thinking of "Hoorah, not-so-newbie fanfic!" for a name   wink), to continue posting your fics. No big deal, I guess.

 
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Oh, and I have a question for anyone with an opinion. Do you want to know what happens to Katy in the end? After all the excitement? Or do you not want to know. I have a short little scene in mind, but I'm not sure I should include it.

Well, I guess it depends. I would like to see it, I guess (as I'm sure it would be up to par with everything else in the fic). It's totally up to you...your fic, your rules.

Anyway, now I just wish Saturday was here, dammit! Eagerly awaiting more, as always!

EDIT: Just checked out the Valentines thread, and, shoot...I found out that I'm charming and quirky! Thanks Layla, you're much too kind--mentioning me in a poem that was too funny for words. Damn you and your greatness! (Um...that was a joke (not the "greatness" thing--the whole damning of your name and such). Hence this thing -->  tongue

Tee, hee, hee...bombastic...


NIC2001

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« Reply #573 on: 02-10-2005 18:46 »
« Last Edit on: 02-10-2005 18:46 »

Well Layla you win!

1- I can't wait for the rest of your fic. Lucky me, I will be working on Saturday, so if you post your next part before 5pm (Montréal- New York time zone) I will be able to read it. Otherwise I will have to wait until Monday.

2- I hope you’re happy, I will post the teaser of my fic today. So you (and all of you guy's)will be able to read it.
(here : http://www.peelified.com/cgi-bin/Futurama/4-001005-1/   )


Bye for now.
Futurama Nerd

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« Reply #574 on: 02-10-2005 21:08 »

Must...know...what...happens. ..to Katy! But if you don't think it would go good with the story, don't add it. Glad to see you recovering from your sickness, me too.  As for the poem...my god! It was so funny. Thank you so much. I'd write you a poem, but I can't really write   hmpf Once again, thanks and hope you get well past 20 pages   big grin

When life gives you lemons, throw it at the nearest person.
Nerd-o-rama

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« Reply #575 on: 02-10-2005 21:41 »

I think everyone would like to know what happens to Katy.  The question is, will you tell them?

Really, it depends on how big a deal you want to make out of her fate.  One short scene at the end would probably work, and tie up the emotions nicely.  However, knowing you, she's going to get a thirty page story all to herself sometime down the road.
PJ

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« Reply #576 on: 02-10-2005 21:56 »
« Last Edit on: 02-10-2005 21:56 »

i think finding out what happens to katy would be cool.

but as everyone else has said already this is your fanfic so you should decides if you want to put up with the trouble of the extra work and what ever else.


also sense you are sick and all.....did you take buckly's?
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hhmmmm so many clever things could be written here i just dunno what to put..........(sigh)
Layla50

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« Reply #577 on: 02-10-2005 23:43 »

I was just heading to bed when I peeked at this and I just had to respond.

 
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Originally posted by Nerd-o-rama:
One short scene at the end would probably work, and tie up the emotions nicely. 
That was basically what I was planning. (I can always count on you for a thoughtful response. Most of you readers actually. Thanks!
 
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However, knowing you, she's going to get a thirty page story all to herself sometime down the road.

Agh! Your rapier wit, it stings!  smile You do have me pegged, don't you? However, the story all to herself, will never never never in a million billion years happen. Never. Not ever. Nope. Heh, sorry. We'll probably never hear from her again after this story, unless it's a vague reference. It's because she's not a Futurama character. She's not one of the characters people are really interested in. It's all about Fry, Leela, Bender, etc. As much as I've liked the occasional fan written character, I would probably not be interested in them taking centre stage of a story. So, I'd never do it to anyone else.

Sorry, I have no idea why I went off on what was a joke, and a great one at that. Maybe I'm having a relapse.  wink

That said, since no one's objected, I'll keep the brief planned scene which will actually involve Fry and still be a bit ambiguous about what happens to her. I like mysteries.  smile Besides, it fits pretty well, since Fry doesn't know, and probably would never know too much about what happened to everyone he left behind. It'll always be a mystery to him.

Time for bed!  sleep

I love deadlines, especially the whooshing sound they make as they fly past my head. Douglas Adams
swidzi

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« Reply #578 on: 02-11-2005 02:58 »

Well can't wait till you update Layla!! And as for Katy part?? I think we all are quite interested in what happened to her, if not for her sake, than for the sake of Fry... I mean why is she so important to Fry and why it sadens him to talk about her...

Oh, and I've managed to get some sleep, thank you... But I'm still waiting for you to update... (only 15 hours [in Poland] to Saturday)
Gorky

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« Reply #579 on: 02-11-2005 20:24 »

This is total spam-o-rama (sorry...), but I figured I'd say it. Layla, I think an ambiguous ending to the whole Katy thing is a great idea, and would be better than wrapping the whole thing up in a neat little bundle. (I hate when a story that has been fantastic the whole way through feels the need to tie up everything neatly, not allowing the reader to even guess what may happen beyond the confines of the story. Total off-topic note: that's one of the reasons that I love books like "The Graduate" and "Flowers for Algernon" and, maybe to a lesser extent, "Catcher in the Rye"--the ambiguity.)

Anyway, can't wait for Saturday to be here. (techincally three-and-a-half more hours...whoo!) Can't wait to see what happens next!
Layla50

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« Reply #580 on: 02-12-2005 22:39 »

Spam or not, I thought it was an interesting connection there, Gorky (Glad you liked the poem by the way.)

I ended up busier than I'd hoped to be this weekend so this is a pretty short update, but if you like Nixon, you should be well pleased. Besides, you're all tired of drama and cliffies by now, right?

Part 32:

   Considering the complexity of the operation, the pieces fell into place with impressive speed and efficiency. Of course, that was all thanks to planning, very careful planning that had been set into motion more than a year ago. Like the boy scouts of his day, Nixon prided himself on being prepared. Oh, yes, it was certainly true that little Dickey Nixon had washed out of the scouts within a month of joining, thanks to a prank involving a watermelon and his handy Swiss Army knife, but he had learned something from that month. If anyone was going to wear the watermelon, it was going to be the guy who wasn’t ready for it.

   Teams of heavily armed commandos had received orders and entry points. Local cops were assigned to rerouting traffic away from key areas of New New York city. The whole operation was naturally a gross waste of taxpayer money.

   “Ah, it’s good to be Nixon today,” he sighed contentedly. The president was fairly relaxed, despite the flurry of activity his orders had sent sparking around the world. While waiting for a particular piece of good news, the dour man’s head had popped in an old werewolf movie, or rather, he’d had his current lackey pop one in.

   “Arrrrooooo!” howled the B-movie actor, to Nixon’s amusement. There was just something about werewolf movies that appealed to him.

   A thought occurred to the musing President. “Maybe I should look into brushing up my acting career once the dust from this project has settled.”

   The intercom beeped, distracting Nixon from imaginings of holo-stardom and glory. “Mr. President, the lab called, they say the modifications are complete.”

   “Arroo, very good, Bernice. Tell them I’m on my way.”

   “Yes, sir.”

   Turning his head slightly, Nixon bellowed at the sleepy-eyed man waiting patiently, “You heard me, let’s go!” With a start, the lackey rushed to comply, scooping up the jar and heading for the door with the president.

   “So, what would you say, evil genius or romantic lead?” Nixon asked him conversationally.

   “Uh…” Lackey fumbled for a reply and started to walk faster.
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   Nixon’s arrival at the high-tech lab hidden under the Lincoln’s head’s bedroom sent already busy scientists into a tizzy of activity. The sea of white lab coats was quite disorienting, but one separated from the crowd and approached the president.

   “Oh, sir, you’re here. Great!” The slender dark-haired man was grinning with obvious enthusiasm.

   “You’ve finished the project then? To my satisfaction?” Suspicion burned in Nixon’s eyes. He had not forgotten the last scientist who had promised results.

   But the middle-aged man was unphased by his employer’s dark expression. “I’m sure you’ll be pleased sir, as the project has exceeded all expectations. You see, we were coming at this from the wrong angle in the beginning. What we really needed was-”

   “Enough of your Tower of Babbling, Egghead, show it to me.” Nixon interrupted impatiently.

   "Right, right, sorry.” Egghead called over his shoulder as he beckoned eagerly to someone in the crowd. “Open it up!”

A large metal door swung open, knocking over a couple of unwary lab techs. Nixon chuckled evilly, but soon forgot about the unfortunate people as he stared up the impressive hulk of his massive robot body. A hush fell over the room as the technicians and robotisists waited for the Earthican President’s reaction.

   At first, Nixon could only choke and gibber in stunned surprise at what had been done to his beloved robot body. When he remained speechless for several seconds, the dark-haired man cautiously prompted him. “Sir?”

   The floodgates shattered and the president began howling in inarticulate fury. As one, the crowd of scientists edged back from the raging head. Uncertainly, Lackey tried to support Nixon by stamping his feet and waving the jar around, imitating a temper tantrum as best he could.

A particularly violent swing sent the president flying out of the top of the jar, bouncing and rolling across the floor. Unnerved lab techs skittered out of the way, and Lackey let out a horrified “eep!” before courageously rushing to retrieve the supreme ruler of planet Earth.   

   “Oh, sir! Sorry, sir, sorry, sorry!” Lackey babbled tearfully as he settled Nixon back into his jar. The riled up dictator rewarded his quick actions with several serious bites, each one sending agonized yips into the air, causing the small army of lab-coated workers to wince in sympathy. Finally, Egghead worked up the nerve to address the president.

   “Does it, does it fail to meet your expectations, President Nixon?” he squeaked out timorously. Cool eyes rolled upwards to glare at the scientist, but Lackey was trembling so violently that the effect was spoiled by splashing liquid.

   “Taxpayers paid for shock absorbers,” Nixon howled at poor Lackey, “so use them! You are not a paint mixer!” Gulping air, the miserable man flicked a switch on the jar and though he shook as forcefully as before, the president’s life support system was still. “Ah, that’s better,” Nixon sighed in relief, before glowering again at Egghead. “Now, what have you done to my beautiful body?!”

    “Only what you’ve asked us, sir!” the scientist exclaimed in quiet alarm. “It’s now fully protected against the hazardous atmosphere of the New New York sewers. You’ll have no problems with her down there now, sir.”

   “Her?” came the dangerous question.

   “Uh, sorry. I meant him, well, it, well, the robot body, sir.”

   Nixon decided to let the terminology issue slide for the moment. “And all these… modifications were necessary for that protection?” Nervously, Egghead nodded.

   “The two… protrusions on the chest?”

   “Yes, sir. They work together to create a field-”

   “And the rounding of the hip area?”

   “Yes, sir. That prevents-”

   “And the red colouring on the ends of the delicate finger like protrusions?”

   “Uh, yes sir. Those are panels for-”

   “Yes, yes. I can understand all of that, but what about the knitted sweater?”

   “Well, it’s not really a sweater, sir. Those fibres protect-”

   “and the ducklings on it, they’re necessary?”

   “Oh, yes. That." Egghead cringed in regret, "You see, sir, we had to send out to another organization for the fibrous covering. We weren’t really equipped for knitting, as I’m sure you can see.” Nixon grunted non-committally and the scientist continued, "And it turns out that the Nice Old Grannies Knitting Circle specializes in-”

   Nixon sighed in exasperation. “Alright, enough. I don’t have time for this. I have a subversive society to overrun, but when I get back, you and I are going to have a conversation about this.” There was murder in Nixon’s eyes and Egghead swallowed hard. “Turn it on, and I’ll take her, uh, it, for a test rampage.”

The scientist obediently ran the activation sequence that slaved the circuitry to Nixon’s nerve impulses. With a faint metallic groan, the robot leaned over and fit the president into the head jar interface. Nixon’s mood improved immediately. “Ah, yes, man. This is where Richard Nixon was born to be!” He laughed triumphantly as he aimed a terrible-looking weapon at the sickly-looking Lackey.

   Egghead quickly interfered. “Uh sir, we’ve prepared a rampage scenario for your enjoyment.” Nixon turned away from Lackey, looking positively perky. “Oh?”

   “Yes, sir. It’s a quiet suburban neighbourhood full of non-voters. If you’ll follow Reuban, here-” he gestured to another man in a lab coat. Still chuckling gleefully, Nixon and his massive robot body trotted off eagerly for the scenario.

   With the president safely occupied elsewhere, the scientists resumed their work, with the exception of Egghead who commiserated with the still petrified Lackey. “I’m thinking it might be wise for me to take my vacation early. I hear the inside of a neutron star is surprisingly tranquil this time of millennium.” That got a weak laugh out of Lackey.

   “Yeah, I’m beginning to understand why I get six months of stress leave for every two months on the job,” he murmured unsteadily before offering a rueful sigh. “Mom was right; I never should have dropped out of Suicide Booth Maintenance Technical School.”
   Egghead shook his head as crashes and screams came faintly to their ears. “Wouldn’t have done you any good. That’s where I did my undergraduate degree.” 
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say what now

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« Reply #581 on: 02-12-2005 23:05 »

You know, for such a little chapter I still feel like I've got so much to say...

 
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Besides, you're all tired of drama and cliffies by now, right?

NO!!! NEVER!!! NOOOOO!! But I'll forgive you because I laughed... out loud... a lot... during this chapter.

 
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“Arrrrooooo!” howled the B-movie actor, to Nixon’s amusement. There was just something about werewolf movies that appealed to him.

That is so... funnily... cute-ish.

 
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“Enough of your Tower of Babbling, Egghead, show it to me.”

Tower of Babbling... I love you  laff.

 
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As one, the crowd of scientists edged back from the raging head. Uncertainly, Lackey tried to support Nixon by stamping his feet and waving the jar around, imitating a temper tantrum as best he could.

Just the word "raging head" made me laugh for like a minute. Seriously. As for the rest of it, that was so funny and so clever and so... well, I could see it happening on the show for sure.

As for the whole robot thing... just know I was dying. And it was the good kind of dying.

(But now I've gone back to worrying about the cliffies and drama!! When are we gonna get another update, you busy popular fiend you?)
Venus

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« Reply #582 on: 02-12-2005 23:19 »

Tower of babbling??? Bwahahahaha!!

Feminized robot body?? EEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!

happyhappyhappy!! More!

On a side note i sent you an email a few days ago, just to make sure you got it.
Philp_J_Fry

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« Reply #583 on: 02-13-2005 00:01 »

Yaaay! Update. Great work, funny too.       Especially Nixon. Keep up the good work.

 
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 “Enough of your Tower of Babbling, Egghead, show it to me.”:


 laff This was my favorite part

 
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Besides, you're all tired of drama and cliffies by now, right?

What? Never, in fact, there should be more drama.  wink 
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« Reply #584 on: 02-13-2005 00:32 »

keep up the great work!
Lrrrr

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« Reply #585 on: 02-13-2005 01:06 »
« Last Edit on: 02-13-2005 01:06 »

On Part 31 and 32 on Page 15 on this tread, wouldn't that be Part 43 and 44? Part 42 was on Page 13 of this thread. Just thought I'd correct you (that is if you didn't mean to do that.    tongue) This is a really good Fanfic, I haven't read Part 32 or 44, what ever it is ment to be, yet. I read it was great, keep up the good work.
Nerd-o-rama

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« Reply #586 on: 02-13-2005 01:09 »

 
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“Arrrrooooo!” howled the B-movie actor, to Nixon’s amusement. There was just something about werewolf movies that appealed to him.
Had to quote that again.  Billy West would be proud of you.

The new body, of course, is introduced gradually enough and is so utterly random and unnecessary that it's absolutely hilarious.

I notice you're not giving page-long backstories to all of your minor characters now.  Are you getting impatient, or trying to tell us these techies won't last long? (Not that I mind the lack of background info, exactly. I'll take plot and jokes first every time.)

And is anyone else surprised that Wernstrom isn't involved in this scene somewhere?

Anyway, nice little cutaway.  Always good to keep an eye on your villains.
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« Reply #587 on: 02-13-2005 04:56 »
« Last Edit on: 02-13-2005 04:56 »

   
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“and the ducklings on it, they’re necessary?”

great!!!
nice old grannies knitting circle... i wonder what will be bender's reaction..
update!!
PJ

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« Reply #588 on: 02-13-2005 05:01 »

BOOYAH werewolf movies kick ass.

Nixon with a moded giant robot body about to go into the sewers to get the good guys.........this has got me wondering  if it's going to get funny or dramatic in the next part or if we're lucky maybe a little of both.

keep it coming layla big grin
Gorky

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« Reply #589 on: 02-13-2005 07:43 »

Hmm...let's see.

First I laughed, then I laughed again, then I laughed again, then I laughed...again.

Not much of a review, but there's not much to add to what everyone else has said. Your Nixon writing is hilarious (like Nerd-o-rama said, revealing the body so gradually (introducing Nixon's shock first, then showing what it was all about) was perfect).

Oh yeah, and here's my favorite bit...

 
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“Yes, yes. I can understand all of that, but what about the knitted sweater?”

“Well, it’s not really a sweater, sir. Those fibres protect-”

“and the ducklings on it, they’re necessary?”

“Oh, yes. That." Egghead cringed in regret, "You see, sir, we had to send out to another organization for the fibrous covering. We weren’t really equipped for knitting, as I’m sure you can see.” Nixon grunted non-committally and the scientist continued, "And it turns out that the Nice Old Grannies Knitting Circle specializes in-”

Perfect. Funny...sorta weird...and it gets the point out. Excellent job.

Layla50

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« Reply #590 on: 02-13-2005 11:43 »

Aw... thanks everyone! Naturally I'll be updating as soon as I can. Maybe by Tueday if I can manage it.

say what now:Oh, so you're not sick of dramas and cliffies. Okay then! 'Cause if you think I've run out of cliffies, you are quite mistaken. I've still got the "BIG" cliffhanger coming up, and several more besides.
You saying funnily cutish is funnily cutish.  smile But that was my tribute to Billy West(as N-o-r mentioned) and his saying that Nixon reminded him of a werewolf, and that's where 'arroo' came from.
You know, I thought the Tower of Babbling was such a lame play on words that I almost cut it. I originally had it as a Babylon 5 joke, but Nixon would have missed that show. Glad you liked it!
I'm glad the sillyness came out visual enough for you to see it.I was a little concerned over the feminized robots. I'm definately expanding my comedy borders in this part.
It's nice to be a busy, popular fiend, but everyone's is always yelling at you.  frown Just kidding, sorta!  big grin

Venus: You liked the babbling line too? I gotta be careful about what I think about cutting! I'm so glad you enjoyed that. Isn't it nice to relax and have fun once in a while?
On your side note, the email about the part you thought might resemble some part of my story? 'Cause, I got it, read it, loved it, and replied to it. Maybe it didn't get through? *Worries*

Philp_J_Fry: Another babbling fan! Wow! I am never trusting my own opinion again... today. And don't worry, there will be more drama, all the drama in the world!!

Sorry. smile

blackkatnorn: Oh, thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed that. The irregular posters (to this thread) always pop out when it's a comedy update. Clool!

Lrrrr:You may think that I'm just hopelessly confused when it comes to parts but... you'd be completely right. I have know idea where I am. Help!  wink

N-o-r: Hey, buddy. Read your post in the rant thread, so sorry about that. Really, that's so frustrating. I hope you can escape soon. (And good luck in the drudgery of classes!)

I was experimenting in the realm of humour that Gorky and Bergey do so well, wackiness! It was fun.
 
About the backstories, well, you know it's bad when you are tired of your own writing, but in this case it was deliberate. I was writing most from Nixon's perspective (sort of, in an omniscient sense) and I figured he wouldn't care enough about the characters to know anything about them, so they became Lackey and Egghead. I still tried to give them a bit of personality.

They aren't particularly important anyway, poor fellas. And there are very critical, interesting reasons for why Wernstrom wasn't included, and those reasons certainly do not include me forgetting his existance. How ridiculous!

The next time we see Nixon, he'll be showing the unfortunate mutants who's President, so I wanted a little set up to that.

P.S. There is a purpose to that sweater, kinda.

morbo it: Ooh, right! Bender, I knew I left him around here somewhere...  smile I'll have to think of something fun to do with him.

PJ:I think you'll be lucky PJ! Thanks for the encouragement!

Gorky: So what are you saying? I'm a one-note wonder?! Is that what you're saying, 'cause I think that's what I heard! Nah, I'm just kidding, you're alright! I'm really glad you liked the body reveal. I really had fun writing this part. It's cool to be weird sometimes. I felt like an explorer, wandering through your territory.
AsaB

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« Reply #591 on: 02-13-2005 13:41 »

I stay away from PEEL for a about week, and have a few lovely chapters waiting for me! Yay! Well, 'lovely' may not be the best word. But damn, that Important Chapter on the previous page has got to be one of, heck, if not the best chapter so far. All that tension that's building up is brilliant, you're doing it wonderfully.
And your new chapter was hilarious! The way the feminized robot body was descriped was too funny. The knitted sweater just floored me.
Futurama Nerd

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« Reply #592 on: 02-13-2005 14:32 »

I can't believe I missed this update! I know this has been mentioned before, but....
 
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Nixon decided to let the terminology issue slide for the moment. “And all these… modifications were necessary for that protection?” Nervously, Egghead nodded.

“The two… protrusions on the chest?”

“Yes, sir. They work together to create a field-”

“And the rounding of the hip area?”

“Yes, sir. That prevents-”

“And the red colouring on the ends of the delicate finger like protrusions?”

“Uh, yes sir. Those are panels for-”

“Yes, yes. I can understand all of that, but what about the knitted sweater?”

“Well, it’s not really a sweater, sir. Those fibres protect-”

“and the ducklings on it, they’re necessary?”
That was really funny, and the whole thing was very well writtin. But, like N-o-R said, I'm surprised that Wernstrom isn't in this chapter. Keep 'em coming Layla!   smile
Venus

Urban Legend
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« Reply #593 on: 02-13-2005 17:21 »

Ack! I didn't get your email reply! Resend! Resend!
Gorky

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« Reply #594 on: 02-13-2005 18:06 »

 
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So what are you saying? I'm a one-note wonder?! Is that what you're saying, 'cause I think that's what I heard!

Wh-what? No! I was just saying that...um...hey, look over there, a kitty! *runs away*

 
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Nah, I'm just kidding, you're alright!

Oh, thank God...*runs back*

 
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I'm really glad you liked the body reveal. I really had fun writing this part.

I did like it...very much. It's so great that you can make something like that so funny. And it's always great when the writer actually likes writing what they're writing...if that makes sense.

 
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It's cool to be weird sometimes.

It's even cooler being weird all the time (*points to self*).

 
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I felt like an explorer, wandering through your territory.

That made me feel all special for some reason. My next update is just for you!

Um, anyway, so this isn't considered total spam, I just have to say that the cliffies and drama are what makes this so great, and the humor is just the icing on the cake. Seriously, if this whole fic had not one joke in it, it would still be one of the best fics I've ever read. But, the humor is what seperates this from the other fics out there (and the unbridled brilliance of the writing--but again, that's just icing on the cake). Can't wait for the next part, as always.

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« Reply #595 on: 02-14-2005 12:50 »
« Last Edit on: 02-14-2005 12:50 »

Ok, so Nixon has a super fembot body now.
How in hell will he fit in the sewers in is big robot body???    confused
Did they make it smaller? (Maybe that's why they had to "upgrade" the body the way they did)    wink

Keep it up.

Btw, about the -True love kiss from Leela-
Is it still in the story or did you change it? Don't tell me if it’s in... No! Tell me... no don't tell... yes tell... Arroooo!!! Oh no, the Nixon syndrome got me ahhhhh!!!  (Run’s away)

(Run back in) Layla, I hope you liked the first part of my fic, if you did not read it, here it is:

( http://www.peelified.com/cgi-bin/Futurama/4-001005-1/  )

Please leave me feedback on it.

Bye for now.
Procyon

Bending Unit
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« Reply #596 on: 02-14-2005 20:01 »

Darn, everybody has mentioned all the good parts! But I'm sure Layla won't made getting more praise about how wonderful her writing is  wink

I love  love the whole new robot body. I can picture that scene perfectly in my head. I especially loved how you foreshadowed it.
 
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“It’s now fully protected against the hazardous atmosphere of the New New York sewers. You’ll have no problems with her down there now, sir.”

“Her?” came the dangerous question.

“Uh, sorry. I meant him, well, it, well, the robot body, sir.”

Plus this line that continues with the joke
 
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“Turn it on, and I’ll take her, uh, it, for a test rampage.”

Once again, fabulous. Somehow, I can just imagine Bender's gaydar is going to be in this story down the line. The whole Billy West/werewolf tribute was also excellent. I have to say, this is definitly one of my favorite part. I like the drama, but this little break just makes this part so much sweeter, you know?

Wow, that was a long post. (Or atleast it felt like it typing it.) Anyways, Happy Valentine's Day!
say what now

Bending Unit
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« Reply #597 on: 02-14-2005 21:24 »

Happy V-Day, Procyon, my lovely PEELentine  big grin.

Layla, you lovely one, you really have to be careful about parts you want to cut! It seems like everytime you come close to doing it, people fall all over the said line. So if you don't like it, we probably do (maybe we're lame and you're hip... but no matter how lowly we are, fans come first, right? :P).

"BIG" cliffhanger, you say? I can't wait!
jubei

Delivery Boy
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« Reply #598 on: 02-15-2005 21:00 »

grettings layla it is me raziel i read the update that you posted on the 13 of february and it was really good and like i said in the e-mail that i sent you it has left me hungry for more oh and if have any free time or any thing i'd love to here from you oh and i have question how did you get a hold of chapter 1 any ways.
Futurama Nerd

Professor
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« Reply #599 on: 02-15-2005 21:08 »

Could you use periods please? Anyways, welcome to PEEL jubei. Enjoy your stay at Nerd-aw, forget it. I've been doing this for way to long.
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